Ode to Writer's Block

[Lauren.]

There's excessive inspiration flooding my imagination
This noise becomes posessive of my thoughts, sanity preventing
I attempt to ventilate through writing, finding just frustration
The ink has frozen all emotion, hopelessness fermenting
The rhyme scheme shreds and aggravates, complexity is shattered
Crumpled parchment drafts stare mockingly, each butchered composition
Why won't the words cooperate, my soul's left feeling tattered
Battered fluency haunts every phrase, the devoid page is blinding
Desparately I seek a remedy, my lifeline now elusive
As the structure dwindles, syllables leave my thoughts inconclusive
What began with good intentions is unbearable to author
As each pained line shrinks
It hurts to think
Continuation feels like torture
Metaphorically I'm crumbling, wait literally I am as well
This lack of luster, writer's block, ensnares me with its spell
And then everything diminishes to hollow shouts of desparation
A voice unheard yet desparately seeking a narration
Indescribable this torture, undeniable the outrage
When the page is filled with tension, and the tension never dissapates
AND NOTHING COMES TO MIND EXCEPT WHAT I CAN'T COMMUNICATE!
But wait...


There while crumpled, disillusioned is a soft fidelity
The words have always been within me, they'll be for eternity
And although creation's captive when this wields its crushing sorrow
There's a heartbreak for today, but a breakthrough for tomorrow



***note--I had writer's block while writing this and the piece metaphorically represents writer's block because there are parts that aren't perfect. I did that on purpose, so unless you're a retard you should catch that lol




http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=314889
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=315328

[Mariah]

Honestly, this leave's a lot to be desired and it seems more like a piece you di djust to waste time instead of try to make it actually get the point across. I like your writing style for the most part, but this threw me off. I don't see what is the importance of the piece being written and the topic is not interesting. Now, what I did like was the structure and flow, I always like that from you and the vocabulary...is intense. All I can say is take more time on a piece that you purposely made mistakes in.

-Mariah

Hit up my piece Escaping Death

[Lauren.]

I had writer's block badly...

[Mariah]

understood...I have 2 links now...go feed mine

[Engineer]

This was a good piece, at best... Not sure why, but I didnt like this as much as all of your other pieces But never-the-less, it was a great attempt at something brilliant

Your flow was easy to follow, your structure was presented beautifully, and your vocabulary and multies were good also

Overall, a great piece here Fiyah

RTF on "Through Whispering Words"

[Split.]

this is good shit. I did notice the parts that faltered, if you did that on purpose that's cool. You're vocabulary doesn't cease to astound me. I still find it hard to believe you're only 15, but I guess crazier things have been, and will be. topic has been done, but every writer deserves to do it, and you did it well.. Imagery... imagery stands out here. I'd quote a line, but I'm too lazy, I liked this though.. You've got talent youngan.

guess what I'd like you to do with this...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=316234

[Lauren.]

lol thanks and yeah I did mess some parts up on purpose...it's a deep level beyond deep lol, and I'll try to hit up that link