FL HW Champ Match: -Marvelous- vs M-Var!o

[The Archetype]

Check in by Thursday 1159 pm EDT
Verses due Friday 1159 pm EDT
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[Art.]

yeah im here ...12-14 cool?

[MV]

check im going 1000

[MV]

need an ext until Saturday

[Art.]

no.












=] go for it my dude

[MV]

i peeped your style, nameplay ya opponents losses, with me it aint gon' help
see i would flip that on you, but i would hate to feel like im braggin on myself
n dont leave ya chickadee around me, ill scoop mommy like a ladle
fuck ill as her if she yo baby, if she say yes nigga imma rob the cradle
you are just a half ass clone that cant beat me, fool learn the hard way
the battle people have been waiting on me battling you, Marv.....J
ill kill Marv,no more FL magazine for me, with u in charge it cant get any betta
when i give you the whole mag you wont be writing solo, jus answerin a death vendetta
you not top tier in FL... dont trust the lies you read
if you ever See Mar a Ten, he's helping old ladies to cross the street
NO myth here Marvelous is a homo, something his family knows very well
strange he was never liked bedtime stories, but was always into fairy tails
dam ya breath smells dead, when broads talk to you they literally risk their neck
prolly pay an arm and a leg at the Dentist, ever time he has a brush with death
i saw you champed and couldnt have that its time u get traced in chalk
they'll say the top spot had Mar, then Var came and cleaned the blemish off



16...pretty busy today homie ill check back later..good luck

[Art.]

Your the worst in your set, i checked your battles and your wordings a wreck
plus the way you had troublin containin Cred, how do you expect to deserve my respect
wanna b peoples champ? this dude is a flake, fucked up now your due to be late
only time we'd say your like The Rock in The Ring, is when Arch realizes his jewlerys fake
this pussy couldnt champ LLL either, the crown is somethin u cant get a hold on bitch
You would think your gag reflex was real sensistive, the way you battled and choked' on $pit
You aint a lethal lyricist you fake bitch, you aint a gangsta neither so save it
This poser thought he had street Cred...< caz that MC thru him thru the pavement
and his last 3 battles were worse, hes a pussy i dont need to ask him why
Caz i seen the way King Ancel KO'd him, And Then Tim deaded him and made Thatkidcry
See I'm throwin punches you cant catch, throwin hands wit me s'like havin ya hands latched
M-Var!..<even your name was shocked when it was mentioned with mine in a champ match
Your rap career will never see checks, so you bump loud music to release stress
Then you popped in a CD... but the rest of that crew was trying to press eject
I seen your wall chat and i seen Verbs, Tryna be a mod? but now you seem worse
how the hell do u expect not to be called fake, when your crews not even a real word?


lol i had a mag line just like yours i hada change it lol fucker! goodluck

[H.McCoy]

mvario: concepts were lacking dude and ur muliti link ups were waaaaay off which really killed the whole impact of ur verse,the fairy tales line was easily ur LOTB but it's still not that fresh....can def tell u rushed it and didn't work on polishing up ur wording.

marvelous: def more consistant,was diggin the jewlery/spit & ur name & mine play.. other couple decent hits..overall u had better wording & freshser concepts that were executed better.

marvelous GmV, i can breakdown more if needed but i think this is good enuf

[The Gwapfather]

Nice battle here, Marv got this battle for me though, had some pretty strong personals in there, more of his bars landed then Var!o's, Var had some solid stuff like the fairy tails and brush with death, all though I think the brush with death could have been a bit better still, was a good effort none the less though, Marv just had a harder hitting verse, mainly because he had a good amount of personals that hit, cool battle though fellaz, 1..


VOTE: MARV

[#PrimeTime]

ill kill Marv,no more FL magazine for me, with u in charge it cant get any betta
when i give you the whole mag you wont be writing solo, jus answerin a death vendetta
you not top tier in FL... dont trust the lies you read
if you ever See Mar a Ten, he's helping old ladies to cross the street

vs.

You aint a lethal lyricist you fake bitch, you aint a gangsta neither so save it
This poser thought he had street Cred...< caz that MC thru him thru the pavement
and his last 3 battles were worse, hes a pussy i dont need to ask him why
Caz i seen the way King Ancel KO'd him, And Then Tim deaded him and made Thatkidcry
See I'm throwin punches you cant catch, throwin hands wit me s'like havin ya hands latched
M-Var!..<even your name was shocked when it was mentioned with mine in a champ match

good battle here in my opinion. I think marv came harder with the hard hits from his personals. Vario had some good lines as well, both had some good punches, both had okay vocab, marv was more creative, i think both couldve worded their opening/closing lines a little better as well. marv came stronger and harder in this one. no hate, elevate.

v- -marvelous-

[RPK]

i peeped your style, nameplay ya opponents losses, with me it aint gon' help
see i would flip that on you, but i would hate to feel like im braggin on myself
Decent Opener
n dont leave ya chickadee around me, ill scoop mommy like a ladle
fuck ill as her if she yo baby, if she say yes nigga imma rob the cradle
Okay....
you are just a half ass clone that cant beat me, fool learn the hard way
the battle people have been waiting on me battling you, Marv.....J
Decent, but not everybody is gonna understand it
ill kill Marv,no more FL magazine for me, with u in charge it cant get any betta
when i give you the whole mag you wont be writing solo, jus answerin a death vendetta
nahh
you not top tier in FL... dont trust the lies you read
if you ever See Mar a Ten, he's helping old ladies to cross the street
I didn't like this one
NO myth here Marvelous is a homo, something his family knows very well
strange he was never liked bedtime stories, but was always into fairy tails
Nice
dam ya breath smells dead, when broads talk to you they literally risk their neck
prolly pay an arm and a leg at the Dentist, ever time he has a brush with death
Good wordplay
i saw you champed and couldnt have that its time u get traced in chalk
they'll say the top spot had Mar, then Var came and cleaned the blemish off
weak closer

vs.

Your the worst in your set, i checked your battles and your wordings a wreck
plus the way you had troublin containin Cred, how do you expect to deserve my respect
Nice Opener
wanna b peoples champ? this dude is a flake, fucked up now your due to be late
only time we'd say your like The Rock in The Ring, is when Arch realizes his jewlerys fake
Nice wordplay
this pussy couldnt champ LLL either, the crown is somethin u cant get a hold on bitch
You would think your gag reflex was real sensistive, the way you battled and choked' on $pit
Yet again... Nice
You aint a lethal lyricist you fake bitch, you aint a gangsta neither so save it
This poser thought he had street Cred...< caz that MC thru him thru the pavement
Nahh... can't use two lines involving Cred
and his last 3 battles were worse, hes a pussy i dont need to ask him why
Caz i seen the way King Ancel KO'd him, And Then Tim deaded him and made Thatkidcry
I didn't like this one
See I'm throwin punches you cant catch, throwin hands wit me s'like havin ya hands latched
M-Var!..<even your name was shocked when it was mentioned with mine in a champ match
Good
Your rap career will never see checks, so you bump loud music to release stress
Then you popped in a CD... but the rest of that crew was trying to press eject
Good
I seen your wall chat and i seen Verbs, Tryna be a mod? but now you seem worse
how the hell do u expect not to be called fake, when your crews not even a real word?
Okay... But not that good for a closer


This was a great battle. Vario had a lot of good lines, as did Marv. However, I found Marvs punches more consistent, and stronger bars overall. I just thought you drove the use of people who beat Vario into the ground.

V.Marv

[oatmeal]

Vario:

i peeped your style, nameplay ya opponents losses, with me it aint gon' help
see i would flip that on you, but i would hate to feel like im braggin on myself

wording was awkward here. I feel as if the concept you were going for was saying he had your style, and that if you flipped it on him you would be dogging on yourself. I like the concept, but it wasn't really executed.

n dont leave ya chickadee around me, ill scoop mommy like a ladle
fuck ill as her if she yo baby, if she say yes nigga imma rob the cradle

"fuck ill as her if she yo baby" is really odd to read and doesn't make sense. concept was cool, though, the baby/cradle play is clear enough.

you are just a half ass clone that cant beat me, fool learn the hard way
the battle people have been waiting on me battling you, Marv.....J

pretty simple, but effective. there's nothing wrong with a simple play or flip so long as it's clean and true

ill kill Marv,no more FL magazine for me, with u in charge it cant get any betta
when i give you the whole mag you wont be writing solo, jus answerin a death vendetta

"answering a death vendetta" is a weird way to say it, but concept works, some gunplay but I like it

you not top tier in FL... dont trust the lies you read
if you ever See Mar a Ten, he's helping old ladies to cross the street

this was a stretch to me. I always pronounced Samaritan as "suh-mare-i-tin."
In any case, this wasn't bad, just stretched

NO myth here Marvelous is a homo, something his family knows very well
strange he was never liked bedtime stories, but was always into fairy tails

again, should have cleaned up the wording ("he never liked bedtime stories" would have been better), but I like the punch.

dam ya breath smells dead, when broads talk to you they literally risk their neck
prolly pay an arm and a leg at the Dentist, ever time he has a brush with death

I thought you were juggling too many concepts in there for this to work. you have the brush/dentist/bad breath, then the risk your neck/pay arm and leg/death bit, and nothing really tied all of them together. Too complex can hurt the punch.

i saw you champed and couldnt have that its time u get traced in chalk
they'll say the top spot had Mar, then Var came and cleaned the blemish off

I liked this, good closer. this worked because one, a mar is a blemish, and second because the letter V is (roughly) present in the letter M if you look at them physically. so yeah, clever, nice line.


Marvelous:

Your the worst in your set, i checked your battles and your wordings a wreck
plus the way you had troublin containin Cred, how do you expect to deserve my respect

this doesn't quite work. I get the play on cred and respect, and that he lost to Credential, but you gotta find a way to phrase it so it works both ways (people don't say "oh that dude contains cred" when referring to street cred nah mean?). it's not bad, just slightly off

wanna b peoples champ? this dude is a flake, fucked up now your due to be late
only time we'd say your like The Rock in The Ring, is when Arch realizes his jewlerys fake

lol, this was clever, I liked it

this pussy couldnt champ LLL either, the crown is somethin u cant get a hold on bitch
You would think your gag reflex was real sensistive, the way you battled and choked' on $pit

again, the play doesn't connect how you worded it. plus, the punch basically just states that he lost to someone else, which (even if the wordplay was flawless) is kind of a soft blow. If it was an embarrassing loss, explain why/how in a clever punch, or at least have a stronger flip on the opponent's name.

You aint a lethal lyricist you fake bitch, you aint a gangsta neither so save it
This poser thought he had street Cred...< caz that MC thru him thru the pavement

I liked this, it was much better than the first Cred line, but the fact that you had 2 of them, where the flips were basically the same, lessens the impact.

and his last 3 battles were worse, hes a pussy i dont need to ask him why
Caz i seen the way King Ancel KO'd him, And Then Tim deaded him and made Thatkidcry

not feeling this, basically just listed off opponent's he's lost to. Plus, the play on that kid cry only works one way (unless Tim's win over Vario made the person ThatKidCry).

See I'm throwin punches you cant catch, throwin hands wit me s'like havin ya hands latched
M-Var!..<even your name was shocked when it was mentioned with mine in a champ match

lol I liked this. another example of a simple punch that works

Your rap career will never see checks, so you bump loud music to release stress
Then you popped in a CD... but the rest of that crew was trying to press eject

another good one, funny

I seen your wall chat and i seen Verbs, Tryna be a mod? but now you seem worse
how the hell do u expect not to be called fake, when your crews not even a real word?

not feeling this. setup doesn't have much to do with the punch, and the punch itself, though true, is pretty soft.



Vote: This was a good battle. Vario was more consistent, but he lacked haymakers. Marvelous had the bigger misses, but overall his wording was better and he had a couple of zings. So I vote for Marvelous.

[Bongkers]

i peeped your style, nameplay ya opponents losses, with me it aint gon' help
see i would flip that on you, but i would hate to feel like im braggin on myself
ehh
n dont leave ya chickadee around me, ill scoop mommy like a ladle
fuck ill as her if she yo baby, if she say yes nigga imma rob the cradle
wasn't feeling this
you are just a half ass clone that cant beat me, fool learn the hard way
the battle people have been waiting on me battling you, Marv.....J
OK, wording could have been stronger
ill kill Marv,no more FL magazine for me, with u in charge it cant get any betta
when i give you the whole mag you wont be writing solo, jus answerin a death vendetta
didn't like this one a whole lot either fam
you not top tier in FL... dont trust the lies you read
if you ever See Mar a Ten, he's helping old ladies to cross the street
a bit of a reach for the wordplay nameplay there, creative tho
NO myth here Marvelous is a homo, something his family knows very well
strange he was never liked bedtime stories, but was always into fairy tails
lol nice
dam ya breath smells dead, when broads talk to you they literally risk their neck
prolly pay an arm and a leg at the Dentist, ever time he has a brush with death
decent
i saw you champed and couldnt have that its time u get traced in chalk
they'll say the top spot had Mar, then Var came and cleaned the blemish off
ehh





Your the worst in your set, i checked your battles and your wordings a wreck
plus the way you had troublin containin Cred, how do you expect to deserve my respect
OK
wanna b peoples champ? this dude is a flake, fucked up now your due to be late
only time we'd say your like The Rock in The Ring, is when Arch realizes his jewlerys fake
I dunno why you threw arches name in there it kinda threw the wording off IMO, but I lol'd and this concept was pretty dope
this pussy couldnt champ LLL either, the crown is somethin u cant get a hold on bitch
You would think your gag reflex was real sensistive, the way you battled and choked' on $pit
prolly a little played. OK line
You aint a lethal lyricist you fake bitch, you aint a gangsta neither so save it
This poser thought he had street Cred...< caz that MC thru him thru the pavement
nice line, but using a cred reference twice? not feeling that bro
and his last 3 battles were worse, hes a pussy i dont need to ask him why
Caz i seen the way King Ancel KO'd him, And Then Tim deaded him and made Thatkidcry
ok
See I'm throwin punches you cant catch, throwin hands wit me s'like havin ya hands latched
M-Var!..<even your name was shocked when it was mentioned with mine in a champ match
lol, nice concept..
Your rap career will never see checks, so you bump loud music to release stress
Then you popped in a CD... but the rest of that crew was trying to press eject
lol nice
I seen your wall chat and i seen Verbs, Tryna be a mod? but now you seem worse
how the hell do u expect not to be called fake, when your crews not even a real word?
ok


felt this was pretty one sided, seemed like Var rushed his verse cause his wording was pretty messy, marv dropped pretty strong here, he was consistent with the good lines and had far fewer misses.. no hate var

V - Marvelous