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    "Pioneer, the Stereo Type"

    Ground connection to central
    Fore; head the database.
    Information races itself
    To paint a blank cortex
    With rhythm enigmatica;
    Cerebellum babble on: idiot.
    Choking on commercial everyday
    While coughing blood diamonds;
    Syringe tipped fingers
    Continue to tickle individuality.

    Sipping bittersweet polyphonic;
    Catching kisses on broken tracks
    Before this train of thought
    Derails along superficial parallels...
    Into the comfort of toxin
    Tipped record needles we go.

    Grin little idiot, think we not.
    Sick-brained bastard mothered
    By the subtle of cancer;
    A prescription a day keeps
    The heart beat away, swallow hard.

    His words thumping through
    Hollow canals as the rapids
    Step across 5th category.
    The river Muse continues
    To take on waves as sound
    Floods a watered-down stage.

    I built this home from a
    Deck of cards with charred edges
    And double stacked my heart
    In the center of the pile;
    Pressed my ear to another's
    Heart beat as my house
    Tumbled into stacks of
    Misshapen paper cuts.

    Backstroking the ashes
    Of cohesiveness, the pseudo
    Intellect paints a pretty face
    For the industrial prostitute.
    I'll smile for the camera until
    My tears blur the line between
    We and self.

    Hammer away, chisel and
    Makeshift stigmata.
    Make this misshapen ball
    Of clay the bust that gets
    A dollar bill to the G-string.

    Hammer! Hammer! Hammer!

    Yes! Drive that stake through
    My broken skull and continue
    To fuck me over again and again!
    When you're done, lick the plate
    Clean with a serpentine pass;
    Drag that jagged tongue across
    My empty head until all that's
    Left is a delighted hiss!

    Mmmm, sweet uncontrol.
    Balancing across the tight rope
    Crooked smile...
    A stroke of art is the only act,
    As two dilated pupils inhale
    Static while the AV cables
    Plug into the hardheaded.

    Take my picture little black box.
    I'll smile for the birdie while
    The generate watches a
    Massacre of contemporary art -
    After the dollar bill hills
    Are extinguished and common
    Sense is no longer excepted
    In the arcade personality.

    Voodoo Child bleeds from
    Deaf ears of generations swallowed
    By the flames of latter-day
    Stars and Strata casters.
    We are the children, voodoo
    Speaker box: prep my plastic soul
    For proper instillation.

    I'll sleep in this bed of snakes
    With every fang playing
    Another swollen note,
    And this stereotype will break
    The charts as all the dolls
    Master their plaster manifestos.

    We'll revert to fetal positions
    From the wombs of black speakers-
    Heads bobbing back and forth
    Breathing on the drop of cracked needles.
    Last edited by Atti; October 17th, 2006 at 03:37 PM

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    Holy shit, man have i been missing out on your work. This piece was laced with virulous wordplay, you strung together your images incredibly, and the pace of the piece really sat well with me, it was somewhat lengthy but i found myself unable to turn away once you captured my interest. I have a lot to say about this piece but i really would rather let it marinate and come back to read it again later, so all i want to say now is that i really enjoyed it, keep up the good work man, 1luv.
    Laying face down in the mainstream.
    Po.Ethics.

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    Thanks man.
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.

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    Wow.... wordplay much, this whole piece was filled with wordplay. i really could learn alot about wordplay from you and the way you do it just seems so naturally and smoth in the transitions and seemingly go on forever. very well done. your imagery was amazing also.


    T'would be great if you could leave some feed on one of the links in the sig

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    well i think you are a crazy motherfucker! lol but seriously.

    This drop was the kind of thing you start out reading slow, going back over some lines to understand whats going on, and end up reading faster than you can scroll. the way you twist and turn and play with words till they bend to your will is addictive to read. i honestly have no idea what i'm supposed to draw from the drop, but the wordplay was genius and a few parts honestly sent chills down my spine. i think

    Syringe tipped fingers
    Continue to tickle individuality.

    was a great way to start it out because that was probly my favorite line and is what spurred me to read on. If you'd PM me or something and lemme know what the theme of this drop was i'd appreciate it because it felt like a bunch of random stanzas of the crazyest shit you could think of. I also dont see the relation of the title to the peice. this was extreemly interesting to read tho. I admire your talent to paint such sadistic pictures, that are rendered through beautiful utilization of the english language. greatness.

    in addition to the PM i'd greatly appreciate if you returned feed on my latest peice.
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    Last edited by Simple Minded; July 23rd, 2006 at 03:16 AM

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    The piece is about falling into stereotypical rolls in society based on the commercialism of todays music. "Pioneer, the Stereo Type" is just a subtle play on words that sarcasticly pokes at the concept. All of the needle/syringe refferences were dark comparrisons to a record needle to which actually plays the music.
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.

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    Bump...
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.

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    Well.. Escobar pointed out a big part of this piece. your wordplay. Some of this being a bit harsh to understand because out of all the poets on the site, you use intricate vocabulary throughout the whole piece, which for some can be hard to understand. Hell I won't lie, some of this had me spun for a loop but I got the message 86% of the time.

    Having said that, I loved how you took used some old sayings/phrases that we've all heard, twist them and make them just that much more meaningful.

    ex:
    A prescription a day keeps
    The heart beat away, swallow hard.

    ^ Yeah.. the apple a day phrase.. blah.

    That was the point in the poem where I was forced to read on to see if you would slip in some other things that all people can relate to and have to translate the meaning that you gave them... if that makes any sense.

    Rather than ramble on and make myself look retarded i'll just say that this piece by far had the most metaphorical message than some of your others. (I haven't read all of yours so, i can't say it is the most metaphorical but... blah again) Really enjoyed this piece atti, it was a tad very long but I couldn't stop reading, so all-in-all it turned out fine.

    Keep writng atti, your shit always seems to give me ideas for my poetry.

    Pz.

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