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  1. November 19th, 2003, 08:59 PM #1
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    Suicidal

    To: you, my lady, this is my devine sign of love.

    R.I.P September 3, 2002

    1 year since the mishappen
    and... im still askin
    why im still shedin-tears
    cause we would be desending-in-the-years
    you knew my fears
    the hardcore thug within kicked out
    and the softness released with emotion...
    you gave devoition to the notion of me rappin
    For that ill never forget-
    I wish i was there to protect
    Never again, will I neglect...
    When i dream at night - i think about the Chi-West fight
    the delight of blood shed
    an inbred race - of such color as carmal, when i met you
    I knew, this lady was for me...
    But it must of been ment to be,
    you came to the scene
    and decided to intervene
    4 years and runnin - been sonnin' so long
    My lovin for you is strong
    Parents hated me, but it didnt matter
    The more i speak of your lucious name i get sadder
    i try not to batter-myself-cuz-of-respect
    But i get madder-n-madder-cuz-of-regret...
    Rosa' i love you,just sayin ur name makes me fall to my knees
    with ease' i'd give everything up my life included
    to redue the night of September 3rd, the coldness will never fail to seduce me
    Come to me, use me...
    Nothing was above-the-view~
    I'd like to finish it off wit a I-Love-you//

    With all my heart-ill never decipher a question,
    of you... I need you, R.I.P
    Queen Loca - King LiL LoCo
    Antonio Ramierz, Rosa Ramierz...
    Missed the date...
    peace
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  2. November 19th, 2003, 10:00 PM #2
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  3. November 19th, 2003, 10:45 PM #3
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    it was there....good have came off harder...

    but a flow, a few multies...wordplay was 4 the most part there...

    overall...a good piece..

    i see wat ur comin at....

    very understandable..

    propz 2 ya ....

    good job
    and good luck
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  4. November 19th, 2003, 10:46 PM #4
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  5. November 19th, 2003, 11:19 PM #5
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  6. November 20th, 2003, 11:56 AM #6
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    Hey, can you post up who you replied to?
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  7. November 20th, 2003, 03:27 PM #7
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    Good Job writing this. I enjoyed the piece, and i really could feel the emotion you wrote with. I hope this piece helped you express whatever u had to. nice. good luck
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  8. November 20th, 2003, 03:46 PM #8
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    that was a deep piece and u did it well. keep it up
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  9. November 20th, 2003, 03:57 PM #9
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  10. November 20th, 2003, 04:04 PM #10
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    shit...this hit pretty hard could have hit harder but it was there the emotion in your words stood out good drop man keep it up
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  11. November 20th, 2003, 04:10 PM #11
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  12. November 20th, 2003, 05:17 PM #12
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  13. November 20th, 2003, 06:13 PM #13
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  14. November 20th, 2003, 06:42 PM #14
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    It seemed really basic in the rhyme scheme and structure, seemed to me like it was more of an audio verse the way it was structured, content was actually decent and heart felt as i read it, good emotion, lines could use some power wording to make them hit hatrder when read and your transition has a loooooooooooong ass way to go but you've got potential

    props.

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  15. November 20th, 2003, 06:47 PM #15
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    yeah i agree this was a decent enough drop, it shows you got sumthin for it.....look'n forward to hearin more....feeling makes reads stand out...i liked it...Pc...could you hit mine plz...

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