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    Arrow A Hustlers Plot

    In the Pharmacy~Absolutely my skills is infinitely polished
    I understand yo cookin' skills' is undeveloped like Theoretical logic

    Im a HUSTLA, shits ~critical when you struggle wit money foe College
    My Habits are Coke Tatics I could change my name to Automated Deposit

    The way my money flowin' like water and Fosits Im the Ring Blessed By the Lords of Scarlett
    Raised on Chow line's in the Projects ,You some other thing chasin' a Dream you just a Hobit

    I Serve Crack like seats in a Stadium My Dope is inflamous yours is Definitely Garbage
    I leave em sick wit Vomit I got the Fiends Feelin' Famous they think my Rocks are Comets

    The Money schemes Neva Stop Fake niggaz Livin' out Movie Themes be the First to Get Shot
    Amongst other things this is a Hustla's plot A quick turnover on cream and avoid-in' the Drops

    Yo Pockets lacking stamina Homie,you must be in need of some vitamin C (oke)
    I roll threw Leather Jacket know chrome on Twenty Two's thats white a than D (ope)

    Nigga Foot Ball is a Game of Inch's, Im Serving Base Balls trying to win the Penant
    With Lawyer doe to keep me off them benchs, So Fuck a Public Defendant in the Eigth inn'in

    In my Twilight im far from the Passion of Christ, but its the Passion of Life thrist and Hunger
    Thats why I spend my Bible Study Nights outta the Church on Corners

    Blowin' Dro mar-a-jauna goin' down On my A- list chick like im headed for TaJuwana
    Wit Ten Stacks of Grocerry Product that All my A- list Fiends Honor like they Meetin' Wit Alah

    Im on My Feet and Im real wit Cake,, I use to Run Balls State to State like Priest Holmes
    Now My Fleet To eat we use Real Estate,, I BYE,, Sale,,, And Lease Holmes when the Price Deflate

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    . . . Tragedian.'s Avatar
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    The only good thing here was the rhyming, but other than that nothing. work on your structre because that is hard on the eyes lol, and dont space out your bars, work on your vocab shit's simple, and dont write about such stupid shit noone is gonna leave feed, and you need 2 links of good feed you have left on other peoples oms.
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    Ok.

    To start off, it was an "ok" piece.
    But u need to change ure structure. The first thing people notice about this, is prob. ure wack structure.
    Werd to dj... The only good thing was ure rhyming.
    But change ure structure, so people can read it better, and keep working.

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    Scoping you out.

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    agree'd wit them, this is an ok piece, u need to fix ur struc, put some emotion, a little imagery, and make it just a little more personal, u should have nailed this topic.

    leave feed on my om = child soldier

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