--Certain Fear--

heres my transaction,dont exist it never happened.....
seat belts fastened,plus tha floats that ya strappin....
scared of heights,physicaly impaired from flight.....
skin is pale and white,youll never fail to fight.....
you feel tha plane speedin up,now ya needin chuck....
kneelin below tha cielin,throwin up,nausea showin up....
i see visions of blowin up,tha izms been slowin ya.....
nows tha need for growin up,ya got a certain fear....
its "behind tha curtains clear",new version here.....
tha plane bouncin up and down, its turbulence.....
im checkin all tha verbs i spent,those herbal scents.....
intoxicatin ya brain,improvs aint makin ya sane....
you fear tha crash,and probably fear tha drown....
ya fear explosion,ya stayin near tha ground.....
tha plane cant steer around,your flight is under way.....
watchin tha lightnin and hearin tha thunder play.....
some people puked and some just slumbered away....
no sleep anxiety settin in,when is this flight is set to end.....
tha fear and pressure,check my grin,wet with gin.....
hope one day as a vet im in,so i correct tha sin.....
as tha plane decends,he shakes and chokes to breathe.....
cakes his throat with sleeze,whos scared to float its me.

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=204153

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Liked reading this one. The flow was on point the whole time except for like two off track lines nearing the end. Other than that, i like the word usage in this, we don't see that much of it nowadays in the rap scene. Be on the look out.

thanks for tha reply/s....^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

The imagery was good and i felt the emotion. The concept is original and u used it well even though there is not much importance to it. you lacked metaphors which is attracting at times when reading topicals and such. flow and wording was alright.
keep it up.

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thanks for the replies.uppin.~1~

checkin to see if i can even post...and uppin.~1~

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uppin for replies and critique.~1~

its sad how many people sleep in OM...stop sleepin..^^^