Carpe Diem pt. II

Carpe Diem pt. I

A nighttime friend and a starlit enemy, marionettes loaded for invasion delay: a thousand-virgin honor remedy bled from bad-weather blades/
Lord StickinMud pleasure creation, cloud obstacles parted with a sun-path for target illumination. Calm before the storm: a soldier’s serenade/
One stubborn obstacle left standing: a Why barricade. An answer painting provided by the imagination eclipse of a Carpe Diem enthusiast/
Have you ever seen the Sun and Moon kiss? Have you seen the Moon’s lips blistered?
He always borrows ChapStick from Atlas and you wonder why “I love you” has never been whispered?
For every hope that floats above the fixture, for every emotion pictured that isn’t galvanized
For Father Time’s midnight bottle caper nights, when Hatred strikes Mother Nature’s blackened eyes
And that’s your Why…
Bible verse recitals memorized a thousand times over during arrival anxiety, Kamikaze shrieks stifled for this nightly Time piracy/
Water ripples exchange their gossip; the hull trickled invasion topics, prayers have ceased but the waves screamed when the Sirens breathed/
A “No Survivor” policy murmured as Arrival crept silently. Stealth package submergence, Poseidon unawareness to a surface disturbance/
Unconscious emergence, enact pin-drop motions towards ManinMoon’s patrolling Hopeless: swift, sharp lateral insertions/
All warning signals splattered the surface. Don jungle stealth cloaks and maneuver towards the moat encompassed fortress/
Hand motions scream commands as Kamikazes silently plan their courses: Crocodile bulls-eyes and knight-equipped horses/
Spectacular bursts of red: trademark of the Carpe Diem forces. Premature success emotions provoked within the guerrilla brain wave/
Approach the throne, final pay back for those broken promises. He treads an ocean of unconsciousness; appreciation tokens loaded for a keepsake/
Final release, a dynasty’s downfall complete; stand in Mission Accomplished amazement
Until I gaze back at the week missed trying to seize this day

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that was a tight verse man, it hadda great flow to that, i really enjoyed readin it, you had alot tight vocab, with lotsa deep lines man.
cant really say anything bad about it.
just keep doin what ya doin cos its working.
thats a nice piece
props bro

You have seized the day once again with blissfull lyrics and great flow and good vocab keep stuff like this comein and you dunt have to use latin headings to make them look smart.

aaayooo... this ish was ILL dunny... fa sho... i was feelin this to the fullest... great imagination

Have you ever seen the Sun and Moon kiss? Have you seen the Moon’s lips blistered?
He always borrows ChapStick from Atlas and you wonder why “I love you” has never been whispered?
For every hope that floats above the fixture, for every emotion pictured that isn’t galvanized
For Father Time’s midnight bottle caper nights, when Hatred strikes Mother Nature’s blackened eyes
And that’s your Why…

show put effort... this was nice... i was like "Kid is killin it" nice usage of multis in there ( love dat )... keep doin big kid... niceness..

Caesar - On3

Legend.

that was ill. you have a lot of talent. keep writing.

Thank you all. Much appreciated

Up, Up, and awaaay

I'm Bumpin this for my GAnGsTeRIfiC friend....

To the top this goes... ;)

Great image and depthness in this piece really creative i liked it hopefully i will read more of your work

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