The Morning After

[.Mack.]

I awake Next to My cousin, with hopes of fragments and fiction
despite seing the night befoe with crystal clarity and perfect diction
So i Slap donw this hennessy and jerk back to reality
to only relive the horrific night of manly immoralities
As i pound this Vulumptuos woman in bed with me
With a glass of orange juice as the alchohol fuels me steadily
As i vaguely remember this woman with hopes of this staying low
While look @ her beatiful face and eyes to slay me slow
With gentle carreses and hidden messages like a baby
As I turn up this cup of hennessy and realise i love this lady
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As i Foresee the future of having to face her in the morning
With Thoughts of past actions and eternal mourning
With No ideas of the embarrasment i'l soon be facin
But living without a care due to excessive intoxication
As i jerk out this nightmare i awake to my bed feelin like a godly messenger
I Awake Next to this woman, my family calls cousin jessica

[.Mack.]

Will post links here.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...81#post4864881
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...95#post4864895

[Clee]

What the hell? You had sex with your cousin?....Ok...original...never seen an incest om before...vocab was alright, rhymes were alright, it was a little too short, I didnt like it much, it didnt have anything that really stood out to me as good, the only reason I kept reading though is because I thought it was going to turn into something good, but I guess not, elevate.

[Rancor]

Hmm...this wasn't reality was it or was it....hmmm...okay the only time i've seen an incest topic being done before was by scythe...this had flow to it and also a very goo 1st person perspective. I liked the way you tied reality with non reality and made this a good short read. However, i would like to add that in comparison to other drops this is yet average and i reckon if you brush up you writing techniques you can and would become a better writer here. Stay up.