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    Over & Out

    Over & Out

    Atlas stones are nothing to the globe that he holds
    when time ripples and folds he becomes crippled and old.
    When the curtains close and his soliloquy ends
    with an epiphany and an exclamation point to bend
    will he mend the cuts on his arms from the “almost fells”
    or will he snap over and out with a story to tell?

    Will he raise hell to heaven? ...Bring them face-to-face?
    Only Atlas knows because he stands in God’s place.
    He’s imprisoned by guilt with a ball and chain
    knowing damn well he’s in charge of our fate
    but let’s set aside the commotion and pain for a sec
    ‘cause I’ve got a notion that a thought can’t be direct.

    So let’s dissect what’s inside of his mind
    because taking pride in a concept is easy to hide
    and maybe our lives…
    are being lived in a bubble thought
    …resting on Atlas’ shoulders, above his head
    maybe the moment you let go – your life can’t be led…

    See greed is a prestigious disease believed to be seen
    so we chase our dreams with relative ease and impeach
    the basis of our lives as selective thoughts branched from a tree
    …that was grown from a brainstorm…
    …of Atlas thoughts.
    So I’ll hold on to this concept until my shoulder joints rot
    and watch the people I caught branch off from the seed that I dropped

    And when Atlas’ shoulders begin to bend or give
    I’ll never question why I lived
    inside of a bubble, part of a metaphorical rout
    His life will be over…
    …But I’ll finally be out.

    -Over and out.


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    Last edited by Pious; December 14th, 2006 at 10:43 PM

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    Re: Over & Out

    bump.............................................. .

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    Re: Over & Out

    When the curtains close and his soliloquy ends
    with an epiphany and an exclamation point to bend
    will he mend the cuts on his arms from the “almost fells”
    or will he snap over and out with a story to tell?
    Nice one , i get the point already.

    So let’s dissect what’s inside of his mind
    because taking pride in a concept is easy to hide
    and maybe our lives…
    are being lived in a bubble thought
    …resting on Atlas’ shoulders, above his head
    maybe the moment you let go – your life can’t be led…
    You fell off with that one , but overall nice, good imagination and good lyrics mainly, kepp dropp'n i say

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    Re: Over & Out

    thx for the feed bud...............................

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    Re: Over & Out

    uppin for feed.......................................

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    Re: Over & Out

    this wasa nice piece right here....

    great great emotion and the wording was nice and the point of vocab and usage of it was just a nice touch and evenly spread out...applied to the right spots and flowed well..the emotino in this was a good understanding and was just a nice feeling in it and i followed on it nicely so it was a nice structure and the meaning of this was great man nice drop here

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