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    Dangerous

    Im the wolf in the woods, dont wanna mess with me
    im the cat in the alley, the shadow that you cant see
    slipping behind the enemy lines, like a stealth bomber
    but dropping rhymes
    Or maybe, im dropping bombs on the mic
    blowing your shit apart, thats what i like
    to do, when im standing here facing you
    before long you'll be laid out in bed, like you got the flu

    Your up to your neck in shit, better start digging
    Yourself out the hole that you be resting
    caused by the shit that you be screaming
    while i watch from the sideline, peering and looking
    while my punches be, knocking and hooking
    you shadow into the valley of death, shivering and shaking
    if you dont get eaten you'll be spat out while im spitting
    boy, im like a timebomb, im just waiting and ticking.

    #Tell me what you think

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    hey yo. this was pretty good. the flow was pretty consistent. the structure was uneven. try to keep it even up. some people can keep it straight for the most part. but just try to keep it straight all the way through. the rhymescheme was different but still I liked this. for a beginner it was pretty dope. you got some nice potential. try to encorporate some multies and some new vocabulary in there. switch up the rhyme scheme to. instead of the last word rhymin make it the last two words rhymin.
    overall dope. keep writin and droppin.

    -Peace.

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    Thanks, uppin
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