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Lets be honest
chorus:
i aint got time fo no tricks
especially not a lets be friends chick
after she dumps you type
this aint juvenile this is date life
night life my life is full of death
had a girl to ride till she left the shed
vers1:
how this girl gon play,she had me hooked like
the chorus wit Beyonce and Jay-z...right
meanwhile shes invitin dudes over for a while
of pleasure shes a virgin but shes willin to go the mile
of hot n sweaty bodies layin in the bed or on the floor
wtf would she do if i showed up pissed from work
not fact nor fiction just the truth of my life
or whatever of it was missin from the knife..
of the group that tried takin her away or made her..
make up he mind to leave me and become their girl
but i got one hot message from a dude wit a clue
she was wit a dude named Chris in the back room
am i bein over imaginitive of what they could be doin
or is the truth of the whole ordeal that i may be pursuin
chorusx2:
verse2:
man she shoulda thought twice..before she
played me im the P.I.M.P who finds out the story
of the day and whats happenin in my sheets
she should of wore a diguise or tried to be discrete
but she did it out in the open,wit no shame
just the victory of puttin me in my place?
nah not today im right and shes wrong...
Sisqo when he made the gay version of the thong song
ill ask her now whats shes done and who is this
playin on my MSN askin me who am i n callin me a bitch
i asked her simple question and she avoided me juss ask Boe
he was their then she said lets be friend just like a lil hoe
i aint wit that i pushed her away man forget that
i jumped tha fence n left like that nigga Top Cat
chorusx3
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You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
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hook as ok, kinda basic but it was good..1st verse, soundin good..flow and structure through this whole peice is good..emotion was also good, was feelin what u were sayin.. didnt see much multis... 2nd verse, as i said up there^, structure is good..again, emotion was good. vocab could use some work.. but overal, nice drop.. keep writin stuff like this, it was a good read
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eh i didnt like the chorus to much it just didnt flow very well and the verses were a little to simple and i didnt like this line
"not fact nor fiction just the truth of my life"
that line controdicted itself.....if its truth then its fact.....thats all.
but you had good emotion and you seemed like you just wanted to get this off your chest.......i think you rushed it a little.........just put more thought into it
it wasnt bad though.......stay up man
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yeah man im feelin that ill hit ur link up man..thanks fa tha feed
