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...Drug Addict...
Peep this shit, and read it CareFully. HopeFully it will get intop one of you.
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brew, weed or coke is just the same with a Gun...
............That Pistol's Death......
I'm loving it all, but it will drive you Crazy..
...Just Like that Crystal Meth....
it's your mentality your batteling..
...........struggeling for something thats not....
...........Responsiblity's are Dropped..then find yourself..
...........Running from Cops..
we Vomit from Toxic's..I know what to call it..
...............................it's called an Alcoholic..
weed takes money and time..Some say it aint bad..
but left without a Dime.....
.....and with every Line..like street lights theres a Sign..
................................of this Very Simple Life of Mine..
that appears to be Gone..we long..
for that song that's right or wrong...
depending on your Opinon... of What's True..
................Life? what does it mean to you?..
Everyday we all say... were not Addicted...
.................and the message you Miss it....
exscape reality for Time that's Worth Inches..
......and Lose talent's Givin..and you Give-In..
............Your Missin..the point That's Projected..
believe me Or Not but Heroin got some Molested..
it's Sick-nin' watching peep's that cant ressist-it..
Stuck on Drugs and Siucide, like Men with Bitch-es....
So i sit here typing..for someOne to Hear..
Lifes dear and yet weird..watch it dissapear.....
..................in thin air..you cant see it clear....
cuz in Visions you cant see air, but be-aware.....
most of us are addicted User's...but Stuck in denial..
Crying Inside, Dying Alive.....but fronted witta Smile....
MeanWhile..some Admit there Problem....
friend's..then look to your Homies and Stop'em..
this was a Qiuck Little Key. Dont know why the Subject..
cuz i'm a Hypocryte of this..but hopefully this will send a
Message to some..Upping for your thought's and Input..
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upping this shit.
c'mon, drop your Input..Fucking Internet..LoL
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The rhymes were there - but it was hard for me to catch the flow. I'd say vocab could use some advancement - the rhymes seemed kinda simple mostly. Concept was nice - I guess this is ok for a key. Keep writing - hit my Lamentations if you can.
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I liked that shit, i dont usually like shit about drugs an' that cos it gets borin' but that was good....nice flow, nice rhymes...good shit, keep it up...
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upping for some more. damn it
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UpPiNg tHiS ThReAd...
PlEaSe dRoP YoUr hOnEsT FeEdBaCk...
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iight man, i liked this alot, it was deep it had good flow n sent a pretty good message. the structure was kindof hard to follow, but it wasnt impossible. the vocab needs a little work but if u dont work on the vocab
it will still be a good piece.
keep it up man freal, n it will all be better
can u please hit me up with feedback
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...60#post1224960
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the flow was ok and the rhymes were tight...cant u think of something better to rap about though? its crazy how many people rap or write about drugs, hoes, etc. write about something that matters and be original...7/10
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Ergh..
Structure was horrible.. Dont ever put my retina's through that again..
Flow wasnt there because of the structure.. Sort it out..
Some concepts were iight..
But work on all that^..
Pz..
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it was aiight better than expected but can be improved alot :thumbup:
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Hey. Remember that this shit was Keyed in 15 Minutes.
Upping for this Shit.
Thank you all for the Feed. I'll holla at yours.
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"Hey. Remember that this shit was Keyed in 15 Minutes."
Don't pull that card - Some ppl can deliver a nice piece in fifteen minutes. Personally it usually takes me about a hour or so - message being if you need to take more time - do it. Don't rush something and expect leeway because you hurried. Just put work into it and deliver a better piece - just friendly advice - peace.
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I know. LoL. I appreciate Good Feed. That's Just My Excuse.^^
Upping..
I pulled the Joker..LoL
