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Tell me later.
Pain is what Eye might bare, during these nightmares
Insight tears.. the zip lock hip-hops been waiting to hear
Melodramatic, an starving artist trying to paint pears
Shared fears of prejudice taints air, in what aint there
It aint clear, a locked mental block..& Eye can’t seem to focus
Too much to cope w/ choked and hopeless, guilty but no motive
But they go w/ the smile, an ear to ear dagger… similar style
The type to rouse granite gargoyles, with vinegar solutions
This planets our foiled..Peace of Paradise, polluted
Truth is, Eye’m use to the neuce kid, but its useless
My muzzled persona managed to sketch blueprints
A new lewd spit…littered with syllable shrewdness
Flying congruent w/ super human movements
It soon hit’s, This monsoon get’s… drained
Two boones to sooth the brain, who’s to blame
Not me, not who Eye pretend to be, not he
Not your average parakeet, who barely sleep
The need to keep these nails rooted in my teeth
No need to break down the beaker’s content..
Truth keeps these words synonymous w/ nonsense
Wait… psycho, that’s me.. so listen close…
Redefine what you think is dope, you blink you choke
Eye shrink your hope, on ink its rope.. but on the screen
SirusX the best Hip Hop had, inside your ip ping
Nestled on the rings of your residued pipe-dreams
Nice things Eye’ve seen crafted inside jimmy crickets slave-shop
I’ll be flowing the circuitry of your currency until the waves stop
Say what… Nice knowing you, nice being an influence
I hope I help what you aint looking for, its been lucid.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=1913449
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=1913456
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This was a good read. Kinda confused me a bit, well, at a few parts. But overall, I really liked it. The imagery was great. Good shit. Good vocabulary as well. And the multies were everywhere, nice word choice. My favorite bar would probably be:
"Nice things Eye’ve seen crafted inside jimmy crickets slave-shop
I’ll be flowing the circuitry of your currency until the waves stop"
Keep it up.
Peace
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this is a good read. but since it was nominated for legends i'll tell you why its not legends.
the multies were good. the flow was good. the piece was voerall pretty decent-good. But it had no direction to it - a lot of the multies didn't fit in wioth the piece, seemed like you just put them there so that you could have a lot of multies.
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this was a good piece. it was confusing to me at certain parts, but overall i was able to understand it for the most part. i liked it cause it had good imagery and structure. keep it up....peace
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i agree with feebs i cant really go into much detail because i dont understand half of what you are saying
this is not my steez at all dog
sorry :(
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intended to apear abstract.
thx for feedback. two old heads on my peice is also good.
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...10#post1914710
peep that please
yo never seen youre shit before and
i must say im impressed i think this was
nice poiece man a good read...not
legendary but very nice.....good flow
vocab was on point and a nice read.
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Yea man this is nice to read
concept is confusing and the rest is clear its been awhile since i rated anything but it was very good man keep it up
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Thx for replys.
Up for more.
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very dope piece, indeed. i like the whole concept, each line kept me attached to reading further.
"Redefine what you think is dope, you blink you choke"
^ that line caught me, i like the expression in it.
ill peice sirus, wordplay is decent.. ill shit period.
good drop fam.
peep: shadows
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up for more feedback
Thx for all the feedback
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you got banned... HAHA... anyway, good drop, confusing at parts, but it was all good
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Thx for that... i guess...
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