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    Emotions

    Emotions


    There are many different kinds of emotions, different feelings present
    Emotions are strong and hard like cement, Some bad, some pleasant
    Seeing some one depressed, suddenly feeling repent, happiness goes descent
    Emotions are somethings hard to control or can’t be, no need for consent
    Happy, Sad, Mad, Glad,are all emotions caused for different reasons...
    There are different emotions just like there are different seasons......
    Fury, Rage, Anger, and Hate those are emotions mostly considered not great
    Put together different emotions with others is called a contrate......
    And here’s a story about a man facing many problems having to do with emotions...

    A long time ago there was an old man, a farmer old and poor......
    Always sat in his rocking chair right outside his door.......
    Carpet on the floor rolled out to where the chair is located
    Sitting there lonley, nothing to do, no one around, depression was created
    I guess this was the man who everyone said they hated.....
    Even the people who were related to him despised him with passion
    This old man had to do all the work, he soon would die from all the action
    the old man needs his rest and a little help along working on the farm
    Especially when his bones are fragile and he can easily break his arm
    I dont see why people hated this man he had a nice friendly charm...
    he wasn’t no mean person, he was one of those people who bring no harm
    This man had emotional problems and he had no social life.....
    His wife left him long a go so basically he had no local wife.......
    This old man was so depressed he is on medication for a few things
    And maybe new things to come, cuz one day he grabbed a knife...
    Held it up to his throat and he had a change of heart and decided not to
    His depression level dropped and that he magically had a construe...
    Then later on his depressed emotions went away when he met a man
    They became best friends and that day forward his emotions were better than..
    last times and he lived happily with his friend without depression....

    The End


    Nominate if u like it
    Last edited by Plain-Thug; April 21st, 2006 at 03:06 PM

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    It was iight. I liked the beginning. It's very organized and presented well. I think the ending could have been better. It seemed like the story wasn't finished. It was good though. I think if you work a little more you can get better with following through with the story. Keep at it.

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    thanks man.....uppin^^

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    this was good son...i was feelin ya skeem and structure...the first part was great opening n made me want to read it more afterwards..i think ya strong point in this drop was ya vocab...good wurk...id like to see more...nomination can b in order ...
    NCred aka Cyrious

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    thanks homie i really appreciate it, and i'll peep out your peice..

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    will someone leave feed on this, i'll leave feed back...upp^^

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    uppin^^^ if u like it nominate it

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    This was well organized... im more of a clever punchline rapper... but all opinions mean somthing.. i enjoy good story telling and this is what this piece was... keep em coming and ill keep givin feedback... cuz this was a Decent drop

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    thanks. uppin^

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