Quick Keystyle....feedback....Drop a link

[Savir]

got this when i was about to do self glorification in cypher...quick shit...





This Game yo..im live with the wordplay/
disturb graves, at the same Time, im makin herbs lay/
my styles twisted man, im destroyin ear optics/
bust like mini rockets, make soundwaves appear in eye sockets/
think u got skillz, well step to the Game/
do it quick cuz the other half of me will overdose ya brain/
i'll just kick back and wait for the next attack/
i'll blaze tracks, or pour out the juice in my thinkin cap/
its like my freestyle's equivalent to lacin a notepad/
i'll scope mad- emcees....battle dudes until they throats sag/
leavin hoarse voices, spit sicc leavin moistness/
is it Game...or Time...either way i'll make your choices/
i'll sit back and count all the dudes that ducked me/
aint nothin wrong with that, now they face is where my trunks be/
they lucky, cuz i been bustin for a while/
just last night i joked around and started fuckin with my style/
came up with nothin new..just the same old ...same old/
i stay cold, fuck a punchline...but my flow...it makes the flames grow/



quickness freestyle......drop a link..i'll hit it up

[Lulong]

Overall good keystyle perfect for a cypher piece i could easily throw in another verse off of your last line
my fav part was:
"i'll sit back and count all the dudes that ducked me/
aint nothin wrong with that, now they face is where my trunks be/"

[Emerge]

not bad not bad at all good use of vocab
i would like to see more wordplay
but good keystyle none the less

pieace!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Savir]

dont sleep foos...feedback from vets is needed

[noncentz]

ALL AND ALL THIS MY FIRST READ ION YOU I KNOW OF AND I THOUGHT IT WAS IMPRESSIVE. SOME MINOR TOUCHES AND YOUD BE VICIOUS BUT FOR NOW YOU'LL HAVE TO SETTLE FOR BEING
BETTER THEN MOST

[cutastraphe]

not bad nigga i was feelin it, nice flow good concepts throughout, it kept my attention which is good. Also my favorite line was the same as lulong's------nice spit--------111111

[Savir]

thanx for feedback...need more vets...and Word Perfect..this is the 2nd uve read from me...the other was Kru collaboration with HERBAL and HardKor3....vets feedback please

[KingOfKings]

its oookay, not too hot, not too cold, just lukewarm


keep elevatin and keep droppin em

peace

[Savir]

dont sleep....drop links and shit...vet feedback.......come on come on come on.....................
GameTime....

[MonStar]

ok, flow was good, vocab good, content good....nice overall drop...i was feelin it...keep dropping...

if you get a chance check out my latest open mic and hit me up with some feedback...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=83967

[A.T.]

just last night i joked around and started fuckin with my style/
came up with nothin new..just the same old ...same old/
i stay cold, fuck a punchline...but my flow...it makes the flames grow/

I LIKED THIS LINE... IT MADE ME LAUGH FOR SOME REASON...
but your wordplay is pretty sic... I liked readin this... you got
a pretty good flow... ya structure could use a lil work... but it
aint bad...your multies made this peice really nice to read...
But anyway, I'll be lookin forward to ya next drop homie,
thanx for da feed on my open mic...
A.T.

[KingOfKings]

good for a keystyle

i liked it man, keep droppin em gems

and peep ma open mic

The Struggle

[Savir]

lmao at King of Kings...u already replied dog...hah....but i'll go hit up your open mic right now...thanx for feedback yall...any more vets ?????/thats what i need.....

[compatible]

yeah man, i liked that shit, maybe a little more internal shit though. my favorite part was 'i'll blaze tracks, or pour out the juice in my thinkin' cap'
keep droppin'