Wrath of War 2 (The Final Chapter) Wordplay back 2 back

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=206445




My thought-train is hurtling forth-battling forces-dark
Trepidation, unlock visions, tour places cursed & stark
Realism, unleashing the stampede of a thousand horses
Deaths in the desert, vultures feed on children corpses
Raged-rebels damn politics verses plight of the ethnic’
Simple spiteful shit, this is ice water spiked with arsenic
Poison plans in the hands of the idle, tools for the devil
Troops murder for medals, alert terror suicidal threat level
Raises a panic, heavy metal flame spit through your jacket
Scars & slashes, hostility torn city: scarlet blood splashes
Soldiers return to ashes & dust, stone-tomb open & shut
Closed cavity, until the dead-living resurrect as zombie
The Godlike uphold shields: taking chagrin on the chin
Guiltless perish people puzzled, trapped in with the link
Swim-or-sink in the dark on the brink of acts-heartless
Trip-up adversaries vibrate like spark-off semtex charges
Crisis boils starving village nigaz reap near zilch for toil
Destroying acres of soil fertile while they digging for oil
Nucleic turmoil crumbling concrete, assume for mass mess
Worthy of death, the holocaust finale moves into aspect


War faces east to west, a contest of blood-sport
We caught up in this madness...abort...ABORT.

The Wrath of War.

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238278
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=237944

decent....better then elevate.......but........................Wheres the wordplay....I think your confused on what wordplay is.......wordplay=play on words

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Originally Posted by Mic_Dareall

decent....better then elevate.......but........................Wheres the wordplay....I think your confused on what wordplay is.......wordplay=play on words

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read it properly


especialy the first line


wordplay back to back


reversed wordplay

study the science man





example.. cliche..."train of thought"

i wrote-
My thought-train is hurtling forth-battling forces-dark


dark-forces... becomes forces-dark


and the whole piece tries to follow the same pattern of wordplay in places


any more comments???????????????????/



ups

any ups

like this joint!!!!!!!!!!!!!

thats not wordplay kid..
...... "My train of thought has lost its tracks"...<--wordplay..

...flipping words around is not wordplay

worplay = play on words....playing on the MEANING of words

lolz.. do u know what "play" means

Good stuff...I loved the whole thing it had a good topic...you stayed on track...part 1 was kind of "Meh" compared to this...but they were good...this one had more multis while the other had more metas....you seemed to split the wordplay into groups....It was a good concept...Nice work here and keep it up....

Comment me on "The Art Of War"......Peace good stuff...keep writing...

good looks out blud

uppety ups

uhm! not much feed on this then?


opp

good topic

get out the - though. i learned that the hard way lol, damn nice topic.... good flow and multies

hit up Im With You.... or die

safe blud.. the piecer you got on the page i hit already

pz

this was pretty nice man... flow was there..wordplay was aight...work on incorporating bigger vocab and more multis..overall pretty nice joint

peace

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Originally Posted by cephas

this was pretty nice man... flow was there..wordplay was aight...work on incorporating bigger vocab and more multis..overall pretty nice joint

peace

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uhm thanks i guess

but this had more than enuff multies for me.. no use in forcing in some crap that could mess it up

i just flow with the story and dont force anything in


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