Every Single Friday.

[Evolve]

Only time will tell how well life will go
This lonely hell smells too ripe to know...
if heaven is sending its light to glow..
& show a path past what my sight beholds
I see.. old habits not dieing fast
I see.. trash lying inside my grasp
The kind that you find in a bottle or flask
The kind that laughs last when you swallow first
The kind that will never surpass my hollow thirst
As i wallow in hurt.. but never throw up the truth
My cold youth over-flowed in cups of juice..
And like a judge..
I would choose to trust the proof.
Always nice..
Yep!!
Like a mic check...
I was one with a deuce.
Each day i'd stayed loose...
hunting for a grey bird..
chasing that goose
I've heard, if you snooze you lose..
and it must have occured..
cause when i think of the past..
a blur is whats produced.
Whats the use..
my view of the future is further confused.
I murdered abuse.. and killed it with spirits.
Devoured its soul whole with every appearence..
at the watering hole.. when i hold a cold beer its..
clearence to disappear with old fears and yes..
I accept my regrets.. its just..
that i forget to ever remember.
And the fact of it is no accident..
I get wrecked like a fender bender.

Another weekend.. when will this weakness end?
Another hangover.. when will the game be over?

Never.

See you all at the liquor store... HOLLA!!!!

[Evolve]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=283064
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...0&page=2&pp=15

[Evolve]

LOL... Some things never change.

[Born To Kill]

Sometimes it seems that way, my man.

Good to see you jotting again...and good to see you doing it here.

About the rhyme...nice, great flow, blah, blah, blah.
Not one of your greatest, but still pretty solid.

Damn, though...you're still writing about this topic?
I guess it's still a familiar one...
I hope not...but whatever get you through the day, ya know?

Anyway...tight Grey Goose reference...that was pretty slick.
Other than that, nothing really stood out on it's own.

Like I said, not near your best...but...
Dope enough though...as always.

Peace, amigo.

[DJRizzle]

Only time will tell how well life will go
This lonely hell smells too ripe to know...
if heaven is sending its light to glow..
& show a path past what my sight beholds

my fav lines nice flow i actually thought the grey goose part was predictable from the lean wit it rock wit it song i heard loose and automatically thought that but its all good nice flow hot alltoghether

[Evolve]

Thanks B2K... Yeah this is still a topic to me because im still inflicted by it. It actually was a piece i wrote a while ago. I know it wasnt near my best.. but i posted it out of bordem

[KªL¡]

yep! nothing new w/ topic, but yea good piece homie, nice flow., i liked how it just seemed to ride out w/o pause, decent imagery nothing major, some decent schemes in areas, pretty dope for the most part, specially when i can agree w/ the topic, dope overall homie, waitin to see more from ya, ~1

[CrosT Over]

nice piece i felt that you had some good imagery through out this piece, structure was on point I felt that at times it was perfectly timed, topik i think has been done numerous times but you added your own angle to it , and made it your own, keep up with this I think your end was a little better than the begining, nice piece look forward to more

[Baron Mynd]

Cool shit, good to see you grasping rhyme scheme and multi-strings a little more now. Lol. This is the first ive read from you in ageeeeeeeeeeees man, you should drop by more often. Lol at somehow fitting "I get wrecked like a fender bender." in there though,

Peace!

[Born To Kill]

Look at that...

This sits all weekend with out a single hit...

Then I hit it up...and 4 more follow.

You're welcome, dude!

[Ether Spitter]

what it do vet hed....these boards are conjured with nuthin but non knowers....you are a knower of self...n hillarious cat...but what else is to be said than dope...you already knw...how i felt was that this was coo beyond the reason that you just took ya ordinary life sitcho n flipped into words of creativity infinitley...i like this shit...
n plus imma deuce of k.a. psi...so u kinda pain an homage...preciate that subtle inquiry...

yo

[Wireless]

Great read...I really enjoyed pretty much everything, it kept me interested the whole way...

If you had one thing to fix, I would say it's probably the vocabulary...this was still a nice OM, and the wording was great...

Not HOF or anything, but nice...

8.0/10...

[th-C]

good rhyme scheme, great vocab.... topic was decent, i dont know if you stayed on topic well enough for an overall great piece but it was def worth reading.. good job

[Evolve]

Thanks for all the feedback. Very insightful

[Nique.]

Whats the use..
my view of the future is further confused.
I murdered abuse.. and killed it with spirits.
Devoured its soul whole with every appearence..
at the watering hole.. when i hold a cold beer its..
clearence to disappear with old fears and yes..
I accept my regrets.. its just..
that i forget to ever remember.
And the fact of it is no accident..
I get wrecked like a fender bender

^I liked this part a lot. This was simple yet a lot of truth was spoken. I never read your old topicals like everyone else in this thread, but I was feeling your internal rhyming and the consistent flow throughout the piece. You didn't really have any imagery, but this topical held it's on. Got straight to the point. Good shit.