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    Love Me

    Reps:
    2hOt4tV
    Supreme
    Ghost


    Hook:
    My flows blazin
    Im the lyrkial myrkial
    Im amazin
    *yea fuck u - change the station*


    Im Ill-Matic (Nas) like a famous legend
    some of the biggest heads bumpin - my shoulders aint edgin
    heres a life lesson:
    just keep messin
    u gonna feel the best-then...
    Cuz its 'All Eyes On Me'
    and I aint payin respect, cuz i aint 'Ready to Die'
    Battle be 0-1 ~ caught me off wit a weak-diss
    The AfterMath - was a belimch-mess
    Lethally injected MC's wit poisnois venom
    you should see the the death threats i get *pause* shit I send-em
    wit a booster-seat I hold my own
    and i aint handlin the baby-shit
    So maybe-prick,
    your best option was to hang-from-my-dick//

    Hook:
    My flows blazin
    Im the lyrkial myrkial
    Im amazin
    *yea fuck u - change the station*

    Some call me grimey, others Loco
    get-to-know-yo
    Ill leave u more vocal - then a chokehold
    This aint played cuz i aint rappin bout teks in my rhymes
    read between the-lines
    i could - but im not like yall, algebra isnt the only time im carryin-the-nines
    The mulities be off the hook-yo
    I kidnaped ur rap - and pimped-ur-flow
    So that makes u my bitch in rap - ya know?
    Call the Popo - cuz i hit u wit a ho
    and i aint santa... so it aint-delighful
    hit u wit can-of-black-pantha, say goodnight-yo...
    I dont play-around
    So do me a favor, wen im comin put on a target, and lay-down.

    Hook:
    My flows blazin
    Im the lyrkial myrkial
    Im amazin
    *yea fuck u - change the station*

    fuck tha haters
    Last edited by LoCo; November 22nd, 2003 at 02:43 PM

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    upp i peep alot of shit but no one really responds to mine for awhile... someone really critique this
    pz

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    played...but aight


    lmfao, faggot

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    lol fuck u... ur shit was played dont come in here and hate cuz i gave an honest reply.. fag

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    I wasnt feelin it to much, maybe make the lines a little more easier to flow to. Sense it is text and all, im pretty sure you can jump on the mic and make this sound hot. So I aint ganna play you. Keep the shit up hommie, keep elevatin

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    the flow was nice. but the content was ehhhhhh for a text piece .. probably would suit audio more if you made it into one, lack of multi's / internals took from the piece in my opinion .. some of the rhyming words seemed forced as fuck towards the end and i dint really feel the topic .. seemed kinda `bragging rights` type piece made my attention wonder well before the second verse ..


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    You show some potential. Creativity is there, flow was lacking a bit, but other than the short bars, this was a well tought out piece.

    "I'm high in this game liek a 25 foot ladder"

    ^too simplistic, i suggest editing that line.

    Nice shit, keep at it. Practice DOES make perfect.




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    the ladder line was forced... thanks

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    upp lemme get a few more reps

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    yeah the flow on this was a bit off, maybe because of the structure
    if you fix the structure this could help with the flow also dont force the
    lines and put more multi's but other than that it wasnt to bad...

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    Some call me grimey, others Loco
    get-to-know-yo

    i didnt like this line, i give this a 3/5
    word theory... think about it...

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