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Brain Storm
Brain Storm
Am I human or alien? or just stupid for sayin it
Or am I just lost in life, confused with a alias
Every vision is horrid, I sit and witness it, morbid
Lookin out the window tryin to picture a portrait
I fear that time will slay and kill my mind an brain
Leavin me dry an slain! it's as clear as night an day
I aproach every rhyme, like my flow never dies
With one focus thats only to know if I'm right
If theres a note then I'll write I've chosen a scribe
But just know that I might explode when I try
And find myself closer then within holdin the mic
They say I'ma mechincal force on a plan to get worse
Diagrammed on a graph, trapped on this earth
The words that I speak can turn a verse to unique
Melting the ice, and leavin you burin with heat
As days go pass I see rust on the blades I have
So I absorb wisdom an knowledge from ancient facts
I scribble and jot very simple riddles and plots
While sittin on a cloud with a pencil from God
Is a religion a belief or just a mission we need?
I've studied diffirent temples and visions of kings
Ex is just speakin his mind w/o speakin, you mind?
With enough oxygen to speak w/o breathin inside
I write music for fans, but I might use it to rap
Purchase a studio along with a mic, blueprint an amp
Every diamond is crystal my mind is a pistol
Alligned in the sky just like that eye on the temple
I'm wise with the mental, I rise to the tempo
To surprise all the ken folks, despise all the demos
I'm prone to swallow spits, known to vomit kids
Clones and monster souls with out common sense
I follow a path, broken hearted: bottle of wrath
Only with a promise to stop the problem of wack
My conscience is black; locked in a coffin with rats
I came more then vicious my pain tore my writtens
An left me under a cloud as I brain stormed the lyrics
© 2003 - 2005 Ex Calibur
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spell am I correctly then I'll read it, becaue no one says "I am I human or alien" or "I am I just lost in life."
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nice flow man, you had good vocab and had real good rhyme scheme. You had good use of literary devices.
9/10. well done
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This wanst perfect, ive seen better shit from you before main. or ex, whatever you liked to be called now n days. your structure was fine, the multies are your strong point as usuall, i felt like you needed to slow down on them at points, use more punctuation..the imigiry was nice, you got your point across.
overall nice peice. good job man.
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Thanks, Whats your alias?
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A line and a half saying "This was an ok peace, Coulda been a little better and longer but none of the less good drop." isn't decent feedback. Decent feedback is talking about the topic, the use of imagery and vocab, the rhyme scheme and structure. Please edit in some links where you've left decent feedback or this will be closed.
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i thought the bars were extremely short, which, in turn made the flow
choppy...i wasn't feelin this at all....peace
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STFU you wack textcee, How can short bars make the flow choppy???, With your wack ass net crew fuck outta here. So stretched bars help the flow??? Umm I'd love to hear you on the mic. Cant believe you said that to me Son you even know who I'am? Don't ever post in my threads agian go to the front lines and go text battle just like all those other wack fags in there.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...44#post3404544
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Ayo This Was Aiight, Nice Flow, Could Work For Audio, Keep It Up, Flowin That Fire Main, I Enjoy Your Work...
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rhymes were good..impressed.i really am...
vocab was aiight..could have been upped
flow was very smooth and strucutre was even
topic was coo..i liked it...i thought it was creative
and even interesting...nicely done
overall this was a good drop..keep it up..peace
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This Peice Could've Been Alot Better,Lines Were Very Short Plus Nothing Caught My Eye....
Keep Them Moving Though...
-Teer
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I liked it. Good use of lyrics. You flowed well and spit the trues shit. No forced rhymes was good. It was like I was readin a book. That shit was good and vibed well. U can do better on vocab but ya did ya job man. Great job and great structure.
