The Walk (Dope!)

incase u guys wanna follow the beat I used to write this song I wrote it to "Between The Lines by Atmosphere"

Verse #1:
well I didn’t know it, I never knew it till the hot sun
dawned on my face, waking the vented cocked gun
of life, step once and step twice towards the next day and night
cuz in this dream, a reality as to what it would seem
capturing the memories of my life as it passes me
and then I stand stripped, ripped torn from my grip
until I can feel myself slip into the next drift

I feel as if caught in a waking dream so seamless
it makes it hard for me to believe that I can feel this
so I walk down this road the sun bathed the streets
capturing the images that I whisper when I speak
and so solemn the atmosphere resonates it’s moonlit glow
the northern lights dancing above the trails of white snow
and it was then that I saw u standing aside from the distance
vibrant and graceful with the blonde hair testing it’s existence

I couldn’t begin to look upon your sporadic glow
helpless I couldn’t notice the warmth surrounding the snow
and I questioned my belligerence to attempt a discussion
pushing mind past my fears approaching the circumference
of this circular emotion, loaded to the fragrance of lust
bottled and pushed with the perfume you bust
and I’m captured instantaneously, drawn to the smell
but dawn breaks and I wake thinkin “what the hell”

Hook: (x2)
the walk of sleep dreaming of are fake reality
the walk of our life waking to a technicality
but sometimes we wish to never wake up
cuz dreams are to good to be true like what the fuck

Verse #2:
so it was over, ended just like that, next time
I’ma smash my alarm clock with a baseball bat
cuz I’m just so sick of the living life with this 9 to 5 job
minimum wage hard to pay rent and I’m livin like a slob
so what’s left for there to do
take a shower tie up my shoes
grab my keys get my beater and leave
just another day thinkin “man I wanna sleep”
but I get back home late, work tied up my pace
sit down with some rye and a cigarette to chase
and just think, think about the girl in my dreams
think about how it would be skinny dippin in the sea

........................ until I slipt back into my sleep

Hook: (x2)
the walk of sleep dreaming of are fake reality
the walk of our life waking to a technicality
but sometimes we wish to never wake up
cuz dreams are to good to be true like what the fuck

Verse #3:
the setting darkness enveloping my room
the blue light from the blinds glooming with the mood
the smell of candle incense burning with a soft light
swelling the room with the most pleasurable delight

and so it happened, there I was next to this beauty
in the comfort of my bed feeling so truly
blessed, as she dragged her fingers across my naked chest

I breathed deep to the sensational touch
reaching over to grab everything that I must
thinking to myself that “I just can’t get enough”

so after a brief moment we kissed and cuddled
........ snuggled with each other ever so subtle
dying for this moment to never end
remembering “this dream is reality my friend”

so morning rolls around and I sit and I wait
for my baby girl to awake for the breakfast I make
then I see her approach downstairs from up
and I gaze upon her figure thinkin “man I have the luck”

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come on ppl stop sleepin and drop me some feed.

chorus was tight and the verse was preaty good cheah that was str8 ight ight then

quit sleepin ppl. uppin this.

come on ppl stop sleepin on this. drop me feedback

*drops feedback*

ight this wasnt DOPE but was a decent drop man...im impressed you need more vocabulary and to structure it abit bteer but yeah good work man.

peep my shit

yea I know just put that there because my OM's constantly get slept on. I figure if u at least got somethin there it might actual appeal to someone to at least check it out and with this piece I wasn't really goin for a full out drop of vocabulary it's meant to be more of just a slower pace just somethin to kinda kick back and relax to. but thanx for the feed lookin for some more.

all good man...i havnt seen anything from you and wasnt expecting as good so man you done well you got high potential just take into account what i said.,..good looks

hit my shit up please.