untold (0-0) Vs. Vlad Tempus (0-0)

[Mystery~Murdera]

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[I Got Pwnd]

Check.

[Untold.]

check.

how many?

[I Got Pwnd]

10 Lines.

[Untold.]

EDIT: he took his sig out'a his siggy spot. but his crews called the vatican.

fuck 10! g/l.

i'm already confident i'll win, 'n my verse is just starting
vlad seems to high strung.. for me to have a pinata party
i know vlad keeps bad hygien, you flakin me, you wish
cause when you scratched your head, i could've sworn a blizzard hit
plus i'm on to bigger shit, you'll be soon to get a taste
your tryin to do the same^, but with the size around your waste
so ho call me sire, i'm the guy your mom desires
but i wouldn't even flick the bitch..
..cause i'd probably lighter ass on fire
now retire, cause for you to come fresh, it'd be a long day
hell.. by that time, i'd already have Vol. 2 of RB's mixtape
'n the nets your life, your a no personality havin lame
only thing you seem to Aim for on this site..
..is a fuck'n screen name
i'm better queer, so stfu and whipe off your fucking lips
i'd bend over to take a bow..
..but i'm too scared vlad would grab me by my hips
plus crew jokes suck, ya'll just keep playin w/ ya toys
it's either ya'll are kids @ heart..
..or the vatican't stop touching little boys
you make brittle noise, w/ a belittle poise.. god you have no respect
'n i don't need VT's capitol to Montpelier head off your fucking neck
your full of threats, against this vet, 'n i'm a win, i think?
cause we hate Vlad so much..
..he'll Tempus not to even look at his battle link
i'm a beat you all around, i'm on top, while your on the ground
on a buildin w/ a penny for your thoughts..
..hoping it hits you on the way down

[I Got Pwnd]

Lol.

U Got Huge Confidence,So Ill Smash em In a Larger Fashion.
Cuz People only Became Intrested In Un,Right After Sean Carter Stab'd Him!
Im Laughin,Cuz My Jab will Bag Him An Have Un Spittin Fluid.
Oh,Yes Ur Concepts Come Off The Wall,So Imma Grab & Ram U Threw It!
Damn Ur Stupid,This 1 Round Im Done Clownin ,Its Settle!
But I Hate To Dumb Down My Drop 2 Be Moron His Level.
After This I Have A Hunch Your Gonna Need A Bed Nurse.
You Can See I Only PooL Punches...
...............After You Dive in Head First!
I Know Ur Lifes A Bitch,You Insist To Get That Lady Smacked.
Youngin My Fist Are Like Russ's Lawyers,Knock'Kim Outta His Baby Phat!

i've smelled shit that would blow your mind..

^We All Know You Blow,But I Didnt think It Was From Behind!
He Cant Get Hold of His Lines,Cuz Ur Dealin with A Shark.
An I Cant See You In A Movie,But I Can Eazly Pick Him Apart!
Now The Rest is Blind,Bless His Kind With My Uncanny Mind.
But This Pussy's Hidin In This Thread But Still Showing His Panty Lines!
I Got This Bat. Locked,Send Un Back To His Wack Spot.
Cuz He's Like Pine Tree's....
...Nobody Wants To See this Sap's Drop!
Un's Spits Part Donkey,Like His Drops a Descendant To Asses.
An Sham's #1.....
.....Right After I Put Son As a Dependant On Taxes!
I Cant Stand SHam,So When I Text My Hands Tremble Tense..
Cuz Either Ur Drops Look Wack,Or Its A Close Fam. Ressemblance.

[Vaskez]

i'm already confident i'll win, 'n my verse is just starting
vlad seems to high strung.. for me to have a pinata party
^^meh
i know vlad keeps bad hygien, you flakin me, you wish
cause when you scratched your head, i could've sworn a blizzard hit
^^so he's got dandruff? not harsh
plus i'm on to bigger shit, you'll be soon to get a taste
your tryin to do the same^, but with the size around your waste
^^meh fat diss
so ho call me sire, i'm the guy your mom desires
but i wouldn't even flick the bitch..
..cause i'd probably lighter ass on fire
^^simple wordplay, kinda pointless diss on his mum
now retire, cause for you to come fresh, it'd be a long day
hell.. by that time, i'd already have Vol. 2 of RB's mixtape
^^simple not witty
'n the nets your life, your a no personality havin lame
only thing you seem to Aim for on this site..
..is a fuck'n screen name
^^ok
i'm better queer, so stfu and whipe off your fucking lips
i'd bend over to take a bow..
..but i'm too scared vlad would grab me by my hips
^^non witty kinda played gay diss
plus crew jokes suck, ya'll just keep playin w/ ya toys
it's either ya'll are kids @ heart..
..or the vatican't stop touching little boys
^^ok wordplay, but kinda gay punch concept sayin his crew touch little boys
you make brittle noise, w/ a belittle poise.. god you have no respect
'n i don't need VT's capitol to Montpelier head off your fucking neck
^^aight, but montpelier aint pronounced how ya used it here, heh nice try though
your full of threats, against this vet, 'n i'm a win, i think?
cause we hate Vlad so much..
..he'll Tempus not to even look at his battle link
^^is that supposed to be tempt us? kinda forced. aight diss
i'm a beat you all around, i'm on top, while your on the ground
on a buildin w/ a penny for your thoughts..
..hoping it hits you on the way down
^^ok not too bad but coulda bee worded better

no hate, ya know we've always been cool, just my honest opinion. You needa spice up ya rhymes a bit cos these were almost all single syllable and just come with some better wording and wittier concepts.

vs.

U Got Huge Confidence,So Ill Smash em In a Larger Fashion.
Cuz People only Became Intrested In Un,Right After Sean Carter Stab'd Him!
^^ok
Im Laughin,Cuz My Jab will Bag Him An Have Un Spittin Fluid.
Oh,Yes Ur Concepts Come Off The Wall,So Imma Grab & Ram U Threw It!
^^nah
Damn Ur Stupid,This 1 Round Im Done Clownin ,Its Settle!
But I Hate To Dumb Down My Drop 2 Be Moron His Level.
^^ok bit of associative wordplay, to the point, so aight bar
After This I Have A Hunch Your Gonna Need A Bed Nurse.
You Can See I Only PooL Punches...
...............After You Dive in Head First!
^^ok ya tried associative wordplay, but the bar makes no sense logically
I Know Ur Lifes A Bitch,You Insist To Get That Lady Smacked.
Youngin My Fist Are Like Russ's Lawyers,Knock'Kim Outta His Baby Phat!
^^ok
Quote:
Originally Posted by i'm untold
i've smelled shit that would blow your mind..

^We All Know You Blow,But I Didnt think It Was From Behind!
^^noooo
He Cant Get Hold of His Lines,Cuz Ur Dealin with A Shark.
An I Cant See You In A Movie,But I Can Eazly Pick Him Apart!
^^apart/ a part wordplay is played, but this wasn't a bad flip
Now The Rest is Blind,Bless His Kind With My Uncanny Mind.
But This Pussy's Hidin In This Thread But Still Showing His Panty Lines!
^^lol, okish
I Got This Bat. Locked,Send Un Back To His Wack Spot.
Cuz He's Like Pine Tree's....
...Nobody Wants To See this Sap's Drop!
^^not too bad actually
Un's Spits Part Donkey,Like His Drops a Descendant To Asses.
An Sham's #1.....
.....Right After I Put Son As a Dependant On Taxes!
^^hah, aight but needed much better wording
I Cant Stand SHam,So When I Text My Hands Tremble Tense..
Cuz Either Ur Drops Look Wack,Or Its A Close Fam. Ressemblance.
^^not too bad

Vlad came with more direct punches and better rhymes, so I think he took this relatively easily. But Vlad, cut out that capitalising of every word, it looks wack as hell

v/ Vlad

[Untold.]

dude.. vask. if you don't get the punch, ask.

the "vatican't" line was a play on his crew. "the vatican". hence why i used it and montpelire may not be pronounced the same in the UK as we do in the us, or atleast how i say it. so, whatevers. good battle.

ups.

[Vaskez]

uh ok I looked in his sig and saw The Office, and no mention of the Vatican, and didn't see your edit till after I voted. Sorry about that one, I corrected the feedback

As for Montpelier I was thinkin of how the french pronounce it, since it's a french city, so the pronounciation should be universal.

Edit: ok just did a quick search and realised that Montpelier is another city name stolen from Europe in Vermont, lol. I only heard of (and been to) the french one before lmao

[Untold.]

for real? thats a french city. that shits in vermont.. thats in the united states, dude. hence why i put VT. maybe the us just put an american slang on it or something. but, yea..

[Born To Kill]

i'm already confident i'll win, 'n my verse is just starting
vlad seems to high strung.. for me to have a pinata party
Eh...nice-ish opener...
i know vlad keeps bad hygien, you flakin me, you wish
cause when you scratched your head, i could've sworn a blizzard hit
Gross...but aight...
plus i'm on to bigger shit, you'll be soon to get a taste
your tryin to do the same^, but with the size around your waste
Decent...
so ho call me sire, i'm the guy your mom desires
but i wouldn't even flick the bitch..
..cause i'd probably lighter ass on fire
Blah...
now retire, cause for you to come fresh, it'd be a long day
hell.. by that time, i'd already have Vol. 2 of RB's mixtape
Funny...
'n the nets your life, your a no personality havin lame
only thing you seem to Aim for on this site..
..is a fuck'n screen name
Blah...
i'm better queer, so stfu and whipe off your fucking lips
i'd bend over to take a bow..
..but i'm too scared vlad would grab me by my hips
Blah...too gay if you include yourself as the fuckee...
plus crew jokes suck, ya'll just keep playin w/ ya toys
it's either ya'll are kids @ heart..
..or the vatican't stop touching little boys
Ok, I guess...
you make brittle noise, w/ a belittle poise.. god you have no respect
'n i don't need VT's capitol to Montpelier head off your fucking neck
Reaching...
your full of threats, against this vet, 'n i'm a win, i think?
cause we hate Vlad so much..
..he'll Tempus not to even look at his battle link
Blah nameplay...
i'm a beat you all around, i'm on top, while your on the ground
on a buildin w/ a penny for your thoughts..
..hoping it hits you on the way down
I get it but it's a bit vague...
Ya need to stress it's a really tall fuckin building.

VS

U Got Huge Confidence,So Ill Smash em In a Larger Fashion.
Cuz People only Became Intrested In Un,Right After Sean Carter Stab'd Him!
Eh...not the greatest opener...
Im Laughin,Cuz My Jab will Bag Him An Have Un Spittin Fluid.
Oh,Yes Ur Concepts Come Off The Wall,So Imma Grab & Ram U Threw It!
Kinda blah...played cliche...
Damn Ur Stupid,This 1 Round Im Done Clownin ,Its Settle!
But I Hate To Dumb Down My Drop 2 Be Moron His Level.
"Moron" is played to death...
After This I Have A Hunch Your Gonna Need A Bed Nurse.
You Can See I Only PooL Punches...
...............After You Dive in Head First!
Blah...
I Know Ur Lifes A Bitch,You Insist To Get That Lady Smacked.
Youngin My Fist Are Like Russ's Lawyers,Knock'Kim Outta His Baby Phat!
Nice-ish...

Quote:
Originally Posted by i'm untold
i've smelled shit that would blow your mind..

^We All Know You Blow,But I Didnt think It Was From Behind!
That was pretty funny...gross...but funny.
He Cant Get Hold of His Lines,Cuz Ur Dealin with A Shark.
An I Cant See You In A Movie,But I Can Eazly Pick Him Apart!
Blah...quit with the played shit!
Now The Rest is Blind,Bless His Kind With My Uncanny Mind.
But This Pussy's Hidin In This Thread But Still Showing His Panty Lines!
Blah...
I Got This Bat. Locked,Send Un Back To His Wack Spot.
Cuz He's Like Pine Tree's....
...Nobody Wants To See this Sap's Drop!
Eh...
Un's Spits Part Donkey,Like His Drops a Descendant To Asses.
An Sham's #1.....
.....Right After I Put Son As a Dependant On Taxes!
Hilarious...I love the flip on this concept!!!
I Cant Stand SHam,So When I Text My Hands Tremble Tense..
Cuz Either Ur Drops Look Wack,Or Its A Close Fam. Ressemblance.
Nice-ish!

I think Vlad just barely edged this...less blah lines than Untold.

[Liljoker5448]

damn that was i sick ass battle for real i think u both killed each other shit for real though i think that shit waz crazzzy

[I Got Pwnd]

Thanx.For The Votes.


Untold..If You Gotta Explain Ur Punch Then...You Know The Rest.

Good Drop Tho',No Hate On My part

[DaTrusHurtz]

i'm already confident i'll win, 'n my verse is just starting
vlad seems to high strung.. for me to have a pinata party
creative, but not hitting that hard
i know vlad keeps bad hygien, you flakin me, you wish
cause when you scratched your head, i could've sworn a blizzard hit
hehe, funny
plus i'm on to bigger shit, you'll be soon to get a taste
your tryin to do the same^, but with the size around your waste
aight, but nothing great for a fat joke
so ho call me sire, i'm the guy your mom desires
but i wouldn't even flick the bitch..
..cause i'd probably lighter ass on fire
kinda pointless wordplay
now retire, cause for you to come fresh, it'd be a long day
hell.. by that time, i'd already have Vol. 2 of RB's mixtape
mixtape shit is really played
'n the nets your life, your a no personality havin lame
only thing you seem to Aim for on this site..
..is a fuck'n screen name
aim shit is also really played
i'm better queer, so stfu and whipe off your fucking lips
i'd bend over to take a bow..
..but i'm too scared vlad would grab me by my hips
nah, kinda weak gay joke
plus crew jokes suck, ya'll just keep playin w/ ya toys
it's either ya'll are kids @ heart..
..or the vatican't stop touching little boys
i liked this crew diss
you make brittle noise, w/ a belittle poise.. god you have no respect
'n i don't need VT's capitol to Montpelier head off your fucking neck
kinda pointless wordplay
your full of threats, against this vet, 'n i'm a win, i think?
cause we hate Vlad so much..
..he'll Tempus not to even look at his battle link
okay, but coulda been a better nameplay
i'm a beat you all around, i'm on top, while your on the ground
on a buildin w/ a penny for your thoughts..
..hoping it hits you on the way down
aight, but doesn't really hit that harshly

vs.

U Got Huge Confidence,So Ill Smash em In a Larger Fashion.
Cuz People only Became Intrested In Un,Right After Sean Carter Stab'd Him!
nah, i just feel there are better nameplays ya coulda done
Im Laughin,Cuz My Jab will Bag Him An Have Un Spittin Fluid.
Oh,Yes Ur Concepts Come Off The Wall,So Imma Grab & Ram U Threw It!
kinda more a statement than a punch
Damn Ur Stupid,This 1 Round Im Done Clownin ,Its Settle!
But I Hate To Dumb Down My Drop 2 Be Moron His Level.
this is kinda played
After This I Have A Hunch Your Gonna Need A Bed Nurse.
You Can See I Only PooL Punches...
...............After You Dive in Head First!
not really much of a diss
I Know Ur Lifes A Bitch,You Insist To Get That Lady Smacked.
Youngin My Fist Are Like Russ's Lawyers,Knock'Kim Outta His Baby Phat!
pretty cool, but don't feel the diss is that harsh
Quote:
Originally Posted by i'm untold
i've smelled shit that would blow your mind..


^We All Know You Blow,But I Didnt think It Was From Behind!
yuck, lol, didn't like this
He Cant Get Hold of His Lines,Cuz Ur Dealin with A Shark.
An I Cant See You In A Movie,But I Can Eazly Pick Him Apart!
apart is kinda played, this was also self-glory ish
Now The Rest is Blind,Bless His Kind With My Uncanny Mind.
But This Pussy's Hidin In This Thread But Still Showing His Panty Lines!
eh, any kind of lines shit is played
I Got This Bat. Locked,Send Un Back To His Wack Spot.
Cuz He's Like Pine Tree's....
...Nobody Wants To See this Sap's Drop!
aight joke i guess tho nothing special
Un's Spits Part Donkey,Like His Drops a Descendant To Asses.
An Sham's #1.....
.....Right After I Put Son As a Dependant On Taxes!
a smart punch, I really liked this, worded a bit indirectly tho
I Cant Stand SHam,So When I Text My Hands Tremble Tense..
Cuz Either Ur Drops Look Wack,Or Its A Close Fam. Ressemblance.
alright, not too bad

Well I've come back to vote on this. Vlad finished okay, and I think the recency effect helped it overcome a lot of very weak bars. Untold came pretty played for the most part, a lot of lines I've seen before, but he started out not bad and as a whole had more decent bars than Vlad did. Vlad, with better wording on some concepts you mighta had this, but a lot of your stuff was very statementish.

Vote - Untold

[Tae Profit]

mixtape line(neva heard it), and vatican't line

v.

Vlad's verse minus the baby phat and apart/a part line.

V/vlad