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Thread: So Long IJL....For Now

  1. July 27th, 2006, 12:15 AM #1
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    So Long IJL....For Now

    So Long....For Now

    Compressing suspense leads only to me lessening hints
    Directions has shift, on my own, time for pressuring vents
    Espressions immense, deflection intense, reflection is spent
    But no exception, i'll get back my exceptional gifts

    (..OK..)

    Questions are left with me..if..i could respectably diff.
    Due date 9/23 what you expect for me.....shit..
    Unexpectively, i'll admitt my activity slipped
    Productivity hit, my flow had suspended in drips (sigh)

    (..well..)

    See in the end we was destined to leave eachother
    Reasons fluttered, we progressed like peanuts to peanut butter

    (..so..)

    Honestly i hope you all do well......
    ...............Most hated, my favorite crew...I'll miss IJL.


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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=302754

    Just wanted some feed for this....
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  2. July 27th, 2006, 05:40 AM #2
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    Man, that was pretty sentimental right there. I think that whole topic would be the same as living friends or family, but man this was nice, u use some good multi's, the descriptions of everything was good, u put alot of detail in such a short verse which is pretty dope i think, but man i think your improving, just keep this up and writing stuff like this and youll get where u need to go. and also this was nice, short, and simple. good job
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  3. July 27th, 2006, 10:59 PM #3
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    Aww that was emotional. Flow was good throughout, imagery was there, like I said emotion was definitely there, and you used a variety of vocab throughout. Complexity wasn't what it could be, but that's okay. I wish it hadn't been so short because obviously this topic inspired a lot of feelings, and if you extended it, it would be even better. Overall a decent piece
  4. July 27th, 2006, 11:05 PM #4
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    Thats cool man, I really liked this.
  5. July 28th, 2006, 12:32 AM #5
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    Thanx for feed....plaining on going back to IJL sooner then i thought lmao
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon
  6. July 30th, 2006, 04:04 PM #6
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    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon
  7. July 30th, 2006, 05:41 PM #7
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    WoW, this was truly deep, without using a shitload of words to describe your feelings.
    Nice job, I enjoyed reading it, I can honestly say I wouldn't improve anything on this ballad here. Dope drop.

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  8. August 1st, 2006, 12:45 AM #8
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    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon
  9. September 10th, 2006, 03:48 PM #9
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    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon
  10. September 16th, 2006, 06:46 PM #10
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    The wording was amazing. The flow was nice and kept steady through a large portion of the peice. The Creativity was very nicely done. The Imagenary was damn near perfect. The reason for this peice was dope. The peice itself is a great way to leave a crew. Keep writing.

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  11. September 17th, 2006, 06:59 AM #11
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