Playas Destiny Pt. 1

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Playas Destiny Pt. 1

It was Buckhead in the fall, ridin in the heavy Chevy...
T.I. blastin, my eye caught a glemce of somethin sexy...
wide hips, lips perfect, first time I eva got nervous...
got out to talk, started slurrin, damn, can't figure out what my next word is...
still got her math, she turned to walk away, I felt worthless...
my heart told me to wife her, my brain told me to smash her...
I beat bitches, treat bitches like shit and don't think twice after...
dialed her number bout the stroke of twelve, her moms answered raisin hell...
told me she was sleep, so I hung up, smashed in the number to her cell...
she answered in a low tone, I dropped the phone... still nervous...
she had my heart beatin fast, my veins were twistin like cursive...
still I played it calm, eased the tention with my charming voice...
speech patterns changed, I assume she was gettin moist...
I ran nasty game, she was fallin for it, what a gullable bitch...
from dat moment on I knew in no time, she'd be all ova my dick...
in tha mornin I awoke, checked my phone, two missed texts...
it was ol' girl, only thing in the world I was thinkin was sex...
so I dial her number, she answered in the happiest of moods...
I asked her what she was doin, she said chillin wit her crew...
so I asked if she could spare some time, she said it was fine...
now my dicks dancin up and down as I plan to rearrange her spine...
so I showered up and brush my teeth, hop in the seat...
thinkin bout positions dat her pussys gonna get beat...
as I pull up to the mall, I see her, my knees started to get weak...
and when she left her girls and jumped in man I could hardly speak...
managed to say hello and kiss her on the cheek, pants startin to rise...
so wit one quick motion I switched gear and then started to drive...
I arrived at her residence, parked and hopped out...
took a glance at the drive way nobody home at her house...

:::To Be Continued:::

v Links to parts 2 & 3 v

Playas Destiny Pt. 2
Playas Destiny Pt. 3

ok might not be tha most complex piece..bu mos def ill..good imagery...tight emotion..i liked tha wordplay....good rhyme scheme..everything was pretty tight...a few bars were too stretched..other than that..it was ill...

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Originally Posted by Dirty South

she answered in a low tone, I dropped the phone... still nervous...
she had my heart beatin fast, my veins were twistin like cursive...

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fav line..cant wait to see tha second part...if you havent..will you vote on my topical battle against kartoon..the link is in my sig..and hit up the link in my sig titled..when the sky falls..its an om piece

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caught my attention from tha jump, good topic. Some parts seemed to drag on, but overall good drop. Ready to read #2.

Yo pretty good piece. I was really feelin it. It had pretty good vocab, flow n all. Its juss dat da stretch lines messed u up a bit but hey i do da same thing so not complainin. But all in all, good drop. Keep em comin. Please Hit up da links in my sig. They seriously need closin. 1

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It pretty damn decient i liked it

i aint like dis shit, i hate OM's about girls, srry homie but it just aint me, u didnt use alot of wordplay, only a lil bit of vokab, srry homie, didnt like it.

That was tight man, that was some good word play. In got lost a little, but then it came together. Good shit

yea this was nice.........good structure and floe..........keep droppin......