Hip Hop Castration

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Hip Hop Castration

I dispel stereotypes about women on the mic because my rhymes are tight like Speedos creating testicular torture.
Is this a clit-or-is this you defining me simply because your balls are blue?

I spit dismissing these vagina definitions because those lips...don't speak.

I silence lies about the thunder in our thighs because my storm comes from within because my lightening is in my pen writing verses that collide like lyrical suicide for you wish to penetrate me, spiritually rape me with so called Hip Hop obsession with female possessions.

I dispel stereotypes about women on the mic because it is time for a re-definition.
Bear witness to Hip Hop castration.

-The College Girl

nice piece kinda short tho if you dropped a little more it woulda been even better need just a smidge of more of vocab wanna see more from ya

:\ cool i guess.

cali.. not really sure about ur entire basis here.
I kinda read it the first time, and wasn't catching..
but the second time thru I got what you're stating.
Looks like a quick keystyle, u should take more time..
..and piece ur ideas together and make it more flawless
..and maybe bring better overall flow,
maybe even work in a rhyme scheme.... ya know?

I liked this idea, knocking down stereotypes
when it comes to women in rap.... you could better think it out.
Your 3rd paragraph was pretty dope though.

not bad. but bad structure. u have run on sentences and you need to lengthen the rhyme. flow was off also. you had good vocab man and some decent punches. keep it up.

blah - feminist crap - dope femcees get respect - just the simple truth is that mostly there aren't any - it's like female comedians - by and large they suck - nonetheless you had some pretty good emotion in this - flow was decent - it was short - chronically so - and the rhymes were iffy for the most part - keep working at it - peace

^^^^agree...for the most part i like yo style but structure needs major tuning...vocab was average...way too short to be talkin bout women stereo types anyway...but i see potential in you along da line...keep droppin
hit dis link up plz
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=131866

this was aight ....but there wasnt really a structure at all and not much of a point...keep writing and make shit longer........

check these

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=130276
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=130623

and return the favour wid some feed back pleaze............................................ .......peace