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    In an instant: SS playoffs


    Beyond the darkest region that plagues the mind of man
    Spans a collected abomination which fuels a fanatics plan
    False doctrines embed a fabricated state of religious hate
    Ornate squads detonate in a twisted display of ultimate fate

    Behind these closed doors components of death assemble
    Tremble not as the scene escalates into a heated crescendo
    Counter measures deployed, we’re the last line of defence
    Suspense fills the air, as radiation meter signals commence

    LOCATION HOT! Broadcasted over all frequency bands
    Plans enacted, politicians distracted by the tactics planned
    Command posts are set, forecast models plotted and swept
    Decontamination vehicles readied while locations are prep’d

    Satellite imagery tracked the movements of this volatile cell
    Bureaucratic bullshit hindered my operations chances to quell
    Another terrorist threat. My only regret is at my Childs expense
    Another father compromised by a systems incompetence

    Death waits behind closed doors, it’s infernal hue glows
    With the tint of supreme evil, as dirty bombs set to explode
    Moments become eternities and thoughts become scriptures
    As mixtures of radiological waste disperse from wired fixtures

    A lump forms in my throat as I reach this point of no return
    My flesh burns with a love for life, yet another lesson learned
    My last vision is of this door, glowing with a spectacular view
    Death released in an instant by a citizen of a land I once knew


    100 thousand dead, in the first attack, first response teams compromised by intense gamma fields. 5 attacks follow in a 24 hour period. All major Metropolitan areas are subjected to the drift of concentrated contaminates. Life as we know it is forever altered! Retaliation to follow!




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    Replied to that homo OM, and carlos barret.

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    brilliant...

    flowed well i thought it was a great story... prob one of my fav peices ive read from you... probably mostly becuase im really interested in this topic... good work... ill prob edit in more when im in the mood to accualy write a big long feed.

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    Thanks man....

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    Damn I completly agree with twixn. This was a very exciting piece and I thought that it was better then An Awakening. It was just so packed with so much it was kind of hard to take it all in but I respect you as a writer and I look up to you. Nice job bounce keep at it.

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    Very nice bounce flow and imagery was great.......story line was also a stand out.......great job

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    Eh, I may give you some proper feedback once our battles is concluded, but not just yet. This is a dope drop though, I will give you your props, you are one of my favourite writers ever on RB. Such a powerful commanding voice your work has. Good luck with everything. And if you win our match, I hope you go on to take the title.
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    Really nice... Great flow and story-telling mixed with excellent vocabulary and complexity. I think I was particularly impressed because this is the sort of thing I write and it showed me the sort of level I can reach. It's nice to see others breaking away from the 'gangsta' vocabulary and style and finally see some style and expertise show through in people. Only thing I can say is that it might've been better if it was longer? I can also imagine this being a nice audio track... Nice work... This is one of my worst feedbacks but there simply wasn't much for me to say!

    Check out "The Truth?" in my sig to see what I mean and more relevantly I'm dropping a new OM today similar to this. Just waiting for 24 hours to have passed since I dropped "The Truth?"... "Welcome to the age of the nuclear bomb" is pretty relevant too but is inferior to what I'm writing now I think... If you could leave some feedback I'd appreciate it.

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    All, thanks for the time guy's, it's appreciated. Jekyl, thanks man, you know I respect you as a writer, if not, you do now. I don't know about wining the SS thing it's not my style. I don't care much for winning these things. I just wanted to start posting on RB again, what better way that WoP or SS. Now I might just write for OM every now and then. Mostly I'm here to help people, many many members know this all too well.

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    yeah muwa nice drop its hot..................
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    make you look STUPID
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    another dope read by bounce,
    thats all im gonna say
    everything else has been said.

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    I was feeling tha story and enjoyed this peice you did a great job keep it up

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    like a said in the SS playoffs this was a nice piece on the real liking the way you took this topic and ran with it had me glued to my seat the whole time reading you also have a nice rhyme scheme and flow that his hard to come by with all the great vocab you use in all your pieces i hope you stay up you hae great skills

    can you return the favor please

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    Thanks to everyone for thier time and feed.

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