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    The Mind of a Poet (Complete)

    The mind of a poet
    Is clearer than the cleanest water,
    That trickles through your mind
    Like a stream of thoughts,
    Until it builds
    Into a waterfall of emotions,
    And collects
    In a lake of blood,
    Surrounding the hole
    I put in my head…

    The mind of a poet
    Is crowded with ideas,
    Scratching to get out
    Until they burn a passage
    Through your right hand
    Bleed onto the page
    And formulate the letters
    That didn’t make sense
    When I thought them…
    The rough draft of imagination

    The mind of a poet
    Is obscured by blurs
    Of occurrences never heard
    The shadow you walk on
    And the one that hides you
    In the darkness you shiver
    But fail to realize
    That it is the lone cloud
    That rains down the tears
    You didn’t know how to cry

    The mind of a poet
    Is a sponge for opportunity
    Seeping up the things
    You never knew you knew
    Until you can process
    The illogical systems
    Oil your wheels that
    Never stopped turning
    And keep in mind
    What is on the outside

    The mind of a poet
    Is the birthplace of creation,
    The origin of the ideals
    You press upon yourself
    And when you feel trapped
    Like your space is caving in
    Always remember your goal
    Of what is yet to come
    And that your wish is only,
    A mark on the page away
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    The mind of a poet
    Is crowded with ideas,
    Scratching to get out
    Until they burn a passage
    Through your right hand
    Bleed onto the page
    And formulate the letters
    That didn’t make sense
    When I thought them…The rough draft of imagination

    ^^
    liked this line cus it being true and the feeling i got from it being very percise.

    the way you wrote your lines and the flow i got out of it with great depth in emotion was really nice...seeing this as being true also really helped out alot


    The mind of a poet
    Is the birthplace of creation,
    The origin of the ideals
    You press upon yourself
    And when you feel trapped
    Like your space is caving in
    Always remember your goal
    Of what is yet to come
    And that your wish is only,
    A mark on the page away

    ^^
    painted a nice picture..the image in this was greatly outputted. nice do laureate..really well done in wording and structure and emotion dude. feeling this well done...nice.

    RTF if so.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Laureate
    The mind of a poet
    Is clearer than the cleanest water,
    That trickles through your mind
    Like a stream of thoughts,
    Until it builds
    Into a waterfall of emotions,
    And collects
    In a lake of blood,
    Surrounding the hole
    I put in my head…
    I don't know, but there was something about this part that was an ironic and clever wording passage. I loved this whole thing, s o deep and real, about what's happening to poets today. I loved it man, it was great and a nice, easy and relaxing read on the eyes. Very emotional, and the irony in it was great, just the depression and IMPRESSION it put on the reader was so good. Nice one man.

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    This needs serious revision. Which isn't a bad thing.

    It tends to have it's low points. Especially the beginning. It's too... simplistic that it makes me want to spoon out my eyeballs and throw them at bats.

    But this piece does have it's high points though too.

    Just remember, simplicity has it's place in art. And I value it a lot. But when you make something with such simplicity that a fellow like me ends up cringing, you definitly aint got a winner.

    LW

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