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    Corrupted Visions: Would You Still Love Me ?

    Nah, Nah, Nah. . Baby This Is Serious Shit. . . What If All This Shit. . This House. . The Cars. . The Jewelry. . What If All This Shit Was Gone. . . Would You Still Love Me ?

    What If All The Shit I Was Blessed Wit Jus Left Quick?
    You @ I Both Know We Felt This, But Would Leave Me Helpless?
    Lead Me To Believe You Won't Deceive If I Lose My Money
    But See I Know You're Hungry, Don't Play Me For A Dumb G
    You's My Honey, Yeah Now, But What About In The Long Run
    If The Law Comes Or If I Absolutely Have No Funds
    Can I Trust You While I Touch You Now To Not Look Down
    And Frown Upon Me, Leave Me Lonely, No Longer Stayin Round
    How This Sound? Cars, Jewelry, Mansion, Pocket Expansion
    What If The Time Comes When I'm Lackin--
    You'd Get Pissed Cause Nuthin Stackin
    Shit Got Me Wonderin Baby, Crazy I Must Be, Cause I'm Lucky
    To Have You By My Side, Wait, Imma Star, That's Why You Wanna Fuck Me?
    I Believe You Love Me, But What Happens When My Star Fades?
    Are You Like Every Other Chick?, No Pay You Leave Me In A Daze
    I Jus Wanna Girl Who Loves Me For Me, Not The Dough From My Music
    So I'm Pressin This Question For Testin To See If You's The Truest

    [Chorus]
    What Happens When All This Shit Jus Disappears?
    For Years You Loved Me, But Now You Don't Know What Direction To Steer
    Are You All About The Paper Possibilities?
    Would You Still Love With No Money Willingly?
    I Need To Know

    Now See, This Here, Really Boggles My Mind Sometimes
    You Get The Shine, Fine Dine, And You Say You're Mine
    But What If You Come Ta Find I Can't Afford What I Used Ta
    You'd Become The Heart Abuser, Shut Me Out Like A Mornin Rooster
    You'd Choose Ta Do That Correct? Or Was My Judgment Ignorant
    I Get A Grudge Sense When Hearin This Chatter Bout Paper's Significance
    Money Can Only Buy You Happiness That Is Short Lived
    Four Tenths Of My Life Revolves Around This Shit--
    That's For Bills, Now Look How Much The Poor Don't Get
    Would You Rather Be In Love With Money Or Unconditionally
    If It's For The Perks, Yes It Hurts, But We Gone Stay Friendly
    Pay Attent, I Know Ya Likin Ya Wrist Glistenin'
    But What If All This Shit We Gettin Suddenly Turns Up Missin'?
    Are You Bailin', High Tailin' It Outta My Life
    If Shit Don't Balance Will You Leave Me In Malice?. . You Might
    So If There's No Greenary In Our Scenary Tomarrow---
    This Could Be Our Last Goodnight

    [Chorus]


    -Formula
    Last edited by Formula; November 24th, 2003 at 08:10 PM

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    I liked this piece....you structured it pretty well i thought...the flow was real nice, didnt really get off at all, stayed on point through out it....You had good multies in it...I was feeling this as i was reading it, it made for a good read...you had good lines in there...i liked how you ended it and your chorus was pretty good as well....overall this was a good piece...keep at it and keep dropping.

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    Uppin. . Leave Links N I'll Reply. I'ma Be Hittin Shows Up Tomar. Afternoon.

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    first verse was deff better then the second but still a pretty good lil song here

    i take it you got money hehe

    yah man ino what y amean but moneya nd shit ruined it for me so we thinkin of it in 2 total diff points of veiw but i liked what u did with this a couple quotable lines good drop man return the favor!!
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    your content was good, and your structure was pretty good.
    the multies in your verse seemed somewhat forced though,
    but your flow was pretty good... your vocab was aight on this
    peice as well... nice drop dawg... Ima start peepin your shit
    and watch and help you elevate.
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    I agree wit A.T. it seemd that some of ur multi's were forced but other then that ur flow was ok I thought that it fell off in a couple points but I dunno maybe I'm juss reading it wrong but structure was ok. wordplay was ok to. but all in all man it was a good drop good content keep elevatin and droppin bro.
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    gestures meaning lesser to negotiations between me and you/
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