PS: Red Hooks Vs. Untold

[Mystery~Murdera]

regular rules
verses due Fri 12mid EST
Checkin by Wednesday
must vote on 3 links

now check in...

[untold]

check.

[untold]

this hoe blows
cause he no showd
no i'm a go go
u'll spin like a yo yo

pz.

[Lo0se CaNNoN]

ayo untold, u can spit a real verse, M~M fuck'd up the name of the room, so u can get ur noshow verse outta here, its still due tomorrow, im checkin in now

12 ?

[Mystery~Murdera]

it's preseason - do as you wish guys.

[Lo0se CaNNoN]

untolds a bitch, i'll call him ass and he'll gladly shout it
he da only ^^, to say he untold of, then rotfl about it
ima hall a fame quater back, aim atcha grill, getcha big lips
hut 1, hut 2...damn thats where u and ur family live bitch
this slut aint no real emcee, jus somethin to shoot at
simon says WIN.....the fuck are u gon' do that
dropp'd a no show verse, didnt think i was jus postin' late
you da godly type, so watchem walk on water...
.....attached to my hook as i use him for bait
im lookin for bigga fish, and this bitch is jus PUSHIN' it
...like it was his verse, right off a fuckin' CLIFF

fuck it 10'...im done

[untold]

this cunt's a duck, ya last battle left ya stuck like chuck
but we didn't have to use Spekz.. to see how much u suck
ya got ugly conceptz, 'n ya looks is ridiculous nonsense
ur an advisory for the public.. cause ur face is fill w/ explicit content
i had to murda the other guy, cause peeps wasn't feelin 'em
since he got blood on my equipment.. i had to use Red Hooks to reel you in
advis ain't noticed 'n no one sees this brother
you couldn't stand out in crowded room.. much less on a cd cover
the streetz aint feelin ya! they don't show ya love, dude
but the streetz is watchin.. only to know the best time to mug you

[untold]

upz.

vote peoplez!

[Sobe]

ima hall a fame quater back, aim atcha grill, getcha big lips
hut 1, hut 2...damn thats where u and ur family live bitch

vs.

this cunt's a duck, ya last battle left ya stuck like chuck
but we didn't have to use Spekz.. to see how much u suck
ya got ugly conceptz, 'n ya looks is ridiculous nonsense
ur an advisory for the public.. cause ur face is fill w/ explicit content
the streetz aint feelin ya! they don't show ya love, dude
but the streetz is watchin.. only to know the best time to mug you

untold got this easy.. advisory's got some concepts he's just gotta make them hit hard.. plus his closer was played.. untold came solid

v/ untold

[Crown]

untolds a bitch, i'll call him ass and he'll gladly shout it
he da only ^^, to say he untold of, then rotfl about it
Naw
ima hall a fame quater back, aim atcha grill, getcha big lips
hut 1, hut 2...damn thats where u and ur family live bitch
Almost...needed a lil wording..
this slut aint no real emcee, jus somethin to shoot at
simon says WIN.....the fuck are u gon' do that
Nahh
dropp'd a no show verse, didnt think i was jus postin' late
you da godly type, so watchem walk on water...
.....attached to my hook as i use him for bait
Wording let you down here
im lookin for bigga fish, and this bitch is jus PUSHIN' it
...like it was his verse, right off a fuckin' CLIFF
Naw, come on man..

vs

this cunt's a duck, ya last battle left ya stuck like chuck
but we didn't have to use Spekz.. to see how much u suck
Ehh you left no room for wit here
ya got ugly conceptz, 'n ya looks is ridiculous nonsense
ur an advisory for the public.. cause ur face is fill w/ explicit content
Lol good
i had to murda the other guy, cause peeps wasn't feelin 'em
since he got blood on my equipment.. i had to use Red Hooks to reel you in
Naww played sonz
advis ain't noticed 'n no one sees this brother
you couldn't stand out in crowded room.. much less on a cd cover
Ehh nahh
the streetz aint feelin ya! they don't show ya love, dude
but the streetz is watchin.. only to know the best time to mug you
OKay I guess


Alright I have Untold gettin this `cuz it seems to me that Advisory rushed his verse and his concepts let him down...and whe needs work with wording like whoa. Untold just keyed somethin up real quick, and dropped it, but his best is better than Advisory's.

v. Untold

[Aeral]

untolds a bitch, i'll call him ass and he'll gladly shout it
he da only ^^, to say he untold of, then rotfl about it
ehh, decent at best
ima hall a fame quater back, aim atcha grill, getcha big lips
hut 1, hut 2...damn thats where u and ur family live bitch
nah man.. you shoulda said like the only hut you see is the one you live in or someshit
this slut aint no real emcee, jus somethin to shoot at
simon says WIN.....the fuck are u gon' do that
ehhhh
dropp'd a no show verse, didnt think i was jus postin' late
you da godly type, so watchem walk on water...
.....attached to my hook as i use him for bait
if he was bait he wouldn't be "walking" on water.. more like sinking
im lookin for bigga fish, and this bitch is jus PUSHIN' it
...like it was his verse, right off a fuckin' CLIFF
these are played

your opeener was the strongest.


Vs.


this cunt's a duck, ya last battle left ya stuck like chuck
but we didn't have to use Spekz.. to see how much u suck
ehh
ya got ugly conceptz, 'n ya looks is ridiculous nonsense
ur an advisory for the public.. cause ur face is fill w/ explicit content
lmao, good nameplay
i had to murda the other guy, cause peeps wasn't feelin 'em
since he got blood on my equipment.. i had to use Red Hooks to reel you in
decent nameplay
advis ain't noticed 'n no one sees this brother
you couldn't stand out in crowded room.. much less on a cd cover
ehh, not hitting hard
the streetz aint feelin ya! they don't show ya love, dude
but the streetz is watchin.. only to know the best time to mug you
decent cliche use.

v- untold, more polished verse.. more punches i felt hit harder.

[B.I.Detained.]

Red Hooks:

"i'm lookin for bigga fish, and this bitch is jus PUSHIN' it
...like it was his verse, right off a fuckin' CLIFF"

Didn't really wanna quote this, but its the best part of your verse I
could find. Though you did have little parts of decent flow, you just
didn't pack any harsh punches. Thats what threw me off your verse.


Untold:

"i had to murda the other guy, cause peeps wasn't feelin 'em
since he got blood on my equipment.. i had to use Red Hooks to reel you in"

Feels like you rushed your verse, mate. Not all bad, liked the concept
on the one I quoted but everything else was just pretty flat. Nothing
really stood out harshly. Below average verse..

Overall:

Bit rubbish altogether, but Untold just did what he had to do,
and that wasn't a lot. RH will get better though, you just need
to brush up on decent punches.

Vote: Untold.

Edit, lol: Advisory pm'd me to tell me he wasn't Red Hooks.. This doesn't change my vote, lol.. just kidding.

[Oxymoron]

untolds a bitch, i'll call him ass and he'll gladly shout it
he da only ^^, to say he untold of, then rotfl about it
this was aight
ima hall a fame quater back, aim atcha grill, getcha big lips
hut 1, hut 2...damn thats where u and ur family live bitch
naw
this slut aint no real emcee, jus somethin to shoot at
simon says WIN.....the fuck are u gon' do that
ok
dropp'd a no show verse, didnt think i was jus postin' late
you da godly type, so watchem walk on water...
.....attached to my hook as i use him for bait
naw worded wrong
im lookin for bigga fish, and this bitch is jus PUSHIN' it
...like it was his verse, right off a fuckin' CLIFF
played

not a very good verse you can do better.


Vs.


this cunt's a duck, ya last battle left ya stuck like chuck
but we didn't have to use Spekz.. to see how much u suck
meh this would work better in FL
ya got ugly conceptz, 'n ya looks is ridiculous nonsense
ur an advisory for the public.. cause ur face is fill w/ explicit content
lol nice
i had to murda the other guy, cause peeps wasn't feelin 'em
since he got blood on my equipment.. i had to use Red Hooks to reel you in
lol cool
advis ain't noticed 'n no one sees this brother
you couldn't stand out in crowded room.. much less on a cd cover
meh
the streetz aint feelin ya! they don't show ya love, dude
but the streetz is watchin.. only to know the best time to mug you
good

v.untold


for coming with a stronger verse

[Spanche]

advisory came with blah wording kinda explained stuff to much had some cool concepts but it just came of not that good with the wording..untold came with some good shit the spekz line was ok the explicit content concept was used on him a few times already but it was coo and jus an overall ok- to solid verse

vote= untold

[Marvelous_]

i seen untold come better. prolly didnt try i guess. anyway, advisorys verse was pretty weak and he had a couple of played concepts. he came kind of simple too. i guess his best punch was the simon says win one, but i didnt really like that either. and isnt that hut shit played? i think i saw something like that before. untold just came less played and more consistent, so he wins.

v/ untold