The Fire

[~Vertikle~]

My passion is devotional, got 10,000 pages of rhymes.
All of them could stay blazin' ya mind,
Cause they all know I'm takin' wats mine.
I'm not fakin' a crime, I'm makin' a line.
And if you cross it,
Your juss wastin' ya time.
Complex like algebra part 2, plus I got the heart too.
And I betcha if you try to turn genuis,
I'll out smart you.
Cause I know in my mind, it wouldn't be hard to.
You punk ass,
Chills wit a clique in a retard group.
My punchlines, will have you run backwards, if you run up.
You faggots only good at suckin dick,
Like an average dumb slut.
Your garbage, like all the shit in a dump truck.
You'll need more than a tazor,
Juss to come up and stun us.
I'll have ya shit ya pants and quit ya career.
Cause competition doesn't mean shit this year.

[Kid-Critical]

U=

[~Vertikle~]

why u mad man.....Yea I do equal that.....u know wat u equal......the sperm I nutted

[Big C.]

too simple....too boring....too pointless....
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Elevate man..

Rhymes were alright i guess...multies were descent
flow was terrible...topic wasnt interesting...
too simple overall..no really point to this drop..
just elevate a bit...peace~~

[~Vertikle~]

fuck u suck a dick faggot ass bitch I'll rip you an asshole the size of texas bitch......but can't already do wats been done right

[O Negative]

Wow... Telling me I need to elevate? You have no room to talk. Dont fuckin come at my shit like your a vet, man, when your shit is just as wack, if not worse. I'll fucking rape your mom and burn your pets alive. Fuck you.

[Syk.iLL]

You know how I know your not a vet? Because you don't give constructive criticism. But here I'll give you some. You rhyme is okay and your scheme is cool, but your concept is played. Find a better concept and put a bit more creativity into your piece. Make a piece that is worth remembering because the stuff you rapped about can be found in half the other threads in here. Just elevate and write about fresh topics and maybe one day you can call yourself a veteran of RB.

[-IsIs-]

wack for real son. no beef. ^syk ill'ss feed speaks for me.

[Twixn...]

^yeah no beef...

you just plain suck.

[noncentz]

it wasnt bad fo realz... you have potential but it does seam to lack thought and i can tell by a few shining set up lines its just that you need to work on the lines that kill it you got setup's no punches other then that u off to a good start

[~Vertikle~]

potential I bet I got 500 times more fans than all the people that juss told me to elevate......dumbasses.......ohh I'm on Limewire if ya wanna hear the kid spit......juss search Vertikle as Artist.....

[mindstyle.]

like well gonna believe ya, gimme ur soundclick ill peep songs there...

and..

this OM u made.. its.. well its too plain, you need to elevate on the metas part and saysomething good not just plain thoughts that are in ur head, cuz thats useless, i mean your verse doesnt have a head nor the tail u know what i mean? u gotta make a text with some purpose with some message not just thougts gathered up and ryhmed

peace

[-IsIs-]

potential I bet I got 500 times more fans than all the people that juss told me to elevate......dumbasses.......ohh I'm on Limewire if ya wanna hear the kid spit......juss search Vertikle as Artist.....

no offence. your audio is pretty plain to. all this im so phat shit is wack these days son for real. didnt like the beats. you make em? the verse was wack same as the om. need to elevate and structure them better. the words in the audio were to choppy there was no flow. its hard to explain what i mean by that. but your. to. like. this. in. your. audios. just take the constructive critism givin by half the people here and maybe. youll go ''big''

[~Vertikle~]

Your juss a hater dawg cause someone better than u is out there and it's me set the battle up or shut the fuck up pussy bitch hater

[-IsIs-]

ahahah imnot tryin to freepost. but i dont battle cause of cats like you. ive 5-0'd alot of cats like you son for real. just take the constructive critism and ELEVATE! its not hard. cause right now. your lookin like a retard tryin to talk shit to everyone who downsizes your work. were being honest here. most cats know what there talkin about.