Be My Gues(t)s

[Moniker]

"I wanted to be black at age thirteen,
all I became was a rhyme machine."

I digress unless I must impress the audience;
the best dressed, noblest mess of garments.
My progress suppressed by stress and ambiance
that I address then ask distress to acquiesce
an obsession as finesse tests my success. Yes,
it's assesments expressed in the best interest.
Blessed to be caressing a beat there's no lesson
lamented, just best guesses for my guests discretion.
Kept you questioning the quest, contestants
step in protest while I rest to asses the request
sent by agression; left-handed investments.
Got no vest or "S" on my chests but I possess
methods that check correct with comprehension.
Kid's resent to extend consent in my direction
they're spent on this content and it's definitions;
renting a representation that resembles perception
but in any event can't even detect the detonation.

"I wanted to stay white at age twenty...
then realized that hip-hop already won me."

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=315378
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=315291
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[Atti]

lol... mind, you're a beast. these om'ers need to open thier eyes, i think they've forgotten that you dominate topical just as easily as you do poetry.

[HospitIll]

i like this alot.. vocab is crazy as is the flow and structure...
most people try to make their drop complex and loose everythign else but here u put it all together and lost nothing.. has all aspects of an amazing piece..

[..IllThoughtZ..]

hmmm...i loved this concept very much...never seen this done..very very nice multies and vocab put together to make one hellava writing display...i havent ready many OM's from you so this is fresh to my eyes..i dont know what else to say accept good job...there was nothing i didnt like about it except it could've been longer....but other than that ...kudos...rtf plz and vote on my topical battle in sig...thanks

[DaKiNgBaK]

yeah that was sicc.
i like the way you put your words together, makes me think of other things i can do.
ur tight but one of these days man, i gotta get ya. no disrespect.
keep it up man
and good luck in the future

[MADDUS]

this was cool but tbh i thought a couple a words seemed to be
a bit cluttered...prolly just how i read it ... your statement at the
start had me pre-judging the piece...but the direction you took
wasnt predictable...which was coo...strait piece...im out

[Moniker]

Wow, thanks to all. Honestly thought this one would be overlooked.
I rarely, if ever, do a braggadocio styled piece like this short excerpt.
I'll try to hit back some pieces in return.

[Engineer]

This was a nice piece, I'm a massive fan of multies, and yours were nice man, real nice. I hardly see such multies pulled off with that kind of flow and structure, it was really unique.

Your vocabulary was great, and your flow and structure were brilliant. The shortened verse was awesome, I loved the feeling I (and so many others) got after this piece, we craved more.

The literature and the way you structured all your words were also extremelly well put together

Congratulations, this was a very good piece, keep up the awesome writing, which I'm sure you will.

Peace and Cheers

PS: If you can, please RTF on my OM "Black Roses, Red Tears" (I sent you a PM)

[Moniker]

up?

[Mar'Kiss]

He's pretty good..Gott admit..
Whats his Battle Record.

[Moniker]

No idea, I haven't battled in years.

[Symbolic.]

Wow, ths was a divine read, that flow is so dope man I like it great multies all throughout it rhymed well with imagery and voabulary very striking imagery and eye catching vivid comparisons to different thing I likd this peice alotthe structure helped but I think it was a bit dole in the creativity criteria but it was very dope man I hope you make alot more like it, word.