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    How I Do

    How I DO
    by: Chris Andre Mcshann (for those who couldn't tell my name is my initials)

    It's the C.A.Mcshann coming straight from the land...
    of the dirty dirty south, we write our raps in the sand
    Waves come to carry it to a foreign land
    see how my rhymes simple, so even reatrds can understand
    cause having a disability, won't stop me from claping like hands
    you n ya man, im making a grand, baked on demand
    Call me a rock group wit me its a simple plan
    I pitch, u snitch, get thrown in a ditch
    rocks couped, cops knocked, shots poped, drops box, crying...his bitch
    I only carry big guns, with big clips...im a barber i don't cut for run
    My advice 2 u...duck n run, if u ain't got my money n you ain't got my bud
    I'm a pull a Big Worm on u and an even Bigger Slug
    If ya lost, stay put, ill be sure to find ya
    Struggling, try to untangle my lines and its sure to bind ya
    Blind ya, the shine is so bright, its like i waxed my verse
    after i washed and repainted the herse
    I know it hurts, don't think too hard just know the flow is nice
    Same for ya bitch, good head do wonders when u write
    I writing this in my car, while im stopped at the light
    car wreck in front of me, its not looking nice
    nigga went a burnt body, for me, not an unusual sight
    but with me waiting on the re-up im off tonight
    I'm trying not to laugh but he looking like baked goodies
    with a couple choclate chips..hey an overbaked cookie
    Now im just having fun, started out hard, like fat joe, with the PUN(s)
    Ending soft cause I'm feeling like I've already won
    I got enough punches to have mike tyson on da floor
    matter facts heres 1 i was gonna use in da flow

    "Some don't like me, call me shiesty
    u i call mike tyson, when we battle..u bite me"

    Could've battled wit dat but i let it go
    Im in the frontlines* so much i need my own tv show


    *had to explain this cause i know most didn't get it
    when i say im in the frontlines its a double meaning for
    the frontlines on rb.com and the frontlines/page of the newspaper

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    bumppppp bump bump bump bumppppppppppppppppppppppp

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    can i get some kind of feedback...
    even if u think it sucks any feedback would be appreciated

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    bumping up 4 feed...headed to bed
    finals in the morning
    1 week till graduation
    class of 06' what u know abou it

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    bump

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    yo, this piece was pretty nice overall, i liked your rhyme scheme alot and the rhymes werent complicated and thats a good thing cuz i hate reading drops that make no sense.. the structure was basic, nothing special, most of this flowed well and the creativity could use a lil work, theres been so many other people on this site who have done this type of drop, just try to be a lil more unique wit your drops and think of a cool topic that most people havent done. But i hafta say that this piece was pretty good, keep it up homie, peace

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    descent peice...structure was all over da place....topic was meh.....flowed descently....rhymes were alright..some good some just alright....overall this had some room for elevation on imagery/vocab/complexity/ and creativity...just work on that you'll be all set//peace~

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    this piece aiight...rhyme scheme was basic...no real structure....no complexity...lines were stretched here and shortend there......your topic is been done..by everbody at one point or another.....you could use some more multis...good punches...you need some complexity and a better structure...other than that you got potential...spend somt time in the cypher forum...practice...keep elevatin and droppin.~1~


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    structure was not really that good.....
    wasnt feelin the topic.....rhymes were good
    flow was descent..and overall this was descent
    work on strucutre and complexity maybe vocab
    peace~

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    not that complex, flow was allright stretched in places though. topic was not very complex ordinary stuff. not many metaphors or wordplay etc. topis played really.. think about more deeper topics to write about.. keep writing.

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