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troubled days
responded to 24 hours to live and ORDO ABACHO
in my life i have faced troubled dayz and no matta tha ways everything resulted in tha same gray haze//
neva faced this many atrocities with such velocity to get dosed with all these kinds of properties//
such as fines, murders, and everything thats tied within and no matta wat i do i could never win//
allways facin new trials and tribulations never gettin tha right congratulations and always gettin to meet new coaliltions//
so in my troubled days ive seen tha beginning of tha end so i wont go off and pretend that this mediocer life is good till tha end//
so for those facing troubled dayz just think of tha ways to exceed tha limits an try to win it//
its a little short but im a buzy man
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hmmmm........im ratin in my own words but i'll get back to u on it
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needs alot of work... speccialy sturcture.... but keep at it.... view some ofthe ones... specially ace of aces... mad good structure.
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just finishin it
in my life i have faced troubled dayz and no matta tha ways everything resulted in tha same gray haze//
neva faced this many atrocities with such velocity to get dosed with all these kinds of properties//
such as fines, murders, and everything thats tied within and no matta wat i do i could never win//
allways facin new trials and tribulations never gettin tha right congratulations and always gettin to meet tha new coaliltions//
so in my troubled days ive seen tha beginning of tha end so i wont go off and pretend that this mediocer life is good till tha end//
so for those facing troubled dayz just think of tha ways to exceed tha limits an try to win it//
dealin with troubled thoughts will have minds caught up in this frenzy and leave us with tendecies to take tendons out of our kneese//
when faced outta luck and runnin on empty just think back to tha time when u had go and face me//
facin ur conscience is tha worst thing u have to face when u get passed tat block all ur troubles will be erased//
so when u face troubled dayz try not to run but take hold of it face it face to face and never let it go until u have control of it//
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how long did u finish it from the first one?
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strong enough vocab, solid enough topic and a few strong rhymes. with some tweaking and the right topic you could have some talent here. you gotta learn to do multis and set your pieces out line for line since the structure was hard to follow here.
keep posting man, if you could return the favour i'd appricaite it.
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I like it... Structer needs work... I think what happens (for me atleast) I use word to type everything... I need it because I cant spell... But when I cut and paste... it all looks choppy... It hurts me on my battles... Mouf told me that I didnt have to do shit ALL in one sentance... which helps... Great vocab though... i dig
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You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
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