"The Girl Next Door"

[Baron Mynd]

The Girl Next Door
- By Baron Mynd

A Covenet Such As This Utter Bliss...

Undressing her with my eyes-
I succumb to this cuties, wonderous beauty ..
.. Sweet nectar runs from her coochie, as I plunder profusely.
Under her loosely worn dress, rest her newly formed breasts ..
.. Scuplting her curves as I'm bludgeoned with urges of sudden perversion.
The attractively meek, passionate freaks, shattered physique...
...lies collapsed in a heap -
Aghast with relief after being thrashed on the sheets!
With her rapture released,
She falls back to her knees, rasps her tongue...
...and wraps her gums, around my shaft's circumfrence 'til at last I cum!
Her oval-shaped eyes, gape wide -
Peering up to me as I force an evil smile.
See, a covenet such as this is utter bliss...

...to a Paedophile.

Peace.

[Baron Mynd]

Replied to no end of pieces. Nique's last one. The Verbalists last one. David Lama's last one. Soulstice's last one. I'll get the links when Im next online ..

Peace!

[Julius Caesar]

Well damn, imaginary at its finest. Lol. Very short piece, but with decent imaginary and emotion all wrapped into one big B.K. whooper. Loving how you portrait and detailed it with words. This wasn't very complex at all, straigh to the point. Your flow was very well read. The vocab you put in your piece added more 'deph' in your verse. Man, I like this Cam, I haven't read any of your pieces and this is my first time reading yours.

Stop sleeping on this people.

-JC

[Baron Mynd]

I actually refute your claim that `This wasn't very complex at all` because if you analyse the technical components to the verse, the rhyme scheme etc, you'll see its infact VERY complex - I just make it seem effortless! But yeah, thanks for the props. Hit the 'Search' button at the top of the page, search for my name in this forum, Ive got plenty other topical drops if you're interested in reading some of 'em.

Good looks on the response,

Peace!

[LedgenZ]

This piece was pretty sick to me...and not in a lyrical way. It was just sick.
A paedophile - thats what you want to be. I'm starting to notice...a ...hmmmm...well...rather disturbing trend with you. Most of your pieces or at least the ones i've peeped from you have to do with either little girls being rape or women being killed...are these the warning signs? Are you trying to reach out for help? If so I can give you a number to one kick-ass hotline...or maybe you just need your mommy...lol who knows....

Anyways as for the topic, like I said - sick, but I can't front, because like most of your pieces it was well donel. Flawless flow, perfect placement, and excellent imagery, maybe even a little to detailed. what can i say...your ill kid - probably a little crazy, but still ill.

[Baron Mynd]

Haha, thanks.

Ive been reading up on a lot of those true-stories things there are in magazines and whatever, and using the characters in them to base MY characters on. My last piece was on the Da Vinci Code, so hey- not all my pieces are sick and twisted! Lol. Thanks for the peepage ..

[Endeva.]

quite an unusual piece, but yea liking it, short and to the point, and yea i thought the complexity was there, i liked the style, im sick of people dropping perfect syllable count lines, theres no need for it, flow aint all about that, once again you droppped a tight verse, nice one

[Legacy01]

[QUOTE=Camarac]I actually refute your claim that `This wasn't very complex at all` because if you analyse the technical components to the verse, the rhyme scheme etc, you'll see its infact VERY complex - I just make it seem effortless! QUOTE]

^ Word.
you got hella imagery, hella nice vocab, dope ender and nice flow as well as flawless structure all rolled into a small amount of lines. You can't get any better. It's a skill to do that, and many writers don't take the time n effort to perfect they work. You've done amazingly well on it. Props u deserve man
~1~ peace

[Morphy]

Awesome flow and topic to write about, although short, it tells a good story and made me smile.

She falls back to her knees, rasps her tongue...
...and wraps her gums, around my shaft's circumfrence 'til at last I cum!

Favorite part right there it just rolls off the tongue

[D. Josey]

Sick dude. Made me laugh.

I was thinking of some seven year old kid that peeped in on a woman, and was a pedophile for the rest of his life. LOL.

Vocabulary seemed nice.

It seemed like a piece that just came to you when you were bored, like a knockaround kinda thing.

[Facts Machine]

Rhymescheme and imagery was insanely dope. The descriptions were great and kept me interested every line. It was a short piece but every line was necessary. The ending was nice and it connected the bits and pieces of the imagery made before it.

Return the favor please, in my sig "Is It A Sin To Kill An Insect?"

[Dizturbed One]

good peice here man, complex was hot, rhyme sceme was good to, i like the way you used words and the imaginary was just bang... very good drop her my child
8.5/10

diz

[Baron Mynd]

This was like the text version of crack.