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  1. #1
    sen
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    Question Mystical Minstrel

    hey all would love ta hear what ya all think of my style or if ya even thinks i got potential--let me know yer honest opinion

    thanks




    I'm a phenomenal n logical-mystical minstrel-
    mixin up some magical music-meltin away the media mayhem-mendin minds-movin mountains--
    stoppin the megalomaniacal mysterious madmen-
    from murdering the masses-
    I'm meditatin not kickin asses

    I'm a healer I feelher
    nota dealer or a wheeler
    i don't touch crack heroin or speed
    cause the only thin dat does ma consciousness right
    is 'WEED'
    rollinit up tokinit up
    takinit in
    when me lungs get filled
    i rest da bong on my 'Chin'
    if ya redi ta choke then lets begin

    my words all misty like smoke in ya face
    makin ya dizzy yer lost in outer space
    i'm new n i'm after first place
    flowin with grace n leavin no trace

    call me a rookie
    see if i care
    ya better beware
    cause i got the stare
    i'm yer nightmare,a double whammy blowin outya ears
    i'm all yer fears, a freak, a ghost in the night with second sight
    yer sweatin n i'm bettin
    dat in yer bed tonight you be wettin

    bring it on
    yer gon.....witda wind i begin
    blammin n slammin,shatterin glass n swearing
    yer not even sure what U B hearin

    so go ahead & ignore
    sit back n pass
    i know i've jus started
    but i'm kickin yer ass

    whas da matta

    cats got yer tongue
    you've just been hung
    I see all the dung that you've flung
    spittin n pissin....moanin n groanin
    the title i be ownin
    I'm outa my cage,a free spirited lyrical mage
    so jus stay backstage
    while i clear the air with some sage
    a cosmic shaman ready to engage n enrage

    i'm the yoda of freestyle a jedi of beats
    i know yer scared cause yer hidin under yer sheets
    i'm usin the force, a warhorse off coarse
    words direct from tha source
    with no remorse
    i see ya takin notes off my discourse

    step back n take in some air cause i'm here
    Somebody
    Everybody
    Nobody
    Invisible invincible actual n factual
    a reality in yer face stingin like mace
    yer lost withouta trace, a disgrace to dis place
    heartpounding like a bass
    i'm real-no deal-i'm here to steal
    numba 1 without a gun
    my voice the weapon my words the ammo

    like a flammin arrow-cuttin to yer marrow
    step down.. kiss the ground...
    where i stand/creator my right hand
    you've been canned n scanned
    by my poetical backhand
    a verbal slap leavin no gap
    time to take yer nap
    while I backtrack
    n let yall know
    I'm the Minister of Rap

    cyberspaciousness is dis place of bliss
    i infiltrated yer consciousness
    with spiraling snakes that hiss
    can't believe yer goin out like this

    I'm here for the challenge friend
    takin it to the end
    bettin i'll be da next trend
    parallel universes criss crossing yer world
    I've unfirled---your brain is all curled
    a matrix of memories of heaven on earth
    whats it worth-----remember yer birth
    yer here--for the change-rearrange-all wierd n strange
    mutatin n transformatin /meditatin n creatin
    you gotta a soul/yer whole /love is da goal....ya know let's go
    i'll flow n glow stoppin da show you don't even know whatcha know
    so let's go...
    a spiritual bein you be seein
    not a human doin who's spewing n
    chewin you up n spittin you out without a doubt as you pout
    electrifyin the air
    as you stare
    into the atmosphere
    i'm here/yer where
    that's right/yer full a fear

    Ed aka s.e.n.~Da Minister
    Last edited by sen; May 27th, 2003 at 03:54 AM

  2. #2
    sen
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    c'mon somebody anybody everybody

    is there anyone here who cares ta help another freestyler
    improve on their skillz...

    peace

  3. #3
    sen
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    Uppin for sum critique...........


    also how does everyone count the barz---how many would you say this was?


    help.......

  4. #4
    sen
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    Feed me wit sum FeedBack
    let me know is it OK or whack

    where do I need improvin---

    Hungry 4 da Wisdom

    thanks

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    ima G
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    nice and long, lot of big words (don't like that) but flowed prety well, i really enjoyed reading it lol Weed is good lol some of your lines were very well put together like that check mine tho its some bullshit i made up durning school!
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=50746

    mine is @ the bottome Check out dire_1 battles!
    Grim85.

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    TreaZoN sILLable's Avatar
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    your shit was tight,u got good word play u just need to learn how to blend them together better,it was over all tight,u got well over 40 bars by the way


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  7. #7
    PleDge
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    it was good.but the first bi made ma hjead spin lol to many Ms.........but it was tight....keep spttin yall get better even the best still learn

  8. #8
    sen
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    thanks all----good ta hear pos feedback--

    my first battle sucked---came off weak----
    check out my many posts and gimme yer honest opinion----I have a hard time with the punches---i guess since my fav form of music is the conscious hip hop-trance--takin ya higher kinda stuff--Arrested Development/Speech---Common---Digable Planet-
    PM Dawn---------------

    guess ther really isn't a form a peaceful battlin--wher yer just out spittin insteada diss'in------or maybe ther is---let me know

    thanks


    peace

  9. #9
    sen
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    I forgot ta put the tag for that first Battle---from what many have said so far I don't even know if I should be gettin people ta see it----burn it

    MystiQuest vs sen
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...5&pagenumber=1

  10. #10
    sen
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    Uppin 4 some more feed back---really helps ta hear what everyone thinks-----inspiring 4 the Enquiring


    thanks all

    as 4 battling --not sure if I got what it takes---

  11. #11
    DARK THOUGHT'S
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    OK this is what I do think of a concept or message and try to give across that message being creative not just going out and saying it this piece really didnt have a message more along the line's of rhyme..I would say just try to stay on one topic and be creative some time's less is better hence all the word's that rhyme your structure is set up more of a poetry type verse line length is important try not to make them all uneven try to keepa certain length good luck..

  12. #12
    sen
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    ask & you shall receive..........

    feed back ------opinion----------------perspective---------------

    any advise on how to improve appreciated


    so many talented souls........


    peace

    Thanx 4 everything

  13. #13
    ThE_uNrEaL_1
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    good wordplay, aight flow, nice drop overall, could have been better had yeah had more heart in it... nice overall though return the favor?

  14. #14
    sen
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    uppin 4 more feedback

    spectrum of consciousness
    waves of existence
    A journey beyond 'FlatLand'

    thanx
    peace

  15. #15
    sen
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    thanx 2 everyone who has checked this out--appreciate the feed back

    after seein so many others stuff---i see how much further i need to improve-----so much skill out there--

    peace

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