GOD vs. the Devil

[The Vortex]

GOD vs. the Devil

God:
I made you & gave you breath; holding power over life & death;
Still you deceived w/ deft so in-depth the debt now rests on your neck,
Even the insects possess more respects than you’ve expressed forth,
I stay North, Heaven is mirth, & Earth rebukes Hell for all its worth,
Turf wars past the stars, scars slash deeper than the river Parana,
I’ll place you hind jail bars, its no task to sedate your stamina.
*
Satan:
So what if I deceived? & Eve believed my bullshit bout an apple tree,
You cant grapple me, I defy gravity, & aint nothing wrong w/ a little bit a tragedy,
So I’m sorry your majesty if this travesty is actually making peeps lose sleep;
See I’m deep as Hades, fire frazzled my tear ducts, so I’m unable to weep,
In-Fact you should peep some of the crazy shit I inspired last week,
Some say my ass’ weak, but they don’t speak much about my class feats;
I mean who asked for meat?... Most humans are potentially cannibals,
Ya’ll swinging on my genitals; I’m King of the gentiles, Satanically magical.
*
God:
The suns the moons & the clouds all bow now in my presence,
I gave lessons to peasants – who reformed as prophets of relevance,
Nature’s beauty beams well-dressed dreams ideal for the intelligent,
Elements form life, alien life form… the unseen president,
Smiting fiends of Resident Evil, sunlight gleams off my steeple,
None compare equal; there’s a strong bond between me - & fair people,
So, I’m like Hell to Beelzebub & those weak demons acting tough
I make men fusing blood & mud, still for some love is not enough.
*
Satan:
Ok, so maybe you could say I’m just a little bit heartless;
But, what can you expect when I’ve been labelled “the Prince of Darkness?
& regardless of what I do, I’ll never shed this fucking title;
Constantly accursed by critics cautiously reading the Bible,
…Exploiting recitals,
I’m encircled by - seven Babylon whores seizing silver idols,
Lucifer the Light Bearer burning candles that flicker & sizzle
It’s not difficult;
Stop blaming me for the mess you made, this shit’s political.
*
God’s Soldier:
Don’t trust shit, that snitch lying, got me praying till my head sweats;
Coz you never know what heck that horn-headed bitch’ll do next,
So, I’m strictly rooting for the Dude who’s dropping in red text,
Raising ragamuffins as best; it aint nothing to get blessed,
Devils always dramatize, making my karma rise… heated…
Conceited bastard competing callously, he despises the completed;
There’ll be bliss in my eyes once this leprechaun lies defeated.
*
Satan’s Soldier:
In frozen rains I prayed in vain… until sore from this knee sickness;
Angels ignored me, demons saw me, so fuck-it I rock three sixes,
It’s foul, I won’t heed nothing but crime, supply wars & backlash;
I don’t need Heaven… since I’m flying high on whores & cash sacks,
You’re losing land as our legions steadily expand by the thousand,
Prepare for the dousing toxin of sic snakes sneaking thru your housing.
*
God:
I Am the Alpha & Omega.
*
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[The Vortex]

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=302883
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=302722

[Xanx]

This wasn’t bad. You started out slow and it picked up around the middle and fell off a bit then picked it back up. It’s a good thing you stayed on topic throughout the whole thing. The only thing I didn’t like was that one of “God’s soldiers” cursing? That’s a bit ironic. But there were some lines that really caught my attention.

Smiting fiends of Resident Evil, sunlight gleams off my steeple,
None compare equal; there’s a strong bond between me - & fair people,

Ok, so maybe you could say I’m just a little bit heartless;
But, what can you expect when I’ve been labelled “the Prince of Darkness?
& regardless of what I do, I’ll never shed this fucking title;
Constantly accursed by critics cautiously reading the Bible,

I like how the first bar was a very well set up bar for your second. You hit hard with your second bar I this stanza.

In frozen rains I prayed in vain… until sore from this knee sickness;
Angels ignored me, demons saw me, so fuck-it I rock three sixes,

Nice! Imagery in this line was just on point.

Overall I really liked the multi usage in this piece. Though at some parts it threw it off a bit… you still made up for it in the concepts you presented. Keep writing.

[Def.Endin.U.]

Dope, everything about it. I couldn't stop reading the shit. I was hooked from begginniing to end, you had me feeling like I was actually watching the shit happen, although you could slow down on all the multis and lighten up on the vocab, it's no good to be repetitive, and read words you can't understand ya know?
Your imagery was on point I just can't speak enough about it. you had depth, and substance, you knew exactly how to freak it so it seemed sort of realistic, I cant get enough! This is the first piece I've seen in a long time, desereving of an HOF nomination.

but all in all dope ass drop, keep doin your thing, because I'd love to read more.

[Spoken]

Very good, i liked this back and forth conversation type thing, the word play in each parts of the verses being played were wonderful, the imagery was nice and gave alot of sence wat was going on, good job on the description you gave of wat was happen, i can tell u put alot of work in to this, flow was pretty good but i dont think u really focussed on that seeing how long each line was, but yo good job, hit up some of my links in my sigs, pz

[P. Mortuus]

This was pretty good, though some parts god awkard spoken. Wording in most parts was good and assisted n the flow.THe descriptive parts were interseting and allowed a picture to be painted, which is always good as it grasps the readers attention and make them read the whole piece. Overall, this was good and you managed to keep the structure though it was a lengthy piece...Stay up.

[Illus']

Good concept but it seems you forced
wording sacrificing truth or what actually
God or Satan would say or have said , for a
rhyme scheme.

Which is not good I mean yeah the rhyme scheme
was there but if you don't have your characters down
packed it doesn't make it a good read like it should.



I will give a more indepth feeback later , like the concept
though. I did a quick read.

Ok ama go into depth,

certain characters in your scheme like "God's Soilder"
cursed now when you go into depth with your character
they have to actually potray their roles perfectly which
will make the imagery extremely good.

Yes we do know how Gods speaks by reading the Bible.
Get an idea from that, just a lot of word schemes that did
not work. I will quote some

Satan:
Ok, so maybe you could say I’m just a little bit heartless;
But, what can you expect when I’ve been labelled “the Prince of Darkness?

The part I’ve bolded Satan is sin he brings death no matter
What the price is , he’s not a bit heartless because he has no
Heart period.

God’s Soldier:
Don’t trust shit, that snitch lying, got me praying till my head sweats;
Coz you never know what heck that horn-headed bitch’ll do next,

Lol he’s God’s soldier cursing is a no no lol.

Still you deceived w/ deft so in-depth the debt now rests on your neck,
Even the insects possess more respects than you’ve expressed forth,
I stay North, Heaven is mirth, & Earth rebukes Hell for all its worth,

Wasn’t feeling this because it was off , I would have used
A different style. Just doesn’t fit with me. Doesn’t sound right,
“Earth rebukes hell for all it’s worth” doesn’t seem right at all.



Anyways yeah other then that you have potential for sure though.
Rhyme scheme in some parts is really good, the two characters disputing
I should say
Concept is not that original however good. Cool job overall

Stay writing.

[The Vortex]

yeah thanx 4 checking it out. thing is if it wasnt for multies and rhyme scheme inspiring me then i wouldnt bother to write mos the time. coz thats the only way it flows when i spit it loud

and illus. i dont quite understand what you mean by: what the devil would of said. it was all imaginings from my point of view. who knows what God or the devil would really say?. if they exist????

ha....up

[Monstarr.]

this is severley dope. i think it woyld be tight as an actual song. u should make one.

the multies where sick, and the metaphores too. good shit. amazing

[Johnny 6-feet]

Great concept man! You had me reading from start to finish, the back and forth was great and the argument between the charecters seemed 'in charecter' and occasionally hilarious. Good imagery, strong vocab and good multi's to boot.

Consider this nominated. Keep posting man.

[NawkOut]

this was good stuff, usually dont read OM's very dope, haha i like the devils part epescially, wording was pretty good, good bible refernces such as names, over all very dope peice

[The Vortex]

yeah Bless

good looks out monstarr

yeah glad you liked this joint johnny. yeah i put something into it for real



yeah word NawkOut !

pz


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[The Vortex]

Ok ama go into depth,

certain characters in your scheme like "God's Soilder"
cursed now when you go into depth with your character
they have to actually potray their roles perfectly which
will make the imagery extremely good.

Yes we do know how Gods speaks by reading the Bible.
Get an idea from that, just a lot of word schemes that did
not work. I will quote some



The part I’ve bolded Satan is sin he brings death no matter
What the price is , he’s not a bit heartless because he has no
Heart period.



Lol he’s God’s soldier cursing is a no no lol.



Wasn’t feeling this because it was off , I would have used
A different style. Just doesn’t fit with me. Doesn’t sound right,
“Earth rebukes hell for all it’s worth” doesn’t seem right at all.



Anyways yeah other then that you have potential for sure though.
Rhyme scheme in some parts is really good, the two characters disputing
I should say
Concept is not that original however good. Cool job overall

Stay writing.

yeah i see some of what you saying blood.b.as for god soldiers piece was the fastest few lines wrote. just sort of free flowed most lines in fact for the whole somg. putting some extra work into the grafting of certain bars to make sure the metta thought made sense.......


yeah i know what you saying bout that rebukes hell part. i did feel what you feel. but still felty it made sense,. n perhaps couldnt be bothered to chase an answer...


and i dissagree on you saying we know how God speaks via the Bible.ive read it in and out. and its all the words of MAN.scribes poets srtists and the likes. so ha to that...........


as for God soldier swearing. he only swore lightly.lol. no F words.or C words.imao. the bible has some pretty strong language in it you know........


cool for giving for your point of view blood.

pz1

[The Vortex]

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[P. Mortuus]

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