first post... feedback welcome

Evil Doc is in tha office... slick Siccologist// And I've been tha hot topic since I sh*t-kicked all tha kids//
These victims never manage a scream... I'm status supreme// With tha world on my shoulders... you just Atlas' queen//
Act like I sank ships... I rap with a dream// But you ain't sh*t... just an *sshole that's crapless 'n' clean//
Adapt with tha scene cuz ya don't fit// I throw fists 'n' won't quit if ya strapped to machines with ya bones split//
But back to tha theme... tha savage is mean// Badder than tha Mad Hatter on crack... in Alice's dream//
Know tha logos for Dallas' teams... or the Starter Hats// You know both so I'll leave ya seein' Stars like that//
You know Crow??? I can greet ya to a Bar like that// You no Capone but my cleaver leave ya scarred like that//
You're girl's beaver gets ALL ME when I'm horny// So f*ck off... take twenty-two of these and CALL ME IN THA MOURNING!!!

feedback appreciated... i'll try 'n' hit up all of ya... and a quick question... what's tha censorship like for language???

Twisted Not Very Amatuer Inm Text So I Assume U A Vet Not Bad Had Some Downers But Want Bad

i like...... its like my style but i have many styles.

this was pretty good....i liked the multis you had they were all pretty good...........and no.....my open mic wasn't an auto biography..lmao....

Adapt with tha scene cuz ya don't fit// I throw fists 'n' won't quit if ya strapped to machines with ya bones split//
But back to tha theme... tha savage is mean// Badder than tha Mad Hatter on crack... in Alice's dream//
Know tha logos for Dallas' teams... or the Starter Hats// You know both so I'll leave ya seein' Stars like that//

that whole part was dope as fuck....the rest was good but that stood out..you have a way with multis my friend..keep it up

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

one link to a reply/feedback...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=158639

Nice man...i like ya sick rhymes and shit....had good vocab and structure...keep it up dogg...holla back

DaYoungsta boy!!! :shoot: :cussing: :shoot:

second link to a reply/feedback...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...15#post1885115

lol beat the shit out of my rhyme

thats dope kid, i like the style you bring...i also liked your piece callin boo out...be watching for my new post...it mentions that. keep it flowin and growin like a cold when its snowin.

uppin' for replies... i've been puttin' in a lot of time readin' 'n' replyin' to a lot of open mics...

good multi usage..i dont like your structure...but i say you did a good job of handlin it..i usually dont like to read verses with this type of structure..but you stayed well on topic..and it flowed the same all the way through your verse..and i liked that part..the imagery was there also..i think you did a good job of wordin your lines..keep this up..