I Give Up

**B.A.D.** · June 29th, 2006, 05:22 AM

Title: I Give Up
Written By: B.A.D.

I done been a good man in my lifetime, so why's it like you wanna ruin it?
screwing my years over like I'm the one to be doing time
well let me tell you, I ain't never gone to jail
ain't never going, I got shit to prevail, still stories to tell
still glory to reach when I reach the day of my peak
to teach those under me that raps more than a part of speech
rather your heart unleashed into your work, blood leak on the page
till they feel the rage of your words when you speak worldly
It's sad i've already had my chance to be proven worthy
of being the next person on earth considered unearthly
of being hip hop's leader, and never to be forgotten
but history folds over and the day I make it- they'll hurt me
you could search me all you want, I don't got the fame
I'm lost between watch-in the game and the right clock
my lifes stopped in time as my bars break down to lines
is this a sign that the game does not want me?
do I give up the mic and stick to writing bout life
and just forget about a style that I've liked?
...well damn it...
if these gangs want the game they could have it
I'm sick of this life I'm giving when I'm worthy of living lavish

..I GIVE UP..
I've had it, I need some space for myself
forget Mars I need some space for myself
..I'M SICK OF IT..
I gotta get rid of these punk bitches on my back
scarring my life like their pickin my-scabs
..I'VE HAD ENOUGH..
I have- a bone to pick with half of the games nuts
so fuck it- if you want war then STOP PLAYING
..................................................
I need to go and take a vacation
so let me pull a bullet through my brain
I'm going insane!
..I GIVE UP..

I done been a good man in my lifetime, so why's it like you wanna ruin it?
doing this shit again when we've already gone through with it
already ended the relationship we had
already broke apart, we already spoke from the heart
...and from the start...
it seemed to be that we were fighting nightly
I'd recite lines of my poems for you and you had no heart
you pushed me around and yet, I must admit I was whipped
yet got a grip and now our relationships in the ground
but since you've talked with every girl they keep callin me evil
talking about how I care-less 'bout the feelings of people
...its evil...
its like you keep fucking my years over
nowhere near sober; I'm drinking just to keep my composure
and now I blame you for this deep depression I'm getting
my life is bout to end cause you sent me the wrong direction
you know how this song is ending, I'm about to be giving up
sitting tough and condescending cause I know that living sucks

..I GIVE UP..
I've had it, I need some space for myself
forget Mars I need some space for myself
..I'M SICK OF IT..
I gotta get rid of these punk bitches on my back
scarring my life like their pickin my-scabs
..I'VE HAD ENOUGH..
I have- a bone to pick with half of the games nuts
so fuck it- if you want war then STOP PLAYING
..................................................
I need to go and take a vacation
so let me pull a bullet through my brain
I'm going insane!
..I GIVE UP..

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**Blazin' Young** · June 29th, 2006, 05:31 AM

nice straight peice man. it had a good variety in it, personals, multies the lot. I enjoyed itfor some reason thought, im not sure why, the topic was a bit different, it hink thats why i liked it. now i dont like giving criticism, but it must be said, some of your lines i didnt understand that well. I didnt feel that much emotion from this peice, im not sure if emotion was your intention, but the way you put your words together didnt leave me with that much connected to this peice emotionally, but then again i am a cold person lol

. But never-the-less, this peice was good. When i was reading it I could imaging a Kanye West sorta Tupac - Unconditional Love beat in my mind lol, i dunno why.

But good peice man I'd rate it 8/10. Keep working man, and you'll be dropping hot fire before you know it, because i feel you have a lot to say, but you may not know how to present it.

But thats why we're all here man, to elevate, and as time goes by, you will even amaze yourself homie. Kudos to you

Peace and Cheers.

if you want to leave some feed on my open mics, i would really appreciate it.

**Endeva.** · June 29th, 2006, 08:24 AM

thought this was a good read, nicestory telliny, progressing well through it...

my favourite line was...

nowhere near sober; I'm drinking just to keep my composure

i found your rhyming a bit odd in places, like when reading through it, but i got it pretty quick, plus i like it when its switched around, it brings more diversity

pz

**Atti** · June 29th, 2006, 10:28 AM

This was extremely basic and underdeveloped, and while typically that will lead me to just completely bash a piece... You have that kind of 'wide-eyed inocense' to your words. Alot of times when new writers come around, their actual skills aren't really all there, but the emotion just bleeds off the page because the content is written so honestly from the heart; I really got that vibe from this piece. So, while at many times the poor grammar and lackluster topic/approach left me wanted to stop reading, their was just such a strong feeling of heart to this that I kept reading on. So, next time, work on grammar, spelling, adding in more imagery and so forth... But be sure to not lose that emotion.