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    A Thirteen's Odd Apollo-gies

    "Houston...[scrkkk] Houston... do you have a condom?
    we're fucked out here with no space or time to continuum."
    Um, how many blondes does it take to screw or solder
    in a microcomputer? To the moon Alice, we're consumed
    with reaching new highs and Haights for the users.
    We'll never bury the Ashes beneath our bedsheets,
    the feds think dreams are all they can shatter unless we
    beat them to the punch, cue the spike in mercury rising.
    There's no certainty of the I in Cr[I'm]e when machines
    do the time. Had us believing the streets were clean...
    it was just the money that needed laundering; broadening
    the police sweeps with eagle tipped wings in flight.
    Recite your rights to the children who picked the wrong fights;
    the cause was polite, like launching sky rocket's delight.
    This afternoon viewers felt cartooned, seeing silver spoons
    in smooth orbit (or did they "sort of" forge it?) Who knew
    if you'd drink milk you too could jump over the silk-screen ruse.
    Spring the clues, only may-days would pay.. say, a million youths?
    I bet drug dealers confused their hand and charged cards at large,
    playing with our stars behind bars; how fars the discourse
    when you draw a powdered white line to divide a black universe.
    "I'm sorry officer.. I offered her mars; in return I sat, earned
    a few dollars for holdin'," egos blowing smoke rings out uranus.
    Fame: it's yours, ain't it? Take everything I own, restrain trust.
    Can't beat the solar system; engines combust, but cops must
    patrol those on parole chasin' for a trace of that angel's dust.
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    Re: A Thirteen's Odd Apollo-gies

    iaght
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    mind, I'm going to fucking hang you.. get some links
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    Re: A Thirteen's Odd Apollo-gies

    Yea, yea.
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    Re: A Thirteen's Odd Apollo-gies

    Umm lol,

    This was a very..unique peice lol. More of a comedy ruteen to me. The Wordplay was great and very mature. The Emotion was..set as comedy. The Flow was great. The Structre was nice an basic. The Imagenation was remarkible. Pure perfection. The Creativty was nice as well. Keep it up dude. Your great.

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    RTF on ym new peice "My Memories".

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    Thanks man.
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    Re: A Thirteen's Odd Apollo-gies

    Up?
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    Re: A Thirteen's Odd Apollo-gies

    last time
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    Re: A Thirteen's Odd Apollo-gies

    Definitly interesting, maybe one of the few pieces by you where I didn't understand some of your crazy metaphors (does Alice represent a lost person like Alice in wonderland?), and i thought the sat earned/uranus lines were kind of awkward and out of place, even though they went with the central theme, other than that this was very nice, really liked the opening two line, nice play on words there, thre read was smooth and was complimented by your rhyme scheme. nice job
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    Re: A Thirteen's Odd Apollo-gies

    the hell was that all about?
    so many thoughts mashed in this short piece...jesus
    I mean if I look at it from the lyrical point of you than I can't be mad at cha
    this piece was very clean cut...good lyricism...good imagery as well as worldplay and the rest...blah but i don't get where u going with this...that's my only problem.
    well maybe it's just me so it's whatever

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    Re: A Thirteen's Odd Apollo-gies

    Quote Originally Posted by Laureate
    (does Alice represent a lost person like Alice in wonderland?)
    Nah, it's actually a quote from an old sitcom. I forget the name of it but it was back during the black and white TV days. The guy would always say something like I'll knock you "to the moon alice," when they argued. Haight is short for Haight/Ashbury. A corner in San Fran that was one of the biggest known drug spots in the 70's. Silver spoons and the line after was a reference to that "hey diddle diddle" kids rhyme. The rest should be easier to figure out. Overall it's just telling how America was so concerned with winning the race to land on the moon, while people were dying/put in prison for drug abuse. It was probably one of the biggest "Fuck you's" to the ghettos at the time, because our government showed what truly mattered most to them. We didn't learn shit from landing/orbiting the moon to help improve everyday life, it just satisfied our curiosity for a bit. If they put those billions of dollars that Nasa sucked dry into our communities instead, the average person's quality of life would have been improved.
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