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12's fine check
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Ive seen you round, trust me there cant be more-to-go,
Cause your title would fit you perfectly......minus 'Topical'....'Champ'...and 'Audio',
Cause your left out to dry, cause what steel you packing is made-to-rust,
Say my rhymes are ugly? thats rich...coming from sdizzle's alias,
Man you cant drop fire, your fake style, it never passes,
IJL a mad crew? nah, an acronym for Inactive Junkie Lardasses,
Never off the top of your head, You bend-down to your crew like a slut chick,
Yeah theres 'Lyric'' on his toungue, but then again he downs more than enough dick,
Like anti-coke realists, aint nobody watchin-your-lines,
Man you coudn't drop a decent personal, if you were in the classifieds,
Because i merk herbs, while you just give head cuz,
Because even your name man makes more sense than your verse does.
quicky...
I know you hear me coming flippin this joker through my spokes..
He tells the same punchline too many times and ruins the joke..
or so he thinks stop playin kid get your head out the comics..
on a suicide tip like cults, mystery punch, and halley's comet..
Special forces, black ops to save hip hop marines deploy..
bring pinochio into the chopshop I'll fix em to be a real boy..
My lines show form overtime come the next line connect the dots..
like overtime overworked gynos i disrespect he box..
I let em spit his vagina monolouge and waited for intermission..
Then exposed what was between his legs with ven-Arial perscision..
drunk stumbling droppin the mic ... while i'm sober...
And it ended anticlimaticly so I guess i'll start the real over..
by the way my name means - A strong creative force.... its not just nonsense =) pz.
this was really close...
Realism- i liked your verse. It was packed solid with punches that just kept coming. Even though they were pretty basic, their were lots of them...i liked the newspaper line too. (Even though ive seen the concept before...but then again i think all the concepts for punches have been covered one time or another.)
De- Your verse was good as well. I believe you had less punches, but the ones you had were more clever. Some of your lines to set up a rhyme were weird (the line overtime connect the dots line? Whats that about?) But like i said before, the punches you had were better.
So its between either more punches or less but more quality punches, for me anyways. And in this i have to go with the more punches. When a verse is full of them, it makes the verse as a whole more well-rounded. Tough call though.
Vote- Realism
i like demis though it was still close
Realim: you did come with lotsa punches but some of them were played like the classifieds one thats hella played, and your verse didnt flow as welll as gynos.
your opener was the best line in my opinion it was good personal and punch.
Demi: you came with a more inteligent verse, using more wordplay
i personnaly liked your gyno line even though its proly played it was still funny ashell
and the ven-arial prescision line was witty too.
overall demi was more consistent in good punches with less filler
still close but
v/demi
1-1 i appreciate the votes and the feedback guys.
This was really close. Both came good.
RealiM took the "personal" side of the verse. Which added a stronger hit to his punches.
DeMiurgiC had some personals, and in general, his punches hit hard too.
Overall - Both were good, but RealiM had a better use of personals, which was good. And it seemed that Dem's verse had less, which also means less punches. So yeah...
V/RealiM
*EDIT* Smoka, DQ this. I gave honest feedback, but yeah, same crew.
V/DeMiurgiC...
Harder hitting punches....good battle ....goooddd verses from both though...hard decision but i feel De had harder hitting punches...which won the battle for him
hes in your crew ILL KAHN smart one so your vote doesn't count =) pz.
^^was directed to ILL KAHN not me...for
those
confused
Lol, man that was honest feedback, but if you want it to get DQ'ed, fine then.
Realim-
eww...god...this verse was just bad...the flow wasn't even there...I didn't see any hard hitting..well ANY punches at all...You're last line woulda been good, but it was kinda ironic...just look
^ you ended your setup line with "cuz" (which I automatically assume is short for "because")...and started your next line with "because"...so I had to double take on that...then just gave you the benefit of the doubt and figured that "cuz" musta been in the "cousin" context, meaning you really suck at rhyming if you had to use it like that...then "your name man makes more sense than your verse does"....what the fuck is a "name man"? (Yes I understand that he simply didn't put a comma between "name" and "man" but still....I just thought your typos completely fucked up the only decent line u would have dropped)...Quote:
Because i merk herbs, while you just give head cuz,
Because even your name man makes more sense than your verse does.
Demiurgic-
You had weak punches, but nice vocab, and ur flow was much better...and you actually ATTEMPTED punchlines, unlike Realim...you also had decent rhyming...nothing really stood out about ur verse, but atleast it wasn't purely wack like Realim...
V/ Demiurgic
*btw* just a little question, back on the subject of Demiurgic's name not making sense...now I MIGHT be a complete fucktard for not knowing this, but what does Realim mean? Even one of his voters thought his name was Realism, which actually has a meaning...did he mean Realm? lol...idk..just a question..someone PM me with the answer if you can..
peace
:noob:
He can't read.
I woudn't normally sway, i can take feedback.. but you sir, are an idiot..