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    For The One I LOVE

    To Lee C

    From the first day I saw you .. I know you where the one for me.
    Everytime I walked through the hall it was clear for me to see
    That you were that special women..the one who had my heart
    But how can that one special love, tear your heart apart?
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    From that day you started callin my name, I know it was true.
    That some day , you’d be that special one id come home too.
    At first I was to shy, hell I didn’t think you’d feel the same.
    But overtime I overcame & eventually found out your name.
    Lee-C?what a beautiful name for someone so beautiful at heart.
    The first day we talked,I was stunned I didn’t know where to start
    Id thought someone so beautiful wouldn’t even give me a chance.
    But I guess I was wrong, cuz for me and u it was love at first glance.
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    We started to talk more and everywhere I went you were there to follow
    But knowing oneday that love wouldn’t be there was to hard to swallow
    So I cherished you and I would give you the world on a silver platter.
    We had a lot of doubter’s but over time,…….. we made it no matter
    I showed you that you meant the world to me & Id never lose my love.
    But showing other’s that I loved you the way I did I felt short of .
    Cuz to me it was like you were a blessin in desky's an angel sent from above
    But Cuz of my action and my people my time with you feel short.
    And because of this you left me & went to Miami. I had no support
    The one person I cared so much about was gone how could I let it go?
    I couldn’t… so I called that 954 number & hoped for that lovely hello.
    I found you! And I told you I never lost my love , and neither did you.
    I kept in contact hoping for that one day……. I would see you too!!
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    A Year later *phone rings*
    6a6y? is that really you? How are you at a 919 number?! Is this true?
    Or am I dreaming ,you just replied ‘id told you id come bac to see you’
    I Just continued to smile knowin that , that special someone was bac.
    And letting you go now? I don’t see that happenin and that’s a fact.
    I tried to C you every Chance I got, but yet again something went wrong.
    This time it was your parents ,……. saying we didn’t belong.
    I told you not to listen to them cuz I showed you how much you mean to me.
    but as time progressed …they slowly stopped you from seein me.
    How can loving someone so much hurt so much at the same time its hard to ignore.
    That there telling me there gon send you back!!!! So I cant see you no more?!!
    After that heart broken year I felt of trackin you down ..i finally have you bac.
    And now you might be gone again? Wat kinda shyt is that?
    If you leave me just know this.. I loved you with all my heart and you will be missed
    Now im sorry but I lost my heart …..

    Cops Report
    *kid was found 3 days later with a slit wrist*


    Ill leave links in the morning dont close this! first peice i wrote ina bout 3 months

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    i liked this piece, great story telling
    u gonna be a good one if u keep this up
    u have da story telling tools, but i wanna see u, use them in different ways too
    this piece was great, it was flawless, da flow was incrediable
    great sense of imagery, it had a good story good topic,
    9/10
    ima keep ma eye out for u homie

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    nice peiece i actually liked this seeing its the first ive read here
    u had a few flaws from what i can see
    your flow was off in some parts but for most it stayed on point
    u lacked in multies i feel u couldve had alot more in every bar...
    the topic was kinda played but not done to much on this site..
    so i enjoyed reading this...ur strutre made it easy for me to read
    and u didnt try to make it look good by using huge words in every line
    dope drop please hit up mine with honest feed

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