remember tha name

[rayman g]

I simply ain't nuthin to mess with, RAYMAN G be the name
Get this straight in ya brain, I'm ahead of the game
Guess you heard of my fame, I'm drivin ladies insane
Now I'm at it again guess yawl tired of the pain
Want the end of my reign but I'ma reign some mo
Bring pain to every foe yawl prepare to fall
While my whole crew ball, lyrically boostin the death toll
And we movin every ho straight across the dancefloor
I'm grabbin 3 or maybe 4, shine brighter than a supernova
The black Casanova grab the mic and it's over!
I'm an auto you a revolver, a Hummer you a Rover
It ain't over til you sober til I come with the solver

[rayman g]

I THINK I TRIED

[noncentz]

YOU GOT GREAT WORDPLAY BUT THIOS FELL VERY SIMPLE NOTHING REALLY ASTONISHING.......YOU HAD NO REAL CLIMAX POINT....SO IN THE END FELL LIKE SOME RANDOM RABLINGS...YOUR WORDPLAY IS HOT BUT EVERYTHING ELSE DOES NEED WORK.STAY UP

[Mistral]

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed. Thanks.

But yeah this was ok.....your structure was alright, could be a bit better i thought though....you had some good wordplay like Word said....flow in this was ok, it fell off at points though....but keep at it.

[rayman g]

thank you people

[pot1ent]

The wordplay in this was not good.. It was terriby wack.. I would have called you the biggestherb ever if it wasn't for that Casanova line.. The flow was okay,, but waaaaaaaayy to basic to kick it over a beat.. Elevate and Stay Up

[Dropz]

it was iight your wordplay i thougt was too basic

[rayman g]

maybe i tried

[Mistral]

I warned you about the links, but you post back twice without links so this is Closed...Get Links Next Time.