New... Still tryin 2 get a feel 4 thys...

Somewhat of an intro, U know how that goes, just a lil taste of me, I won't claim 2 B the hottest, I'm tha contender emcee...

(I gotta stop doin that)

If U can't tell I'm a Holy Hip Hop emcee, tryin 2 gain sum battle skills peepin out folks here, & when the tyme is right, hittin up the battle grounds... Yall B blessed... Let me know... if it sux, it sux... don't sugar coat it cause I'm rollin hard w/ JC...


Newbie,/
So sue me,/
They might call me GREEN as an insult, But I'm like "Rudy"
Overcomming all odds, haters actin up cause they thought they knew me.../
But truly,/
it's my duty 2 come strong.../
745 Generations later, kids STILL gettin happy, recitin' my songs,/
Not tryin 2 B like a bullet, cause it only hurts 1...
I'm re-in-acting Chernobyl cause when the bomb drops Ur skins gone,
& the radiation lives on.../
I'm not Fabulous, but I can make it hard 2 "Breathe"/
Gettin choked up off the vocals, w/ no profanity/ (how'd he do that??)
I can't take all the credit, cause it's not really about me.../
I came reppin my Savior, The guy U dissin, Jesus the C-H-R.-I-S-T...
It's Him & Me but almost like a Will Smith buss... /
It's Me, The Father, Spirit & the Son, U know, "Just the 4 of Us..."
How can thys B an intro verse w/o mentioning my name???
It's Shibo Rammin, an alias, different not the same…/ (Like alot of cats)
So respect the game,/
Cause I’m playin by the rules…
Nice guys finish last? It don’t matter, I’ll B double ‘O’ 2 /
So U got the intro, I’m finished, respect tha team… /
God Rules Each & Every Nation, the REAL meaning of GREEN!

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I Like Your Approach As A "christian Rapper" But It Definetly Coulda Been Better. You Bounce Around A Bit,you Went From Bein A Newbie To Syin God Rules. All In All It Was Good My Advice Is To Pic A Strong Topic And Stick Wit It.

It's phunny, I gave sum1 else the same advice earlier, u thynk I could keep handle on it right??

Yet another nice verse about Jesus and all but...it seems to me you could have represented this one better...well presentation wise...u had a good rhyme and all but the topic here wasn't very consistent it was like ur were uppin urself then talkin bout Jesus and then uppin yourself again...and back to Jesus but it was an ok drop nothin real special you gotta come harder with the creatvity cuz this rhyme had no real ooo aaas about it...creativity, vocab and consistency cuz the flow wasn't too bad here...but if u up those three things u should be good...peaceezy