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Thread: Never been loved

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    Never been loved

    YO SUN I NEVER BEEN LOVED \
    ALWAYS HATED\
    MY MOM SHOULD HAVE TOLD MY POPS NO GLOVE NO LOVE\
    I SHOULD HAVE NEVER BEEN DABATED\
    I KNOW SOME TIMES THE SHIT I SPIT IS RAUNCHY AND FUCKED UP\
    SOME NIGGAS BE LIKE MAN WHEN YOU SPIT THIS SHIT WHAT THE FUCK WAS IN YOUR CUP\
    AND IF I DO WIN A BATTLE ,NIGGAS ALWAYS LIKE MAN THAT NIGGA SUCK\
    SO I SIT BACK AND WRITE MORE FUCKED SHIT SUN LIKE YO WHAT THE FUCK\
    AND IF YOU DONT LIKE A NIGGA THEN BITCH BUCK\
    CUASE EVERY TIMA I LOOSE ANOTHER BATTLE,I JUST SAY THAT SHIT WAS PURE ASS LUCK\
    10 LINES ,15 LINES MAN ITS ALL THE SAME\
    YOU NIGGAS SAY THAT YOU HATE BAD WEATHER ,BUT FUCKING WITH ME YOU MUST LOVE THE RIAN\

    CHORUS:
    IF I WAS NEVER BORN WHO THE FUCK WOULD CARE\
    IF DID NOT TELL NOBODY WOULD THEY NO I DREAD MY HIAR\
    THEY SAY IM A MOTHER FUCKING MONSTA\
    TALKING ALL THAT SHIT,THEN ILL STOMP YA\
    NOT ROLLING WIT A CREW ,NIGGA IM A LONE RANGER\
    WHEN YOU SEE ME IN YOUR HOOD ,RED ALERT NIGGA DANGER\

    SOME SAY I KICK ASS LIKE A KILLER POWER RANGER\
    REARANGE THE FRAME ,SOME SAY I CANT CHANGE YA\
    BUT IM NOT TALKING BOUT PENNYS AND QUATERS\
    IM TALKING BOUT GUTT A NIGGA LIKE A FISH,THEN THROW HIM IN THE WATER\
    ASK HIM HOW IT FEAL\
    WHEN 4 OF YOUR 5 SENSES CUT\
    LEAVE HIM IN THE GAY AREA OF PETERSBURG,SO THE FAGS CAN RAPE HIM IN THE BUT\
    THEY BE ON THAT GAY SHIT,LIKE SWALLOW SOME NUT \
    WAKE UP THE NEXT MORNING WITH A VERY ODD STRUT\

    CHORUS
    IF I WAS NEVER BORN WHO THE FUCK WOULD CARE\
    IF DID NOT TELL NOBODY WOULD THEY NO I DREAD MY HIAR\
    THEY SAY IM A MOTHER FUCKING MONSTA\
    TALKING ALL THAT SHIT,THEN ILL STOMP YA\
    NOT ROLLING WIT A CREW ,NIGGA IM A LONE RANGER\
    WHEN YOU SEE ME IN YOUR HOOD ,RED ALERT NIGGA DANGER\

    YEAH NIGGA,YOU THOUGHT YOU WAS TIGHT .
    FUCKING AMETURES.
    FUCK PUSHA C AND HIS CREW.
    :homo:

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    NONCENTZ AKA WORD~PERFECT noncentz's Avatar
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    Nice Reflecting The All Caps Is Going To Get You Some Shit But This Was A Decent Read I Was Feeling Alot Of Your Content.better Word Flowing Might Help More But This Was Great Work And Showcases Alot Of Potential In You Good Luck.
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    Nice Reflecting The All Caps Is Going To Get You Some Shit But This Was A Decent Read I Was Feeling Alot Of Your Content.better Word Flowing Might Help More But This Was Great Work And Showcases Alot Of Potential In You Good Luck.

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    yo this was aight. you need to work on ya flow. it had a good story. an i feel that way some times so i can relate to it. just next time try to get it to flow better. just keep at it dawg

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    this my boo.......guess who it is

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    Elevate man, that's all I have to say. You definately need to expand on your vocabulary. I can't stress enough, people seem to use the words "Fuck" and "Buck", It kind of annoys me, not to mention the CAPS. The structure and flow was kind of off, I just wasn't feeling it. I know you can do better though, good work.

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    aight drop
    flow ws almost there
    rhymin ws bit simple in places
    strucutre ws alrite
    gd topic, and u did it well
    elevate yo vocab

    keep tryin tho

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    yo thanks for tha good feed back im gone work on my spelling and vocab''

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