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    Exclamation Obscene Orders........collabo with Baron P Mortuus

    Obscene Orders





    1-Vortex
    2-Baron P Mortuus


    You see I’m practically bleeding -- while you’re reading this,
    Yet, perhaps you’re literally sleeping, so I’m achieving shit…
    With what I writ, I mean wrote with grit from this grieving pit…
    Which I call my heart; its strings are torn apart from tension;
    Mentioned in the dark - my name became a stark repulsion,
    As the notion of art I portrayed played - a perfect serenade
    Each word hit like a grenade that made waves to eliminate…
    The fears and demons that lurk to undo my true purpose,
    No tears are streaming, still hurt imbues like a crude circus
    Who cares for dreaming? I’m cursed and might move nervous
    Close to the edge of madness… teeth gnash between flashes
    Obscene flashes of inspired faith formed by serene dashes
    I lean backwards to absorb an attack of black & white factors…
    Simple but ruthless, vile foes remain wrapped in my chapters…
    In this world full of actors – bullshit’ is’ practiced by masses,
    Society splits into classes… they stay hooked to the chassis
    As a few advance, & look to the Holy book for some answers.
    Grave cancers beat even the brave into retreat, eaten by awe
    Furore flows deep to the core; deacons are deceiving the law
    I don’t believe them any more…- than fraudulent fraudsters…
    Gorging on oysters, our Orb is’ run by government gangsters.

    Fucking Obscene...

    Shady villains ill with chameleon honesty- like burnt talons
    Felons re-writing bills-crazed with pills-human repairs at salons
    Alonso joined priest--hood did him-- no good drove him away
    infused politics created by biologists using human lambs all day
    Pray for father please forgive me—deceiving with dishonesty
    Child lone moans against worldly unjust- bust his bubble probably
    Rubbles create a monopoly—made by menopause—unwomanly
    To not birth a child—so she shouts & screams burns her dreams
    Desecrates tombs—containing false holy beings—seeing seems
    Clouded—lies shrouded—ask Mr. Gov., he’ll tell you more about it
    How’s it—drowse shit—then burn—burn fit in an urn—earn hits
    Spurn away news blitz—false news channels—hustling institutions
    What about the president—sleeping upon ordered executions
    Use your intuition- what does it foresee?—a life of dirt + poverty
    Maybe you’ll die a quick death, overdosing on gas—maybe meth?
    Bless he who believes and shun he who disagrees. Bitch that’s church
    Lurch at unproblematic issues---using tissues to ignore the surge
    To just die---I said die—die die-die…let it end in a go---it grows
    better fast than slow—run the blade down the street or up the creek
    How about around that neck which breathes..Esophagus blows
    and the blood gushes in your mouth—cutting short that racist speech.



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    Re: Obscene Orders

    yeah i know iwas so high earlier and then the computer just went off

    I'm not sure if it has changed on the main heading now . though i changed the title
    ha
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    Re: Obscene Orders

    No doubt.

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    Re: Obscene Orders

    This was some dope shit, for real dudes. I was reall feeling it. Ninjah came with the flow as usual, but also a very good story too, it had me interested from the word go, up until the very end, props. Pak had a dope verse too, and came with the intellectual shit I have come to expect from him, also had a very good story and some dope ass imagery as well, emotion was kinda lacking in places, but nothing major at all. So props dudes, you did a good job. Peace

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    Re: Obscene Orders

    f'sho
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    Re: Obscene Orders

    aight
    Mak'in History!!

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    Re: Obscene Orders

    Aight.

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    Re: Obscene Orders

    This was a pretty dope collab....I see it was pretty slept on as well...Vortex's flow was great...and consistant...and the content within his piece was felt throughout the drop...What I really like about this collab was the fact that nobody outshine another and both pieces seemed to fit perfectly...in the ending...
    Close to the edge of madness… teeth gnash between flashes
    Obscene flashes of inspired faith formed by serene dashes
    I lean backwards to absorb an attack of black & white factors…
    Simple but ruthless, vile foes remain wrapped in my chapters…
    In this world full of actors – bullshit’ is’ practiced by masses,
    Society splits into classes… they stay hooked to the chassis
    Loved these lines....


    Baron I loved the content within your drop...seemed very realistic fore the imagery you provided...You basically touched on all aspect's of american life.and the bullshit that goes on...good shit..

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    Clouded—lies shrouded—ask Mr. Gov., he’ll tell you more about it
    How’s it—drowse shit—then burn—burn fit in an urn—earn hits
    Spurn away news blitz—false news channels—hustling institutions
    What about the president—sleeping upon ordered executions
    Use your intuition- what does it foresee?—a life of dirt + poverty
    Maybe you’ll die a quick death, overdosing on gas—maybe meth?
    Bless he who believes and shun he who disagrees. Bitch that’s church
    Lurch at unproblematic issues---using tissues to ignore the surge
    goos shit @ both and pls...rtf...


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