...Had To Hide My Love Away.

...Had To Hide My Love Away.

- 1 -
Here I stand... Head in hand. I turn my face to the wall.
If she's gone... I can't go on living anymore.
Everywhere... People stare, each and every day.
I can see them laugh at me, and I hear them say...
HEY, you've got to hide your love away.
HEY, you've got to hide your love away.
Here I Stand... Lonely, nobody knows me.
Gun In Hand... My only friend, it still owes me.
Hopefully with the same venom that supposedly took you from me...
I'll take away all your pain... And force it all on me.
...Had to hide my love away.
...Had to hide my love away.
It was always about you. Living life without you is so lonely.
I yearn for you to hold me like you never did,
I want you to console me for every little thing.
You told me once 'You have to sieze the moment...
If you want it hold onto it and never let go of it.'
I know you didnt know it but you were my moment...
The chance... I know I've blown it, but a minute was all I asked.
This is all in the past, but the hurt lasts and still cuts me.
I'm cursed by your glassy stare as you lay down in front of me.
...I told you not to run from me.
When I needed you to comfort me you'd just bleed and look up at me.
I needed my friend aswell as the heart that you took from me.
...I told you not to push me.
Why couldn't you just sit and listen instead of wishin' you were with him?
Why did you create this distance between a man and a mistress?
Why is this so hard when the last thing you did was punch me?
Its because I look at my scars and remember bluntly...
...I told you to love me.

- 2 -
Here I stand... Head in hand. I turn my face to the wall.
If she's gone... I can't go on living anymore.
Everywhere... People stare, each and every day.
I can see them laugh at me, and I hear them say...
HEY, you've got to hide your love away.
HEY, you've got to hide your love away.
Here I Stand... Lonely, nobody knows me.
Gun In Hand... My only friend, it still owes me.
Hopefully with the same venom that supposedly took you from me...
I'll take away all your pain... And force it all on me.
...Had to hide my love away.
...Had to hide my love away.
I had a love hidden deeper than our bond, just as strong.
I hid it all along fearing it was wrong.
The longer I held onto it, the stronger the hurt grew.
Under a spell... Cursed through my soul with love for you.
With visions of what I would do... Images of you saying you already knew.
Saying all that we've been through was leading to this moment...
I dreamt of you telling me to hold it, never let go of it.
Control it, own it. Show it that you derserve it.
Never desert it, nor hurt it. Work with it to further its purpose.
This dream was so vivid, I wasn't nervous... Feeling impervious to pain.
Now I feel worthless, careless, insane.
I heard the words you were saying, so plane and so meaningful.
So painful, so beautiful.... So heignous, so new to you.
So crutial, so minimal. So sinfully synical, so blisteringly cold.
I listened close... Envogued by all the meanings of the word 'no.'
A mess of deep feelings, and seething wreck of misleadings... I couldn't let you go.

- 3 -
Here I stand... Head in hand. I turn my face to the wall.
If she's gone... I can't go on living anymore.
Everywhere... People stare, each and every day.
I can see them laugh at me, and I hear them say...
HEY, you've got to hide your love away.
HEY, you've got to hide your love away.
Here I Stand... Lonely, nobody knows me.
Gun In Hand... My only friend, it still owes me.
Hopefully with the same venom that supposedly took you from me...
I'll take away all your pain... And force it all on me.
...Had to hide my love away.
...Had to hide my love away.
Why do I feel like its my fault... is it really?
I didnt ask for you to fear me, I asked you to need me.
In the past you would hear but at that time you wouldnt come near me.
You peered gleefully into my chest knowing you possessed my heart freely...
You blessed me with false expression, then found an obsession to plead to me.
I was weakening to your pleas and beginning to ease,
Until I detected sarcasm in your whispered screams of 'please.'
It was easy to be fooled, you knew I was blinded by love.
And you used mistrust as a fuel and couldn't get enough.
You pushed me to the edge and then watched me fall...
You pulled your own trigger with that last call.
Telling me that you would love me...
...You just couldn't stop lying.
The only time I lstenened for you crying...
....Was when I watched you dying.

- 4 -
Here I stand... Head in hand. I turn my face to the wall.
If she's gone... I can't go on living anymore.
Everywhere... People stare, each and every day.
I can see them laugh at me, and I hear them say...
HEY, you've got to hide your love away.
HEY, you've got to hide your love away.
Here I Stand... Lonely, nobody knows me.
Gun In Hand... My only friend, it still owes me.
Hopefully with the same venom that supposedly took you from me...
I'll take away all your pain... And force it all on me.
...Had to hide my love away.
...Had to hide my love away.
I no longer have the will to survive, I find life so deprived now.
I just don't feel alive anymore. I feel left out, tired out.
How do I try to fight against ghosts I invited into my mind?
Is this bullet where I'll find all that I left behind?
If I take the trigger and pull it... Will the signs blind me with answers?
The chance is that this rancid black heart will be handed to you gracefully.
One last time you will face me... Be hastily put against me.
See the mind that wastefully negates me, full of hate and complacency.
Watch my heart racingly beat impatiently, then make me wait...
Take control of the moment, hold it. Take the belated weight off your shoulder...
Hold me on the cliffedge of my sanity and push me over.
Could you kill me?... What if I pleaded?
If I needed to stop living my life, would you make me lead it?
If I bleeded in front of you and my feelings confronted you...
What would you wanna do if I started to run from you?
What if I cornered you and gave you the gun...?
Would you take it happlily and gently scream run?
If you had the chance to kill me would you?
Knowing that I love you, would you let the bullet subdue my pain?
Make us swap places in these roles played the same again?

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Taken from The Beatles song 'Hide Your Love Away'

A hella long read, but if you've read this far hopefully you've read the whole piece and are willing to drop feed!! Took me a good few hours to write this, so I'd like some decent feed...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176592
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ill piece man.first i wanna say it was a great idea to take it from the beatles.they're classic!a long read,but didn't bug me at all.really could feal it,the deep emotions ya laid,the sorrow felt like poaring from each line,really dug deep...and what i liked the most is the way ya expressed yar pain,so well transmited in me,every line seemed to empasize the sorrow mo n mo.vocab was good,structure good,some good multis in there:I dreamt of you telling me to hold it, never let go of it.
Control it, own it. Show it that you derserve it.
Never desert it, nor hurt it. Work with it to further its purpose."-short ideas,but with much power in them,much fealing:the way of describin them feelings,especialy in this part,was great.the short ideas laid down good stick better in the head of the reader and tend to transmit better the message.great drop man!

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176263

Damn this was pretty good. I know that you got the concept from the beatles and thats cool. I think that you did a really nice job on this piece and the emotion was real nice. good job.

Thanks a lot,
I appreciate the fact that its a long piece but I put a lot of work into it and Im glad that you like it.

Any1 else?

damn, it takes a lot to post some stuff like this... tightwork dawg, i'm feeling this. real nice flow imo.

Um, thanks.

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I ment to leave feed on this yesterday, i got distracted i guess. so i read it again, the emotion in here was just awsome lol. i liked the whole concept of it, i haven 't heard the beatles song, but im sure you did better on this then they did lol. it was long, but it didn 't bother me, everything was just good on this. everything in this flowed very well, multis were there. vocab wasn 't to strong in here but it didn 't matter, the emotion made up for it. there was alot of lines i liked


heard the words you were saying, so plane and so meaningful.
So painful, so beautiful.... So heignous, so new to you.
So crutial, so minimal. So sinfully synical, so blisteringly cold.
I listened close... Envogued by all the meanings of the word 'no.'
A mess of deep feelings, and seething wreck of misleadings... I couldn't let you go.

^i liked these, they were very describin and it all flowed well


You pushed me to the edge and then watched me fall...
You pulled your own trigger with that last call.
Telling me that you would love me...
...You just couldn't stop lying.
The only time I lstenened for you crying...
....Was when I watched you dying.

^those ended verse 3 very good

Would you take it happlily and gently scream run?
If you had the chance to kill me would you?
Knowing that I love you, would you let the bullet subdue my pain?
Make us swap places in these roles played the same again?

^these were also good, but i think you could have finished the whole peice a little better. but this peice was awsome nonetheless. i was feeling the emotion and everything else in this peice, every verse was good. i wouldn 't be surprised to see this nominated for open mic of the month... Keep writin, i 'll be lookin out for more peices from you.

Ok thanks man, means a lot that you don't like me yet you say that... Lol, seriously tho, thanks :thumbup:

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hey i read this before and loved the concept of it, but i hadnt heard the beatles classic (im deprived i guess) so i didnt really compare it to anything just saw it as a stand alone piece...Stuff of this length does take a long while to write and it is because of the length that a lot of people choose to ignore artistry of this type. People do it to me, they do it to everyone..any way it was a good piece and feeling the topic ...reply to mine wen i actually write summat lol

this was nice, not outstanding but a good read.. goed usage of rhyme and vocab`. ermotion was there thru out the piece .. long as fuck tho! try too put all your emotion and everything that your trying too say in a shorter verse and you will become doper and more people will read/reply .. its not about the quantity but .. ; )

keep it up.

I liked it quite a bit, it's good that you put time into it because that made it a much better piece than others. It is a bit of a played topic though, but you had good structure and good flow. Your concept development was pretty much on par, and you had good vocabulary. Props to you on this drop.

Thank y'all

Up like Credz over a picture of Holly........

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