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Fake Mcs
It's strange you pretend your a thug but you still cant cross the street
If somebody handed you a gun you would turn cold and toss the heat
You couldnt scare the little kids on your street im stressing worlds
You out battle me hahaha theres more chance of jacko molesting girls
No go back to your bedroom cause you'll be dead soon so take the advice
I got mad flow your lyrics make no sense what so ever like dating a dyke
Your rhymes are so bad they need to redefine the term wack
Give up your dreams and retire so just listen and learn facts
your the type to go jail scream and shout and plead for security
Ha ha ha i cant stop laughing you talk tough but you just out of puberty
Im warchild blessed with raw style all the rap vets scream
When i rap you won a battle once but that was a wet dream
I love props but the one thing i hate is envy
Pick up the flow if you cant you a fake mc
Yo you best bounce cause where i come from we stab gays ive had more court apperances than whitney houstons had rehab stays
This is just a verse of mostly frresstyle shit i was typing this as i was thinking it im just bored as hell flow as nice its just a little verse for you fake thugs who are 15 acting hard and talking shit when you know you a pussy lol.
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nice drop yo liked ur punches and tha delivery to them and ur word structure and flow was pretty good but u need to work more on vocab choices so tha verse can sound intellectual u know but dont overdue it so u know how to ryme overall rate- 8.0/10 good job really take my hat off to u if i had one lol
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yo ^^ word...good drop...however im 15 :(
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ok this are a little different than the other OMs i read from you but i can still see your style:the piece flows nice to the eye,the rhymescheme is ok(could be improved),and you have funny lines,but you had other much better in other pieces you wrote than in this one.this seemed and i think it is a keystyle...i like the topic and the way you transmit the messege(the idiot kids here on OM acting like they'r the shit).ok..what else?vocabulary was kinda simple but i noticed you like it more that way,so do it the way you like it.Because you're writting mostly for you.the structure was good,some multis...overal a nice read!keep it up!
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not bad at all...do like the style play in the verse...good shit
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you not bad at all good work
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Appreciate the feed this was pretty much a little freesstyle piece uppin once more.
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nice shit....it flow good...u stay on topic and shit....and it's tight 4 a lil keystyle.....I like the start of the verse...
"It's strange you pretend your a thug but you still cant cross the street
If somebody handed you a gun you would turn cold and toss the heat"
thats hot....
i'ma drop soon ...hit me back
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Seen better, seen worse
Good job this was summat quick coz the structure was bad. But the flow wasnt effected that much and you hit some pretty decent punchlines. I think if you say and wrote somethin' meaningful and took your time you could go far...you have the potential to do so.
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