10 lines
i set
u spit first
no feed
no hate
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10 lines
i set
u spit first
no feed
no hate
Rushed this but here ya go....
Madness quick to battle…I’m new… so the win will fit
Chips were down…and you were all in…a world of shit
Now submit your verse… One bar your down… an well
Ya knocked on the door of success… it said ”ring the bell”
One win and two losses… wack… That’s just for starters
An the price on ya head couldn’t match my bottom dollar
Battled Mc Sky days ago… kinda fucked up… that ya took
6 hrs…and you wrote a few wack lines…more like a book
I got bragging rights…I win… without a shadow of a doubt
I’ll bring up wackness… so you can be the guy to talk about
You remind me of how i sounded when i used to do crack yo
haha ..so...check it
Its wack as people like you that makes me cant stand to trip
You spit b4 i began to rip..and your verse was a pre-k manuscript
Filled with little ass words...that dont mean shit on the street
Thats why you aignt beatin me....theres too much things you need
Man when i used to do crack..haha...i layed out simple shit like that...
I can say 10 things you lack..if i said..oreo..you wouldnt say nothin back
You cant handle the rhymes that i drop...it comes and its all i got
You is just a bitch i fought...you suck so much right now i could stop
My VOCAB-U-LARY is all it takes to accomplish another ultimate ojective
But im the revoltin detective findin all this shit that has not been detected
It took you six hours to post that?
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yeah man sorry about that but i had to go get laid..you know haha
uppin 2 on this shit..........just leave links i will return the favor
manuscipt -
Madness quick to battle…I’m new… so the win will fit
Chips were down…and you were all in…a world of shit
that dont really make sense
Now submit your verse… One bar your down… an well
Ya knocked on the door of success… it said ”ring the bell”
again, ok flow tho
One win and two losses… wack… That’s just for starters
An the price on ya head couldn’t match my bottom dollar
what ?
Battled Mc Sky days ago… kinda fucked up… that ya took
6 hrs…and you wrote a few wack lines…more like a book
ay ?
I got bragging rights…I win… without a shadow of a doubt
I’ll bring up wackness… so you can be the guy to talk about
finally summit made sense, but it was wack !!!!
lyrical -
Its wack as people like you that makes me cant stand to trip
You spit b4 i began to rip..and your verse was a pre-k manuscript
nice multie
Filled with little ass words...that dont mean shit on the street
Thats why you aignt beatin me....theres too much things you need
that dont rhyme, but ok anyway
Man when i used to do crack..haha...i layed out simple shit like that...
I can say 10 things you lack..if i said..oreo..you wouldnt say nothin back
nor does that, also ok tho
You cant handle the rhymes that i drop...it comes and its all i got
You is just a bitch i fought...you suck so much right now i could stop
that was orite
My VOCAB-U-LARY is all it takes to accomplish another ultimate ojective
But im the revoltin detective findin all this shit that has not been detected
again it was orite
vote goes to LYRICALMADNESS for better flow and his made sense.
aye man lyrical madness took this
punches-lyrical
structure-lyrical
wordplay-lyrical
flow-lyrical
no hate on u manuscript but muh vote goes 2 lyricalmadness
thanks...and uppin this,.........please leave good feed..and links..and i will return the favor
easy to vote on....madness takes this....
his oreo line and crack line made me laugh,good punches overall and personals,good verse yo....and manuscript came weak most of his verse and i didnt like his flow,it kept haven that annoying stop shit with the periods,instead of doing "..."put a comma,cuz its harder to read,no hate tho,ull elevate -1-
ps.return the fava
uppin 4 just leave links i will return the favor.....
oh yeah i forgot to say before, please return the favour and hit up my battles. good luck
Lyricalmadness: nothing specal, some nice multies and punches where aightish. More consistent and sense making than Manuscript but it wasn't anything awesome.
Manuscript: I think the other three fellas where a little hard on you but... your verse wasn't exactly good. You had about one goodish punch in there "Now submit your verse… One bar your down… an well
Ya knocked on the door of success… it said ”ring the bell”
" but that was bout it. Keep elevating and same to lyrical madness.
V/ Lyricalmadness
close battle. both dropped decent. Manuscript had better flow and structure but punches didn't hit as hard. personals were blah and you had way too many self-praising lines, try staying away from those. other than that, nice verse. Lyrical you came a little stretched, but it wasn't too off. your punches connected better, even though you didn't have any personals, you did come with consistency, so for that...
vote-LyricalMaddness
hit this up like you said you would please:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=145510
thanks. its not my battle but its my crew member Se7ens. thanks.
peACE
oh and the poll might be closed but you can still post a vote so don't worry. thanks again.