Passerby

[Moniker]

How passionate are you? I mean really.
Is it legitimate for me
to be this inquisitive when I'm
liable to tell myself
the wrong answer aswell.
I even hate asking,
but it just so happens that
the question reflects this image
in my head of a tree that's
stopped growing years ago.
So this extroverted interview
is all I can stand to bring out
the beauty that's more like
a beast to you. Yea, I've fed it too.
He eats mirrors and spits future
seeds in fertile land-fills.

Cause see, I'm still knee-deep
in contingencies; looking at the
hollow birds who want to walk the earth
with us. I've told them they were born
to fly, but this discourse is certain to birth
an alibi. We've never wanted to spread
anything sky-worthy so why would wings
be any different? I'd rather be plane.
If you could travel me or atlas my anatomy,
then who better to stamp your ticket..
you quick winded passerby.
Yea, I've landed somewhere near there before;
unable to firmly latch the doors
mapped back to clear memory.
Shaky take-offs make me pilot a mind
not ready for flight. When think engines sleep,
dreams run idle and I feel like there's a shadowy
figure at the wheel. It's an uneasy
-only met you once before- type of journey.

Right turns are always made on red lights.
And I have to say, I still hesitate to turn,
knowing full well how many accidents
an average person will experience
in their life time. With a third eye view
I've seen Jesus called alot of things besides
a taxi. Overused and seldom understated
they've played out the street preacher
megaphone message; perspective dial-tones
got lost meeting at the feet of the cross-roads.
Now we worship on side-walks,
watching the sound of traffic pass by;
hands raised liked we're all waiting
for that taxi to come back 'round.

Rusted yellow paint, chipped hearts
and peeling tears. My only fear is hearing how
church has become an out-stretched limo disservice.
We'll look like fools, all piling into the same car
like anxious clowns headed to a heaven circus.
But I don't care, His word is booked for
the world to tour. (Be prepared it's a long drive).
Checker flag us because we've finished following
what leads to broken down truth. There's enough
fuel to jump-start a revolution if we have to.
Get uncomfortable... this back seat is for confessionals.
I've left my sins on the dashboard and past
in the ash tray, and the best part is that He claims
the fare has already been paid. Don't hold it too loosely,
settling for anything less will get you short changed.

[Moniker]

up.

[Moniker]

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[Cody Nash]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=328086




well, here we go.


the piece was deep. real deep. you had a lot of metaphor in this, and if you didn't mean to have a lot of metaphor, it still turned out that way. it kept me reading, but what's strange is that i ended up reading without the intention to stop. simply because of the topic! I don't know how to explain myself there, but that's what i did. and when it stopped, i wanted more. It seemed like a story that you didn't think could ever end, just a continuing subject. if you read this a certain way, not saying that it's what you intended to do, but you could imagine this coming from a bum on the streets. or maybe it could be something on it's way to meet someone ..maybe being stood up, and sulking on a park bench. it went 100 different ways for me and i could sit here and jabber on about each one but i won't.

got lost meeting at the feet of the cross-roads.
Now we worship on side-walks,
watching the sound of traffic pass by;

^a prime example of where I got most of the ideas though. like i said before, it was deep. I loved how it made me think of 100 different things and it was almost like this piece was making me desperatley search for a metaphor! crazy, i know. but cool. thanks for the read mind, enjoyed it.

[Prince Escobar]

If i had forgotten how good you were this might have suprised me more, and yet i'm still taken aback Mind. The imagery i solid, a lot stronger then my memory serves me of your older work. Not sure what i can say to break down your style that hasn't been said before, but i will say that one thing i most appreciated about this piece is how cohesive every image and theme is, your transitions are seamless and caused me to never lose interest from the first line, you seem to have a knack for that.

Well done.