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    Taking the wind out of their sales

    This is dedicated to every emcee...
    who thought they didn't have to battle to keep their credibility.


    My terms terminate your worth with a hunger
    for colossal amounts of false gold
    like there's termites in my teeth, I floss after
    eating through each CD you over sold.
    I'm too busy milking your hunnies bare
    to care about comparing businesses man,
    so buzz off, fuzzy was a bear was as far
    as your dopest vocabulary ever spanned.
    Your girl demands I kill her pu-tang,
    then C.R.E.A.M. on her face like Wu-Tang
    because even if you were a bee you
    couldn't keep-her deep fangs from hangin
    on my stinger wang that's aimed at you
    gang-bangers with fake southern slang.
    I got the real blue-grass twang, turning
    you lame twig and berries into smoothies.
    I'll tell your crunk juice carrying fans
    to pour it out... cause you're dead, homies.
    Hold it, RB doesn't know me but best believe
    I've toted everything from sig-fried
    to Ozz, Toto is my dawg but no treats
    for the rest of you... y'all got frosty paws.
    I'm flawless with all this thawed beef
    you fiends gnaw on; left picking straws
    to see who I slaughter with awe, turning
    jaws and 5 mic hype into coleslaw.
    Ta-da, magically I'm past the fad of baggy
    jeans, but y'all still thrill-riding dirty
    in them clean white-T's? I slap pimps with
    their own bag of tricks, ya heard me?
    That's what I call playing wordy,
    verse me and end up listless like Fergie.
    Son, In my forties I'll be farther then
    all your baby mama's other four fathers,
    so don't bother. Conquer rap? You're
    just an old punk who's lost his rocker.
    All fodder and no cannon, handed you
    lit fuses to watch you implode (awkward).
    Ding! Punch-line ready. This was a 15
    minute easy recipe... like Betty Crocker.
    Last edited by Aksent; December 11th, 2006 at 02:14 AM

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    Re: Taking the wind out of their sales

    You will need some links.

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    Re: Taking the wind out of their sales

    Oh! Damn yo... thanks man.
    And nice sleeve dude (if that's you in your sig)

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    Re: Taking the wind out of their sales

    Where's the feed?!

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    Re: Taking the wind out of their sales

    This was nice, nothing spectacular, but still nice. Some of your slang was somewhat awkward to me. But for the most part it was comprehendible. There’s not much to critic. It was a free verse - I guess a flexing session (if you will). You know - nice flow, decent lyrics. You can hang.

    Keep it up



    P.S. - here's something you might enjoy

    Spit-Bucket Frees and Quotes for Cheap!
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312538

    ^Just me fucking around.


    pZ
    Last edited by LedgenZ; December 12th, 2006 at 07:13 PM

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    Re: Taking the wind out of their sales

    this was aight. not really that impressive. seemed like it would sound better on an audio, but the structure made it seem like one big sentence fragment. try using multies and expressing motion a little bit better. put more emphasis on your rhyming words - try ending your lines with them.

    return the feed...

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=319768
    Nick James.

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