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Acceptance
I know this is long but I spent some time on this and I need some feedback! So please help me out and read it.. Never know you might find it interesting or something...
Acceptance
Endless weight of nothing,
in this quest for something.
We seek the keys of life,
unleash the lease on our lives.
Split second to the left,
hit uppercut to the chest.
Bucking like a donkey,
as my legs curve like a palm tree.
Infiltration to my mind,
as my deepest theories unwind.
Assault from governmental figures,
as they interpret my thoughts in figures.
Invincible fortress of thought,
something our leaders thought could be sought.
Conspiracy theorists see this as a time of retribution,
its the time of destitution...
Isn't it clear this is the revolution?
it's the silent invasion of our socio-evolution...
Droppin' rhymes so hard i dent the galaxy,
informin' extra terrestrials of our insanity.
In this class i sit back to the sound of music,
as i peer up through the veil of the intrusive -
Intruders move fast as lighting,
the public know nothing... isn't it frightning?
I take one step at a time,
aware of the nine-
followin' me...
They know im a prodigy...
-They hauntin' me-
The ghostbusters called into action,
as invisible aparitions evoke exaction.
People go missin to the sound of hissin,
the army is despatched with a mission.
"Seek and destroy these monstrocities!"
evoking atrocities with velocity.
Sadening instantiality in our reality
it's the way of our cranial capacity
Violence and paranoia,
as i walk through the streets toward ya.
This may be the end for us,
but it certainly ain't the end for just-
Is this the way its meant to be?
are we meant to see the end of our societies?
The philosophies of great minds like socrates
dismissed by this expansion of our toxicities
As time stands still i take a look to the past,
what they lived and died for in contrast.
Remedial invidulation of our contact,
forgin' a verbal contract.
It's the contact to destroy our lives,
no more peaceful days in the historical archives.
The day we re-wrote genesis...
Day one of the end of our levities
Disastrous day unfolds as the invisible foes,
dismantle our manifolds.
As i march forth i stand alone,
before im cut down to my bone.
As i fall i bounce back bodyless,
watchin my corpse lie down in stillness.
As the angel gabriel holds me by my arms,
i see the invisible attackers that caused the harm.
They're you and i,
something we cant quite comprehend through our eyes.
Take heed to my display of worldplay on this day,
if i must i'll beg you to end this mad state.
Our invisible destruction of the earth,
is merely caused by other brothers and sisters - hurt.
Terrorists and suicide bombers are the same as you and i
It's just the way we perceive them is different in our eyes...
But the destruction we blame on others,
is in actual fact a direct result of eachother.
We ALL have the same bodies,
surely that means we have the same mental capacities.
We act in unison,
to this final passive intrusion...
Society is being destroyed internally,
not externally as was previously a certainty.
I reveal the truth of this subject,
through releasing my spits to the public.
First i dropped 'The Truth' now i drop the 'Acceptance',
cos you gotta have 'Acceptance' to understand 'The Truth'...
and this is the proof.
Whole new level of complexity,
in this dismissal of human levity.
Insanity in contrast with reality,
this is exponentially,
increasingly,
experimentally ,
expressing my theories in complex wordplay...
so take heed to what i say.
Accept it.
The Truth's prequel 'The Lies' should drop tomorrow
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I thought I'd drop this first... I wrote it this morning and I felt more like releasing this than my prequel to "The Truth?" which I will drop tomorrow after I've had added a few little tweaks... I'd appreciate comments as usual... I'm still new to this shit...
Peace
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Ayo kid, that was ill. I was feelin that. Can't believe i read it!! lol but i was feelin that drop. You got brains, and you used it in your vocabulary. It just rolled off my tongue and i was really feelin ill be lookin for the lies!!! keep it up
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Thanks for taking the time out to read the whole thing.. It's around 600 words and a good hour writing... I really appreciate it man... If you need any feedback let me know! Remember this is only my third proper rap ever so I'm still new to this so I need all the advice I can get.
Uppin.. Once again for feedback!
Peace
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Well...looks like you have something yourself....
I like the rhyme sheme, the poeticism of it. Wordsworth has a few pieces like this in his anthologies. I have to say that is what grabbed hold of me. the structure was definitely unique, how it appeared onscreen, which also adds to the presence. I like the lines that strike images of destruction and our inferiority to the supreme race. I think you came off topic alittle, but I like the Socrates mention. All in all this was a well-written piece, haven't seen much here in a while, that's why I left the sight.
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